Mel Merrill Poet Narrative

Disarmed By Beauty, Vanquished So

She wipes the sleep from her misty eyes
                               With fragile hands and polished nails;
                                 And modestly as maidens do--                                                
                                          Femininity prevails!

                              And the coffee she has sweetly brewed,
                                 Too hot, thus earns a gentle blow;
                            Then is sipped with last night's ruby lips,
                                           And delicately so.
                          
                                I am weakened by her waking eyes
                                   And by the spill of golden hair;
                              Just a vanquished foe, and quartered,
                                      In both fever and despair. 
                          
                                 For I am fallen on this battlefield,
                                  And cannot win so grand a fight.
                             This Knight disarmed, and in disgrace--
                                   Will rest in chains, come night.

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Casarah Nance April 20, 2014 at 8:01 PM kinda sexy tone there you got going on babe. :-P enjoyable and ;-X naughty. lol i dig it Mel Merrill April 20, 2014 at 11:08 PM You got it. It's X rated, alright. What do you think is goin on with the chains? I'm a gentleman, so I cannot elaborate further :) Thanks for the visit coolness, and I like the way you read my stuff. Bitchin that you get it. xo Mel :)

Richard Lamoureux April 17, 2014 at 8:07 AM Once a King always a King once a Knight is enough. Mel Merrill April 18, 2014 at 2:07 AM LOL. Clever...a little dry wit is always welcome here! Sad to say, though, the Knight remained in chains all evening, while the Maiden went out on an EHarmony date :( What can you do?

Richard Lamoureux April 16, 2014 at 7:41 PM Speaking of restraints, this is most entertaining. We indeed are powerless when the right women beguiles us. Mel Merrill April 17, 2014 at 1:16 AM True enough. Why is that? This poem is--in my mind, X-rated, but don't tell anyone :) I think the Knight wins in the end. Peace, Mel :)

Poet Destroyer A April 16, 2014 at 2:55 AM ha, ha, Mel, i'm so glad you got my poem... The bottom line, was the ending... hehehe...Linda..................ps.... WOW!! this is deep, rest in chains, I can't even imagine the hold me down. However, you seem to head over heels. wow, to give in... I like your style MEL, one day, I'd like to draw a similar verse, with your help of course. My pen's rides on crazy metaphors... Good night.. Linda Mel Merrill April 16, 2014 at 6:19 AM Praise from Caesar :) You are--I can sincerely say, a gifted poet. You know the maxim, "You can judge a person by the company they keep." I don't like the judging part, but I'd like to hang with the likes of you. You will challenge me, and elevate the quality of my work Win, win! So, when you feel inspired thus, we can share crazy metaphors and create....the shadow knows! Later, Mel

Eileen Manassian April 15, 2014 at 3:47 PM Absolutely fabulous! What an amazing poem. I'm in awe. I would try to point out the lines that especially spoke to me, but.....I guess it would have to be that very last stanza.....Also, I'm weakened by her waking eyes....You lead us to imagine what went on..and what will go on...so artfully. Mel Merrill April 15, 2014 at 4:19 PM Aren't you an angel? I've finally won somebody over--how cool! Maybe that will help me hold on to my new poet #1 spot :) You have brightened my day. I will be dropping by tonight to see where your head is at--so make sure what's his name is gone! :) Eileen Manassian April 15, 2014 at 4:03 PM Thank you for that compliment...I love words...that is all I can say for myself. You are a gifted poet...and this is testament to that. I will be visiting more of your work. you have won me over. :) Mel Merrill April 15, 2014 at 4:00 PM Thank you Eileen. You're a gifted poet, so I value your feedback. That you understood the subtext, the unexplained of what was and will be--and your appreciation of the alliteration and imagery, is attribute to your eye for poetry...and is greatly appreciated. Just made some minor revisions, which I think make the poem stronger. Thanks again, hugs and smiles // mel :)

Tim Smith April 15, 2014 at 3:38 PM Surrender, She has won before the battle has begun. Wonderful Mel..make sure you have a key for those chains....Tim Mel Merrill April 15, 2014 at 4:09 PM Lol! I'm way ahead of you. I went to Home Depot, only, I'm told they cannot a copy make. Hey, thanks for the visit and the comment. I just made some minor changes to the poem which make it stronger---I think. If you get the chance to reread, which I'm sure you were planning to do anyway, I think you'll agree. Like your writes, Btw. I'll be dropping be tonight...Mel

Jan Allison April 15, 2014 at 12:05 PM WOW Mel this is so romantic a write. Long may you hold on to the top spot with poems like this! Hugs Jan x Jan Allison April 15, 2014 at 4:30 PM Gets better and better with every revision Mel. So glad you have got Eileen on board with her comments she is inspirational! Hugs Jan x Mel Merrill April 15, 2014 at 4:22 PM Hi again, Jan. Since this a relatively new style for me; a grand departure from my 8/7/8/7 quatrain tendencies, I have made a third revision; all done, though. Check out the new and improved, if you get a minute. I'm sure you'll agree...mel :) Jan Allison April 15, 2014 at 2:35 PM It's so beautiful Mel I really am in awe of the way you write such romantic and sensual lines.I have an umbrella never used it here it gets so windy you see a graveyard of spokes and material in the street lol. Hugs Jan xxxx Mel Merrill April 15, 2014 at 2:16 PM Thank you Jan. T is a labor of love. Just made some needed changes, so, my loyal friend, read it again! :) It needed some fine tuning, so to speak. May a smile be your umbrella, Love and hugs // mel

Anne-Lise Andresen April 15, 2014 at 3:45 AM - A beautiful picture - Beauty in everyday life - Little things that warms - A lovely and sweet poem Mel! - Thank you my "new" friend - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Mel Merrill April 15, 2014 at 4:27 PM Anne, I know you have a good eye for imagery and poetic device e.g. alliteration, etc. This is a new style of writing for me, so I just finished my third--and last revision. If you can spare a minute, please reread as I value your thoughts...Thank you my sweet--oxox // Mel Mel Merrill April 15, 2014 at 10:28 AM You are as welcome as a summer breeze, my friend. Your comments fall upon the eye, as lightly as the butterfly; and lift my soul with every word, as the butterfly--or hummingbird! See what the Soup had done? Anytime I speak or write, it's in rhyme and meter lol Thanks Anne Lise, sincerely. oxox mel :)