Jaymee Thomas Poet Roundel

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Dining Etiquette

You've missed a bit, there on your chin.
Thin reeds of river grass and fish—
cheeks-deep in roe, mud-covered twin,
you've missed a bit.

Let's bumble on to spawning's pitch
eat salmon-seasoned trout—with quince, 
furs drenched in entrails glazey drip...

I long forgave your glutton sin,
big Grizz, I swear there is no hitch,
just time enough to feast with friends
you've missed a bit.

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I Am Anaya June 24, 2025 at 8:14 AM Delightful and witty, must've been tough to choose just one, Jaymee. ( best # bear for contest) wondering which of all chosen... Jaymee Thomas June 24, 2025 at 5:36 PM Haha- I didn't enter either of them. I was just playing with the form. It's like a little puzzle. Thanks again, I Am Anaya (see I got it right this time :)

Andrea Dietrich June 23, 2025 at 2:10 PM haha, that is kind of humorous. Love the refrain!! Jaymee Thomas June 23, 2025 at 4:49 PM Thanks, Andrea. Tom comment-shamed me in the other version where the bears are brawling, so I gave breaking bread a chance :D I was going for a funny take but when I reread it now, it pulls a little sad at the end. Thanks again for taking the time to read my work.

Heidi Sands June 23, 2025 at 11:52 AM Great one Jaymee. I enjoyed this :) Jaymee Thomas June 23, 2025 at 1:30 PM Haha - I keep fiddling with it though, Heidi :O And I'm still over by a syllable in the penultimate line and not all of my iambs are tetrams, but I think I've taken it as far as I'm able/willing. They're a lot of fun to play with. Thanks so much for showing it some love.