Dirty Deeds

The serpent closed in on Eve at twilight
 A nebulous shape in the half light, fangs
 Hidden beneath his hood and she, her vision
 Blurred was completely beguiled by his lies.

 He bought her white roses that she watered
 With her tears and chocolate dark like his soul.
 He spiced his lies with compliments and promises
 And she was completely beguiled by his lies.

 Like a sponge he sucked her resources and lied.
 When heavy with her giving heart he gave 
 His time to Evie then Everly and finally to
 Every woman or girl who glittered like gold.

 He matured and widened his audience to include
 Even his friends. He borrowed, stole, swindled
 Gambled, smiled and lied, lied and smiled
 Until his conscience died and he wreaked havoc
 On the lives of those who loved him most.  

 Now he's just a rat who slinks into his hole, scorned,
 shunned that’s his due, and finally  I want him to 
 know, I’ve put his portrait on Poetry Soup and all
 will remember him as  the-serpent-turned-rat
 who drowned  in his bowl of soup.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Gooden Avatar
September 27, 2012 at 7:45 PM
Dear readers all, this is a poem about a character, not about a particular person. I am a fiction writer and creating characters is what I do best. This is a composite person who behaves a certain way, hence, the use of the word 'portrait.' Sherese
Mongrut Avatar
September 3, 2012 at 7:09 PM
I love how you write! He is the evil serpent, it must die! She was genuine and weak! Love it!
Palmer Avatar
August 23, 2012 at 5:22 AM
great write Sherese,sense a little anger,the rat was found and pronounced,lol
Wellington Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 9:43 PM
O so you know him too?? LOL...just kidding girl, what a powerful and provoking write. Thanks for visiting and comments..one love. Joy Wells
Eastman Avatar
August 18, 2012 at 11:02 AM
I loved the ending. Strong emotions... is it for the contest?
Pettit Avatar
August 16, 2012 at 7:14 PM
From a serpent into a rat? You really must have hated him. Good way to poetically describe him.
Breidenthal Avatar
August 16, 2012 at 6:03 PM
Awesome poem!!!!!!! Enjoyed immensely. :D Always, Laura
May Avatar
August 16, 2012 at 11:18 AM
nicely written Sherese...best of luck in the contest...love...Joseph
Campi Avatar
August 16, 2012 at 11:07 AM
I like this poem lots. Thanks for posting it. Thanks for reading and commenting on my recent work. Jancarl
Williams Avatar
August 16, 2012 at 4:26 AM
Sherese I like it, if for the contest good luck..David
O'Leary Avatar
August 16, 2012 at 2:50 AM
Scathing, though funny... Nice... Terry
A   Avatar
August 15, 2012 at 11:04 PM
Good luck in the contest..love it..:-) Thank you for sharing * Goodnight~ PD
Dietrich Avatar
August 15, 2012 at 8:49 PM
sherese, this is a very interesting poem. You turned it into a very funny one by the end of it. A fun read.
Gooden Avatar
August 15, 2012 at 9:00 PM
Thanks for reading, Andrea.
Gasun Avatar
August 15, 2012 at 8:11 PM
Ops, I forgot to say thank you for dropping by and reading my poem. Bless you always.
Gooden Avatar
August 15, 2012 at 9:01 PM
Leonora, thanks for same.
Gasun Avatar
August 15, 2012 at 8:10 PM
This is awesome, Sherese! You've developed the topic so well. Good luck and best wishes to you always. hugs, leonora
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