Disorientation

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Contest: Pick-A-Title, Vol 39 Sponsor: Edward Ibeh Date Posted : 27-9-23 # 3 Disorientation.

.              O                          A
       S          R                  T       T
   I                    I          N             I
D                           E                      O
                                                        N

Befuzzled, 
                I wander 
          and                    
wonder                               

Climbing 
            stairs up
                        and  under                     

Zigzagging 
                   along 
a corridor,
                In  
the 
window
                   and 
                                   out 
                                             the  
door

Feeling 
           lightheaded 
with a 
lead 
             foot

Covered 
         In
            snow 
                the 
                    color
 of soot.

Knowing
       my 
                
bus will                      
                  come   soon
I  
   take a 
            taxi, 
                    to          the 
                                           moon

        Now 
my 
      money 
        has 
              all been 
                          spent

I           take  
a spoonful                      of 
                      disorient

To            decide 
      which             way to go,
                I dread

I must                  find my   
           way back                  to bed
I  
  get 
       off 
               the  
                    train              at the 
                         next station
  
I think                            this is called
             disorientation.

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 10/15/2023 10:08:00 AM

SV, now this is wonderfully creative! I love the disorienting format, too. Very clever. Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest!

Speaks Volumes
Date: 10/15/2023 2:16:00 PM

I learned it from a Master of Being Unique ! ;)

Jay Narain

Date: 9/28/2023 10:12:00 AM

Nice staggering words depicting disorientation. I know it well at my advanced age.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/28/2023 1:03:00 PM

Jay you don't look that "advanced " in your picture. Thank you for commenting Jay. Best wishes. SV

Valsa George

Date: 9/28/2023 4:46:00 AM

Amazing alignment of words to represent a disoriented mental state. The ones I pity most in the world are those suffering from disorientation. Climbing ther stairs up and under, unable to return after taking a particular way. I have experienced this kind of a mental state when I was deeply agitated. Brilliant dear friend.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/28/2023 5:30:00 AM

Thank you for your encouraging comment dear friend. You have soupmail. Best wishes SV