Disperse These Cretins!

Brisk
breeze blows
before grim 
gray gargoyle clouds
explode with static glee
rinsing the joyous sweat from
fleeing parents and progeny
scattering like insects in the spray
of annoyance at their sheer existence.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Brown Avatar
June 21, 2010 at 7:07 AM
Congratulations on your win in Andrea Dietrich's contest "Etheree Me" Gerard. Love, Carol
Spence Sr Avatar
June 20, 2010 at 7:31 PM
I love the natural flow of this poem and the toch of alliteration. Congratulations on your success in the contest. Blessings, Joseph
Johnson Avatar
June 20, 2010 at 7:11 PM
Nice build up to the last surprising line. Congratulations on your hm. Love, Joyce
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June 20, 2010 at 3:13 PM
Nice use of alliteration for a creative perspective. Congratulations on being a winner in Andrea's contest. Enjoy your success. Keep that pen flowing. Karen
Dietrich Avatar
June 20, 2010 at 4:15 AM
Thanks so much for participating in my contest and congrats on your HM. LUv, Andrea
Freeman Avatar
June 13, 2010 at 3:29 PM
Cool Ethree Gerard, You should do well with this in Andrea's amazing contest. I left for you my response to your comment on my own Etheree. Agape, Moses
Sweetheart Avatar
June 13, 2010 at 2:33 PM
EXCELLENT Gerard.. what an exciting theme for the contest for Andrea... she will luv this entry..much good luck and success ... I also did a blog on Saint Anthony too..if u care to look.. I have been to Padua in Italy where the Basilica was built and his tongue lies in repose... u are the second guy today who has commented so eloquently on my lyric song and the blog is good too.. always so nice to see your name on my comments list Gerard... with luv from the "SWeetheart"
Anderson Avatar
June 13, 2010 at 12:08 PM
Good luck in the contest, Gerard. I'm sure it's a winner....Later, Jimmy
Mehta Avatar
June 12, 2010 at 8:54 PM
A wonderful Senryu. Good luck in the contest
Haick Avatar
June 12, 2010 at 7:40 PM
As always, perfect form, great imagery..goes to my favs...Hey Gerard, I posted my first Blog today..so pls go read it and leave a comment when you have some time, ok? Thanks...Peace, Audrey
Devonshire Avatar
June 12, 2010 at 3:37 PM
Really like the way you captivate the imagination with this scene, Gerard. Excellent etheree! Enjoyed the alliteration in the first four lines as well. Love, Carolyn
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