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Don'T Go Riding On That Train

Lyrics sung by Johnny Cash in "The Long Black Train"

"I said cling to the Father and his Holy name,
And don't go ridin' on that long black train."


there's a conductor waiting to take your ticket for a pleasure ride. . . johnny cash said no can do his chariot is the clouds For the TRAINS AND FANTASY Contest of Mystic Rose
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Horne Avatar
August 19, 2015 at 3:12 PM
love this - so glad to see it was a winner
May Avatar
August 17, 2015 at 4:45 PM
Very nice tanka Andrea...love the end line...best wishes
Meade Avatar
August 16, 2015 at 11:34 PM
I have ridden the long black train! Much rather ride a train with you! Your words once again -- entertain with a twist of joy!
Duncan Avatar
August 13, 2015 at 7:25 PM
I like this flow, never was too fond of Johnny Cash though. Nice win. So I take it you like my new poem :)
Callus Avatar
August 13, 2015 at 2:55 PM
Congratulations on yet another win, Andrea:) I was thinking along the same lines as you, but never got round to finishing my contest entry! I had "Last train to San Fernando" in mind. // paul
Peranteau Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 1:51 PM
Awesome entry Andrea ! I loved this recognition to my buddy J.R., and though I love this song of his scaring the heebeegeebees inta me; satan riding that black train, I like another reference of his when he hears the train's whistle blowing in, "Folsum Prison blues"! Good one dear poet...have an awesome creative day you woman ! *smiles* love ya, james...man
Austin Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 11:39 AM
I hear that whistle a warnin me and I'll stay at home, thank ya. Good stuff. Love, daver
Tagore Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 8:04 AM
Awsome! Great imagery... Congrats!!... Bobby
Breidenthal Avatar
August 11, 2015 at 4:16 PM
Beautifully written Andrea!! Love the personality in this piece. Always, Laura
Nance Avatar
August 11, 2015 at 3:38 PM
Oh hey I didn't even realize this was closed and judged yet...look at that..grats on your win!!! :)
Nance Avatar
August 11, 2015 at 3:37 PM
Ahh nicely done! I have not been able to conceive a poem for this contests, which is weird since I am obsessed with trains...yours in a great tanka!
Neels Avatar
August 11, 2015 at 1:14 PM
This is just awesome Andrea, congratulations on your win in Mystic 's contest as well ;) hope you have a fabulous week!
A  Avatar
August 10, 2015 at 11:51 PM
AWESOME WIN....SKAT
Hamilton Avatar
August 10, 2015 at 6:43 PM
I love Johnny Cash especially I walk the line Andrea great pen gl in contest hugs 7
Muideen Avatar
August 10, 2015 at 5:46 PM
A well written piece, I love it, I flows smoothly. Good luck.........A.M.
Inman Avatar
August 10, 2015 at 8:15 AM
Nicely done Andrea.
Sathasivam Avatar
August 10, 2015 at 2:14 AM
Excellent. Enjoyed your write and creative. Thanks for sharing it.
A. Sharma Avatar
August 10, 2015 at 1:23 AM
Congrats on ur awesome winning poem Andrea! A unique take!
Vaso Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 11:50 PM
Wow, loved this and what is funny just by chance I was listening a Johnny Cash song!!
Johnson Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 10:29 PM
The cloak of darkness is it's name. Don't go riding that long black train. You'll know when you should walk away. Everything that's bright and new will suddenly look grey.
La France Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 8:00 PM
Andrea, this is so creative, congratulations and thanks for visiting my ravaged poem
Roper Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 1:21 PM
Fascinating poem, a 7 congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
Kendrick Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 1:05 PM
Good one..I enjoyed your faith based work..Thanks for stopping by..It is always a pleasure to see your reviews..Sara
Muideen Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 6:07 AM
Lovely write......A.M.
Muideen Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 1:44 AM
A lovely write Andrea, Is beautiful and excellence.........A.M.
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