Line Gauthier Poet Sonnet

Distant Shores

O what heavy price for independence
Valiant men dying in fierce triathlon
Battling to their last breath for its defense
As they protect the walls of Babylon

Laying down their lives with no shade of guilt
While powerless the great sun god watches
Its ravaged empire pillaged and rebuilt
Over layered bodies, bones and swatches

My tears taste bitter as you sail away
Cross daunting distant shores of Babylon
Wishing there were a way you could delay
And somehow all our troubles would be gone

My heavy heart on the wing of a swan
Amid hanging gardens of Babylon



AP: 1st place 2021

Submitted on June 18, 2018 for contest DISTANT SHORES sponsored by ROBERT HAIGH  -  RANKED 6TH

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Sonia Walker June 24, 2018 at 7:46 PM Line, congratulations on your placement. A ribbon of history runs so beautifully through your poem. ~ Sonia Line Gauthier June 24, 2018 at 9:37 PM Thank you, Sonia. Most appreciated.

Susan Gentry June 24, 2018 at 6:26 PM Congratulations on your win with this well-written historical piece of history. Well done. Line Gauthier June 24, 2018 at 9:38 PM Thank you, Susan. Most appreciated.

Janice Canerdy June 22, 2018 at 8:16 AM So lovely . . . and sad. CONGRATS, Line! Janice Line Gauthier June 22, 2018 at 9:16 AM Thanks, Janice. Most appreciated.

Fauxcroft Wade June 22, 2018 at 7:37 AM Amazingly well written and love the imagery created within it. Congrats on your win. Faux Line Gauthier June 22, 2018 at 9:17 AM Thank you so much, Fauxcroft. Most appreciated.

Gershon Wolf June 19, 2018 at 9:10 PM Wow! Such an ingenious, innovative way to portray 'distant shores, Line! Babylon! This takes my breath away... and as all good poetry does, makes me think, 'Gosh, why didn't I write it?!… (After all, I learn the Babylonian Talmud every day and can actually speak conversational Aramaic in certain registers). This should do really, really well in the contest, methinks. Bravo, Line! ~ Gershon Line Gauthier June 19, 2018 at 10:03 PM Thank you SO much, Gershon. Means a lot to me.

Tom Cunningham June 18, 2018 at 2:39 PM Well written sonnet line, it would seem mankind is not happy unless fighting some war or other. He will never change. Good luck. Tom Line Gauthier June 18, 2018 at 2:48 PM I hear you, Tom. Sad state of affairs. Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment.

Charles Messina June 18, 2018 at 1:50 PM Beautiful Line! So many worthless wars...Excellent write my dear friend...Best of luck in the contest!...Charlie Line Gauthier June 18, 2018 at 2:48 PM Thank you, Charles. Most appreciated.

Heidi Sands June 18, 2018 at 11:43 AM Powerful Line!.. and I love the ending . Well done :) Line Gauthier June 18, 2018 at 1:04 PM Thank you so much, Heidi. Most appreciated.

Winged Warrior June 18, 2018 at 11:14 AM Heartfelt my friend...worthless wars on distant shores...great write Line...love & light...^WW^ Line Gauthier June 18, 2018 at 1:05 PM Indeed. Thank you so much for your lovely visit and comment, WW.

Probir Gupta June 18, 2018 at 10:07 AM This is indeed well written ... Best wishes ... Line Gauthier June 18, 2018 at 1:05 PM Thank you so much, Probir. Most appreciated.