Dream, January 2008

We were in a car,
you and me
and her,
crunched uncomfortably together,
three people tied
by passionate
veins of aching blood.
And my knees curled at my chest
in the middle of the backseat,
your face
and hers
in profile against
the windshield.
It wasn’t raining
though
perhaps that would have been
more poignant.
She didn’t speak
to me,
only gave me backwards looks
as if to say…
oh, I don’t know what she’d say
if she could say anything to me:
in the dream,
she spoke only to you.
And there I am,
sweating in the backseat,
tears piercing the corners of my eyes,
and I can’t say
anything.
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June 15, 2010 at 5:07 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Robin. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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June 12, 2010 at 6:44 PM
Interesting write that got my attention and held it...Keep the creative pen flowing..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara
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June 12, 2010 at 11:23 AM
What a position for anyone to find his/herself in at any moment in time. The expression certainly is gasping. Welcome to Poetry Soup and keep writing. Blessings, Joseph
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June 11, 2010 at 8:20 PM
wow, a lonely dream, not able to say what you feel. This would be a fun dream to analyze. Fun to read. thanks for your comment today! LUv, Andrea
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June 11, 2010 at 4:23 PM
Welcome to the Poetry Soup Family ...so enjoyed your creative write tonight ...with luv from the "Sweetheart"
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