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Distant Shores

O what heavy price for independence
Valiant men dying in fierce triathlon
Battling to their last breath for its defense
As they protect the walls of Babylon

Laying down their lives with no shade of guilt
While powerless the great sun god watches
Its ravaged empire pillaged and rebuilt
Over layered bodies, bones and swatches

My tears taste bitter as you sail away
Cross daunting distant shores of Babylon
Wishing there were a way you could delay
And somehow all our troubles would be gone

My heavy heart on the wing of a swan
Amid hanging gardens of Babylon



AP: 1st place 2021

Submitted on June 18, 2018 for contest DISTANT SHORES sponsored by ROBERT HAIGH  -  RANKED 6TH

Copyright © Line Gauthier | Year Posted 2018

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Sonia Walker Date: 6/24/2018 7:46:00 PM Line, congratulations on your placement. A ribbon of history runs so beautifully through your poem. ~ Sonia Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/24/2018 9:37:00 PM Thank you, Sonia. Most appreciated.

Susan Gentry Date: 6/24/2018 6:26:00 PM Congratulations on your win with this well-written historical piece of history. Well done. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/24/2018 9:38:00 PM Thank you, Susan. Most appreciated.

Janice Canerdy Date: 6/22/2018 8:16:00 AM So lovely . . . and sad. CONGRATS, Line! Janice Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/22/2018 9:16:00 AM Thanks, Janice. Most appreciated.

Fauxcroft Wade Date: 6/22/2018 7:37:00 AM Amazingly well written and love the imagery created within it. Congrats on your win. Faux Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/22/2018 9:17:00 AM Thank you so much, Fauxcroft. Most appreciated.

Gershon Wolf Date: 6/19/2018 9:10:00 PM Wow! Such an ingenious, innovative way to portray 'distant shores, Line! Babylon! This takes my breath away... and as all good poetry does, makes me think, 'Gosh, why didn't I write it?!… (After all, I learn the Babylonian Talmud every day and can actually speak conversational Aramaic in certain registers). This should do really, really well in the contest, methinks. Bravo, Line! ~ Gershon Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/19/2018 10:03:00 PM Thank you SO much, Gershon. Means a lot to me.

Tom Cunningham Date: 6/18/2018 2:39:00 PM Well written sonnet line, it would seem mankind is not happy unless fighting some war or other. He will never change. Good luck. Tom Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/18/2018 2:48:00 PM I hear you, Tom. Sad state of affairs. Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment.

Charles Messina Date: 6/18/2018 1:50:00 PM Beautiful Line! So many worthless wars...Excellent write my dear friend...Best of luck in the contest!...Charlie Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/18/2018 2:48:00 PM Thank you, Charles. Most appreciated.

Heidi Sands Date: 6/18/2018 11:43:00 AM Powerful Line!.. and I love the ending . Well done :) Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/18/2018 1:04:00 PM Thank you so much, Heidi. Most appreciated.

Winged Warrior Date: 6/18/2018 11:14:00 AM Heartfelt my friend...worthless wars on distant shores...great write Line...love & light...^WW^ Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/18/2018 1:05:00 PM Indeed. Thank you so much for your lovely visit and comment, WW.

Probir Gupta Date: 6/18/2018 10:07:00 AM This is indeed well written ... Best wishes ... Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 6/18/2018 1:05:00 PM Thank you so much, Probir. Most appreciated.