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Domestic Violence - Fictional Poem

He used his fists, I heard him shout
“clearing those temper demons out”

A bloodied nose, a blackened eye
Drink turns him into a violent guy

Black bruises fade, so does their pain
But the mental scars always remain

I want to leave, I’ve tried and tried
He drags me back, oh how I’ve cried

Held captive - I am a beaten wife
Who can’t escape this abusive life

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06/09/2023

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Sotto Poet Date: 6/13/2023 3:11:00 PM Back with congratulations on your win with this beautiful poem, Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/19/2023 2:51:00 AM Thanks Sotto xx:-) hugs Jan xx

Miranda Hawley Date: 6/13/2023 2:40:00 PM By the way congratulations on your win in my contest! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/19/2023 2:51:00 AM Thanks I'm so thrilled to be on the list:-) hugs Jan xx

Miranda Hawley Date: 6/13/2023 2:38:00 PM I am so glad you put fictional poem right beside the title of this. Abuse is not funny, nor is it even kosher. There are so many resources to help a person in an abusive situation and I hope that the person who reads this realizes that there is help and hope. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/19/2023 2:50:00 AM Thanks Miranda:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel Date: 6/11/2023 6:49:00 AM Great writing, Jan, it's so difficult for many to leave abuse, you have portrayed it well... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/11/2023 7:21:00 AM domestic abuse isn't just physical mental torture is on a massive scale with many abused to scared to try and break free and so often they have been forced to drop family and friends and only have their abuser who makes them feel so worthless they have to stay:-( hugs Jan xx

Nancy Kaufman Date: 6/10/2023 2:47:00 PM Hi Jan, I'm glad you clarified this or some one might have scheduled a "Wellness check" on you. Domestic violence is no laughing matter though and I've been thinking a lot of how brave Tina Turner was lately. Very well penned piece. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/11/2023 7:19:00 AM thanks for dropping by Nancy, yes its a subject we should write on more often. hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer Date: 6/10/2023 11:44:00 AM It’s amazing how perfectly you’ve conveyed this horrible subject in perfect rhyming couplets, Jan! Bravo! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/10/2023 11:55:00 AM I am more used to writing humour as you know, but this line jumped out at me and I have to go with my heart when i write:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane Date: 6/10/2023 6:09:00 AM Not that it ever needed proof that you write more than poop poetry, but here it is. Wonderfully told in sad verses, Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/10/2023 7:15:00 AM Thanks Lin, I know I love my witty poems but I can write the occasional serious one too, the line jumped out at me as soon as I read the choices last night and I had been thinking of a domestic abuse theme earlier in the week. I am not just a Poop poet as you so rightly say but today a souper suggested to me via soup mail I should do a contest on pooh lol:-) oh the challenge is so tempting lol hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort Date: 6/10/2023 4:52:00 AM Jan, I always have thought people should really know who their partners are. Love makes interesting bedfellows. There is no excuse for violence anywhere. We would hope this didn't happen, but alas. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/10/2023 4:57:00 AM I know from friends how bad alcohol addiction can be and their partners are like jeckyl and hyde:-(

Sotto Poet Date: 6/9/2023 4:18:00 PM Jan, your profound understanding and masterful use of imagery beautifully conveyed your ideas. Your fictional poem delves into the profound truth of women's struggles at home. Best of luck in the contest. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/10/2023 2:03:00 AM It's a sad state of affairs on so many levels. I just hope my poem highlights the issue in a positive way. hugs Jan xxx