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Dont ask me to change my poetry again

I got a bad review,a terrible review "Give it up" it said Please stop writting, you stupid fool We don't want to read anymore of your **** Your wasting your time Your poetry's crap Can't even spell, punctuations non existent So I'll write for my fans I've only got two But they like my work so f..k you I'll put pen to paper Join beautiful words Write a poem for the masses I could use big words I don't understand, look to the dictionary for every line Leave a blankness in your head Wondering what the hell it said From this poem your feel astounded Magnificent,marvellous, absolutly gorgeous All the beautiful words I've put down Look lovely, sound wonderful But don't mean a thing I'll tell you what is little-known What school is like if you actually go I never went to college you see No chance of a university degree Pretty much what you see Is what you tend to get with me I don't know how to write poetry All I know is what's inside of me The rawness, blatant truth Sometimes happy, mostly not My writing will shock Make you see some truth As raw as possible, this is what I do I'll never sugar coat things Make them easier to swallow The big wide worlds out there and its ****ING horrible African children dying in pain Their mother's **** sliced off,raped and maimed Our boys fighting an endless war So those countries can have much more Children blowing themselves up As their told its the way to God This governments *****people are freezing As our war veterans can't afford the heating What kind of world is this that we live When people are starving,dying and sick Don't ask me to change my poetry again Or I'll shout it from the roof of your office building

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 9/23/2014 11:14:00 PM
Who knew? Good for you. Love this one to.
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Date: 1/8/2014 9:04:00 AM
Then you've been showing your writes to the wrong readers. For me, poetry is exactly this. Sure, do what you want with form, rhyme or iambic meter, but a poem aint nothing without the raw, unedited emotion of the moment. It shouldn't be tamed. And just for the record, you now have 3 fans
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Date: 1/14/2014 5:51:00 AM
Thankyou love
Date: 1/7/2014 8:22:00 PM
Hi, Great ' In your face' poem and why the hell not. More please.
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Date: 1/14/2014 5:51:00 AM
Thankyou.
Date: 1/7/2014 2:24:00 PM
Yeah BOY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! STAND UP AND SHOUT IT TO THE WHOLE WORLD!!!!!!!...".NO ONE" has the RIGHT to judge you...SENSES are nature to us,it can't be learned inside of institutions..so why do we need to change our way of expression???????...godd***n them aLL!!!!! ...WRITE,FaLL in LOVE with your addiction...its NOT about their opinions..its our THOUGHTS what matter most!!! ^_*,your #1 FAN, AiyaH :)
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Date: 1/14/2014 5:48:00 AM
Thankyou love