Dont Ask Me To Change My Poetry Again

I got a bad review,a terrible review 
"Give it up" it said
Please stop writting, you stupid fool
We don't want to read anymore of your ****
Your wasting your time
Your poetry's crap
Can't even spell, punctuations non existent
So I'll write for my fans I've only got two
But they like my work so f..k you

I'll put pen to paper 
Join beautiful words
Write a poem for the masses
I could use big words
I don't understand, look to the dictionary for every line
Leave a blankness in your head 
Wondering what the hell it said

From this poem your feel astounded
Magnificent,marvellous, absolutly gorgeous
All the beautiful words I've put down
Look lovely, sound wonderful 
But don't mean a thing

I'll tell you what is little-known
What school is like if you actually go
I never went to college you see
No chance of a university degree
Pretty much what you see
Is what you tend to get with me

I don't know how to write poetry 
All I know is what's inside of me
The rawness, blatant truth
Sometimes happy, mostly not
My writing will shock
Make you see some truth
As raw as possible, this is what I do
I'll never sugar coat things
Make them easier to swallow
The big wide worlds out there and its ****ING horrible
African children dying in pain
Their mother's **** sliced off,raped and maimed
Our boys fighting an endless war
So those countries can have much more
Children blowing themselves up
As their told its the way to God
This governments *****people are freezing 
As our war veterans can't afford the heating
What kind of world is this that we live
When people are starving,dying and sick

Don't ask me to change my poetry again
Or I'll shout it from the roof of your office building

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 9/23/2014 11:14:00 PM
Who knew? Good for you. Love this one to.
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Date: 1/8/2014 9:04:00 AM
Then you've been showing your writes to the wrong readers. For me, poetry is exactly this. Sure, do what you want with form, rhyme or iambic meter, but a poem aint nothing without the raw, unedited emotion of the moment. It shouldn't be tamed. And just for the record, you now have 3 fans
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Little Known Nothing
Date: 1/14/2014 5:51:00 AM
Thankyou love
Date: 1/7/2014 8:22:00 PM
Hi, Great ' In your face' poem and why the hell not. More please.
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Little Known Nothing
Date: 1/14/2014 5:51:00 AM
Thankyou.
Date: 1/7/2014 2:24:00 PM
Yeah BOY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! STAND UP AND SHOUT IT TO THE WHOLE WORLD!!!!!!!...".NO ONE" has the RIGHT to judge you...SENSES are nature to us,it can't be learned inside of institutions..so why do we need to change our way of expression???????...godd***n them aLL!!!!! ...WRITE,FaLL in LOVE with your addiction...its NOT about their opinions..its our THOUGHTS what matter most!!! ^_*,your #1 FAN, AiyaH :)
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Little Known Nothing
Date: 1/14/2014 5:48:00 AM
Thankyou love
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