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Shadows like a life that hides upon The butterfly effect on the pond— By young twilight, coming through a shriek, Nettle of the stillness changed and gone. From my shadow self, her meeting's gauze, Similarly a rippling cause, The secrets shadow crown is keeping— For before rabbit trail prayers of was. The glowing person though not a star, The moon sweeps through impossible scars, That I vowed were only skin's cobwebs— How its light's will slow besides my heart.

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Date: 11/17/2024 12:07:00 PM
I really liked the first part. I am a fan of ripple effect and butterfly effect.
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Date: 7/26/2024 12:47:00 PM
Well done for trying this form... your poem flows really well... Next time, see if you can do it in the English adaption.. where the last word in the third line is the same rhyme in the next stanza and so on..
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Date: 7/24/2024 5:48:00 PM
The glowing person though not a star, The moon sweeps through impossible scars… Nettle of the stillness…Cool wording!
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Date: 7/24/2024 8:41:00 AM
There is much depth in this intriguing poem. So well written. Excellent use of metaphors. Great work.
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Date: 7/23/2024 11:08:00 AM
This is so beautiful, i love the way you weave metaphors and weave words in a way that is soulfully moving and really thought provoking. The last stanza especially i love! You are uniquely you and i admire your poetic skills! Sending you light always
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Date: 7/22/2024 11:14:00 PM
This is a moving poem that shows the mirror of time. I enjoy it's depth.
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