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Contest: Pick-A-Title, Vol 39 Sponsor: Edward Ibeh Date Posted : 27-9-23 # 3 Disorientation.

 

 

 

. O A S R T T I I N I D E O N Befuzzled, I wander and wonder Climbing stairs up and under Zigzagging along a corridor, In the window and out the door Feeling lightheaded with a lead foot Covered In snow the color of soot. Knowing my bus will come soon I take a taxi, to the moon Now my money has all been spent I take a spoonful of disorient To decide which way to go, I dread I must find my way back to bed I get off the train at the next station I think this is called disorientation.

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Date: 10/15/2023 10:08:00 AM
SV, now this is wonderfully creative! I love the disorienting format, too. Very clever. Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest!
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Date: 10/15/2023 2:16:00 PM
I learned it from a Master of Being Unique ! ;)
Date: 9/28/2023 10:12:00 AM
Nice staggering words depicting disorientation. I know it well at my advanced age.
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Date: 9/28/2023 1:03:00 PM
Jay you don't look that "advanced " in your picture. Thank you for commenting Jay. Best wishes. SV
Date: 9/28/2023 4:46:00 AM
Amazing alignment of words to represent a disoriented mental state. The ones I pity most in the world are those suffering from disorientation. Climbing ther stairs up and under, unable to return after taking a particular way. I have experienced this kind of a mental state when I was deeply agitated. Brilliant dear friend.
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Date: 9/28/2023 5:30:00 AM
Thank you for your encouraging comment dear friend. You have soupmail. Best wishes SV
Date: 9/27/2023 1:13:00 PM
Magnificent
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Date: 9/27/2023 2:24:00 PM
Yes but behave lol
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Date: 9/27/2023 2:03:00 PM
LOL Thank you. So does this mean I am unblocked ?
Date: 9/27/2023 11:25:00 AM
Wow - I love this! You've crept into my brain :D very creative x
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Date: 9/27/2023 11:59:00 AM
Only YOU would admit to such a thing My lovely friend !!!! Thanks D Best wishes always. SV

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