Downfall

Suicide is like a storm Thoughts pour Sometimes drizzle But never fully stop People run away from you Scared of what you might do Your thunder is the anger within Loud and strong You can hear it booming in your head Your lightning is like the hope you might have The lightning, it leaves in a flash It leaves you in the storm alone Just like everyone who ran away They ran away from the fury that caves in The possibility of a downfall The possibility of death

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Old Buck

Date: 3/13/2018 12:35:00 PM

Eve: Now I've read all your stuff. Will be looking for something from you again. In the mean time, read some of the other "soupers" stuff. It's always fun to find someone that writes at my level. :o) There aren't many of those on the soup. Most are soooo much better. Still it's fun. oldbuck

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton

Date: 3/2/2018 8:26:00 PM

Fairweather friends abound. Nothing beats a good thunder storm and electric lighting flash that blazes up the room or neighbourhood ... it means you are "ALIVE". Fabulous poem. LOVE IT. Get rid of the spineless wonders and find the one's who get you and will stand firm next to you and walk through the storms besides you. The ones that run away...aren't worth your time girlfriend.

Muhammad Imtiaz

Date: 2/28/2018 12:55:00 PM

HI Eve it is agreat write i like the lines Just like everyone who ran away They ran away from the fury that caves in

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/27/2018 12:08:00 AM

For sure people run away when they don't know how to deal... I find most people, especially nowadays, don't take the time to connect at all - they're more interested in their technology and the people they meet online. And in a way, it's true that online we can connect with kindred spirits - where else could you interact with thousands of poets, for example?!

Lewis Raynes

Date: 2/26/2018 4:50:00 PM

Hi again, the metaphor of lightning is a wonderful exact and relatable thing for me, hope is there and then its gone, in a flash, beautiful thoughts, tame the storm and ride it, beautiful

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/26/2018 1:42:00 PM

There are times when you feel your world is caving in, your looking for answers but there aren't any to be found, but there are always solutions to problems no matter how big or small they are, you are no less important then any one else on this planet always remember that Eve. Tom

Eve Roper

Date: 2/25/2018 3:14:00 PM

Hello Eve, again a very heartfelt write.. time does heal the heart and like before.. hope always comes with warmth and soon faith. Writing your emotions does help , but we are also here if you need to talk to anyone of us.. with our love... Hugs Eve

Robertina B.

Date: 2/24/2018 4:11:00 PM

Amazing!! Well done!