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Do You Remember

Somewhere in a dream, 
Serene and blissful from the start
It comes to me again
The two of us in love, and eagerly alone
Breathlessly naive', and blissfully assured
that we would be as one
...that nothing in the world outside,  could ever be compared

Two bikes took rest against a tree
We climbed the nearest hill, 
Through foxtails, deep and thickets, high
Along a creek bed, far and wide,
wading through warm granite stones
Slick and wet, with velvet moss
littered deep with autumn leaves, and the urgent tender years

My darling...do you remember...?
We were like children, we marveled and swooned
at the shapes of the clouds in the lavender sky
changing their forms in a wink of the eye
We were wild with love, that stirred the stones
Discovering firsts, and thirsts unknown

Layers of years, now whisper here, 
Imprisoned in this hidden place, with every breath of air

Not a fluent time that bends or moves
...but time fully reasoned, with ancient eyes
Unwound of it's youthful eyes and loves
Where dulcet words plucked out of space
Have not been tinged by autumn's breath
And innocence is scattered like leaves upon the breeze
And lingers, ...with a sweet wistful sigh

We who once made love, ...a thousand skies ago
Have slept with tossing shadows and lilting cries
Still tremble with the memory

Oh, ...I know the subtle ways of empty dreams
And I shall go by silent lanes and leave this day....and you....
                                                                                     ....timeless here



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Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Trichet Avatar
July 31, 2015 at 1:33 AM
My oh my, this has to be one of the best Free Verse writes...Your choice of words and imagery flow so wonderfully - poetry to behold Carrie! I applaud your pen...and again. Congrats and fave for me
A. Sharma Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 10:50 PM
Awesome pen Carrie! Powerful words n wonderful expressions n here u r wid a great win dear! Big congrats!
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 10:24 PM
This poem is more beautiful than I remember, Carrie, and one of my faves...congrats on your win in Frank's contest!! Hugs, Rhonda
Wigley Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 10:04 PM
Brilliantly descriptive, warm, loving, tender, precious memories, absolutely lovely. A work to be very proud of, Carrie, congratulations, well done, a #7 and a fave for me, thanks, Viv x
Allison Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 8:54 PM
breathtakingly beautiful Carrie - many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx 7
Merryman Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 5:31 PM
Carrie, you have literally painted a scene with your words! This is so beautiful! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
Delaney Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 3:59 PM
Congratulations Carrie: A beautiful tale of young love. SuZ
A  Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 12:22 PM
Carrie,, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
Roper Avatar
July 27, 2015 at 11:55 AM
Carrie, beautiful descriptive imagery a 7, congratulations on you win. Hugs Eve
Gildersleeve Avatar
May 24, 2013 at 7:08 PM
Carrie you have a wonderful way of expression and imagery in your poems. Congratulations on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie
A   Avatar
May 24, 2013 at 1:43 PM
CARRIE, congratulations with your winning poem, in the "Incurable Romantic" contest... ~xox* Linda
A  Avatar
February 25, 2013 at 4:59 PM
a nice poem Carrie ' congratulations with your sweet win 'take care~SKAT
Patrikar Avatar
February 4, 2013 at 6:55 AM
fantastic work! congrats on ur win
Kovacs Avatar
January 20, 2013 at 3:31 PM
This is beautiful. The imagery is fantastic. Excellent writing.
Macfarlane Avatar
January 19, 2013 at 12:24 PM
Lovely and beautiful write Carrie.....congrats on your awesome win! Hugs
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
January 19, 2013 at 6:24 AM
congrats Carrie luv sorry a bit belated xx
Dillard Avatar
January 18, 2013 at 2:24 PM
Carrie, This one should rank an 8 at least. You have this marvelous way of expressing thought and word with interpretive meaning that easily applies to all our lives. Your genius is evident in this selection and you deserve your placing at the top. I'll find a spot for this one in my favorites! RAY
Veetil Avatar
January 16, 2013 at 12:59 AM
Breathtaking.... Congrats on your win....
Dietrich Avatar
January 15, 2013 at 9:53 PM
breathtakingly beautiful, carrie. And right where it should be placed. At the top of this list. congratulations.
Bunton Avatar
January 15, 2013 at 8:15 PM
Beautiful! Congrats!
Roberts Avatar
January 15, 2013 at 6:45 PM
loved it Carrie Congrats ....Seren
Guzzi Avatar
January 15, 2013 at 5:17 PM
One dreamy write Carrie. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
J.T. Avatar
January 15, 2013 at 5:14 PM
Nicely done and congrats on your win with this poem - JH
Liwayway Avatar
January 15, 2013 at 11:42 AM
Congratulations on your grand win friend Carrie :) It's an excellent write. Cheers!!! Maria
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January 15, 2013 at 8:12 AM
Good morning Carrie, your words and poem are like the ending..... Timeless~ congratulations with the wonderful win in Frank's ""DO YOU REMEMBER? " contest. have yourself a nice day~ xox~PD
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