Robert Pettit Poet Rhyme

Don'T Follow Patches

I know a certain event has you feeling down.
There was a sudden death of a girl in town.
She was floating in the river past the coal yard.
You took your neighbor’s words quite hard.

Gossip flourishes in this old shanty village.
Living in this place is hardly a privilege.
Rumors have it you were in love with this girl.
Among the lumps of coal, she was a pearl.

Her parents hated you, and yours despised her.
They never wanted to see you together.
You attempted to see her.  I know you tried.
She thought she lost you, and it led to her suicide.

It is quite unfortunate that “Patches” is now gone.
Do not take your own life.  You need to carry on.

Based on the hit song of yesteryear "Patches" by Dickey Lee

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Sierra Biersack February 4, 2011 at 11:06 PM nice poem and yeah it is close to mine. and btw im not serious bout suicide of cource i wud never do that god has plans for me and i dont want to ruin them

Francine Roberts January 11, 2011 at 10:37 PM another great song you have penned a tribute to, well done ( and you must be bored tonight in the snow to be working your way through my poetry, thank you so much for your comments)

Carolyn Devonshire January 10, 2011 at 4:46 PM I remember "Patches," Robert, and it was a tear-jerker for me when I was a little girl. Good advice in the last line. Nicely done to compliment the song. Love, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich January 10, 2011 at 4:40 PM robert, I just can't recall this song although the title looks familar. Am rushed; otherwise I would probably look up the tune. This reminded me of that song from 60's or 70's that they made a movie out. Gosh what was it? Me and Billy Mcalister throwing something off the Tallahasse bridge. That's all that is coming to me! I know I got that wrong. haha. LUv, Andrea

Andrea Dietrich January 10, 2011 at 4:40 PM robert, I just can't recall this song although the title looks familar. Am rushed; otherwise I would probably look up the tune. This reminded me of that song from 60's or 70's that they made a movie out. Gosh what was it? Me and Billy Mcalister throwing something off the Tallahasse bridge. That's all that is coming to me! I know I got that wrong. haha. LUv, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 10, 2011 at 4:31 PM Wonderful story Robert... very deeply emotional and moving premise luv.. how sad if true and this event took place in reality... I do not recall this song u mention but your poem is amazing ..luv.. enjoyed ...

Deb Wilson January 10, 2011 at 3:44 PM very sad but a good depiction of hopelessness..take care~Deb

Jancarl Campi January 10, 2011 at 2:42 PM Thanks for your comments on my work. This is a sad poem. Suicide is sad as they are no true answers. Jancarl

Sara Kendrick January 10, 2011 at 2:33 PM Good rhyme and rhythm..Good story about the topic of suicide..Enjoyed reading this one this afternoon..Your presence at my work sent me a ray of sunshine this dismal afternoon..Sara