Susan Ashley Poet Rhyme

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February 3, 2017

~ Eighth Place ~
Premiere Contest: You Choose
Sponsor: Brian Strand

~ Second Place ~
Contest: 128 Words
Sponsor: Silent One

*contest requirements: 4 words per line, all 1 syllable words, 32 lines for total of 128 words. 
Rhyme scheme is aabb *

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Diary of a Mid-Life Wife

Bites of frost fierce;
iced words did pierce
flushed flesh, soft soul
chilled as you stole

youth of my life,
long lived your wife.
We wed; blissed days
blest till your craze.

Mid-age, your mess
lust for me less,
as thrills I gave
you now don’t crave.

My angst for naught
in knots of fraught
tight twist my mind,
your grit does grind

strewn tears from eyes
pain’s gems your prize
plash at your feet
my dirge does beat.

Our love I mourn
my rose your thorn,
once in sweet bloom
lies’ stench does doom.

Sprung from spouse cage
red town's your stage
to soothe your doubts
raise hell, nude bouts...

go chase young things
can’t stop your flings
we’re done, I know ~
snowed neath cold woe.

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Kurt Ravidas August 7, 2019 at 5:47 AM Wow, iambic dimetre! Such a rare thing in modern poetic latitudes. And such a luxurious as well. Bravo, Susan. Susan Ashley August 10, 2019 at 6:26 PM Iambic dimeter..? Back when I wrote this poem (still so new to writing poetry), I was just going for four syllables per line.. :)) but it does have a nice rhythm to it. Your comments make my day, Kurt. Your friendship is appreciated. Warmest wishes .. ~Susan

CayCay Godwin March 10, 2018 at 4:54 PM I will take this as fiction, but fiction that hit home for me, until the cheating part. I've felt love rot, the HE trying not and written quite a few poems along these lines. You spilled the feel in the phase of, 'frankly, my dear ...', if you know what I mean, and a great job you did. Hugs ... CayCay Susan Ashley March 10, 2018 at 6:58 PM Oh yes my lovely friend, a write of fiction. So great to see you again. Thank you for sharing your valued thoughts with me and for the delight of your visit dear friend! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Janice Canerdy February 28, 2018 at 8:48 PM I'm back to say CONGRATS, Susan! Janice Susan Ashley March 1, 2018 at 6:50 PM Janice, your kindhearted congrats are truly appreciated!

Jean Murray February 26, 2018 at 11:01 AM Gosh, this comes from such a strong centre Susan. Her fury is ferocious. Congratulations on this winning work. Susan Ashley February 26, 2018 at 7:14 PM Yes Jean, I was feeling FEISTY the morning I wrote this fictional poem :)) Thank you for your lovely comments and for bringing your smiling face to my page.. Your visits are always a pleasure! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Gregory Richard Barden February 15, 2018 at 10:40 PM Sincere congratulations on your win in this VERY challenging form, Susan - blessings and congrats to you, my friend! :-) Susan Ashley February 16, 2018 at 6:34 PM Thank you for your heartwarming congrats and kind words Gregory. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton February 10, 2018 at 9:18 PM It's enough to make a woman want to turn the tables and take a younger lover...congrats Susan, this is articulately delivered with heart and soul. x Susan Ashley February 10, 2018 at 9:32 PM Thank you Leanne for your valued comments and kind congrats. Your visit is a pleasure. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Pandita Sietesantos February 10, 2018 at 11:01 AM Dear Susan, my friend, your wonderful talent continues to shine in all your works. Indeed you are a master poet! BIG congratulations on your wonderful win! Hugs as always. Pandita Susan Ashley February 10, 2018 at 9:38 PM Dear Pandita, my friend, thank you for your wonderful compliments. Your heartwarming comments and kind congrats are greatly appreciated. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Judith S February 9, 2018 at 3:46 PM My GOSH Susan ... this is just amazing! You are such a gifted poetess :) Congratulations on your win here!! Your NE friend :P Susan Ashley February 9, 2018 at 7:16 PM Judy, my dear friend, your kindness is generous and deeply appreciated. Thank you for your lovely comments, kind congrats and the smile :)) My warmest wishes to you always. ~Your NE friend

Chris Hagy February 8, 2018 at 7:48 PM Wow Susan!...so cleverly written for requirements! Like the line..."blest till your craze". Have a beautiful day Susan :) Susan Ashley February 9, 2018 at 3:30 PM Thank you Chris, I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your precious thoughts. Your comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Janice Canerdy February 8, 2018 at 7:22 PM How movingly you have described what happens to so many long-term relationships, Susan! Janice Susan Ashley February 9, 2018 at 3:29 PM Thank you Janice for your lovely comments. Your kind words are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan

FJ Thomas February 7, 2018 at 3:45 PM So very sad yet so very beautiful Susan. Susan Ashley February 8, 2018 at 5:23 PM Thank you Shadow for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me. Your lovely comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Sathya Babu February 7, 2018 at 7:56 AM Susan I really loved this poem. A powerful write. Regards, Sathya Susan Ashley February 8, 2018 at 5:22 PM Sathya, I truly appreciate your endearing and kindhearted comments. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem.. thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts with me ~Susan

Becca Teagan February 7, 2018 at 6:45 AM I can see why this won! Congrats! It's a sad tale though. Susan Ashley February 8, 2018 at 5:20 PM Yes, tis quite a sad tale of woe :)) Your kindhearted congrats and lovely comments are truly appreciated Becca.. Thank you. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Supraja Kannan February 6, 2018 at 11:29 PM Wow... A wonderful write... Congrats on your win... I loved it.. Susan Ashley February 8, 2018 at 5:17 PM Thank you Supraja for your beautiful words. I truly appreciate your kind comments and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf February 6, 2018 at 8:47 PM A wonderful winner written by a wonderful winner...A virtuoso performance in mono-syllabic expression! Cheers! ---gw Susan Ashley February 8, 2018 at 5:16 PM Ohh, such a wonderful comment given by such a wonderful poet! :) I value your inspiring words Gershon. Thank you for your kindness and light.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich February 6, 2018 at 5:46 PM Congrats to you, Susan. It was certainly not an easy challenge! Susan Ashley February 6, 2018 at 7:16 PM Lol! That's true Andrea. It was harder than I thought it would be but a lot of wonderful writes were produced. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Your heartwarming congrats and kind words are truly appreciated. ~Susan

Eve Roper February 5, 2018 at 8:52 PM Congratulations on your win, Susan! Hugs Eve ~`* Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 9:13 PM Your kind congrats warms my heart Eve. Thank you for your lovely visit. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Agnes Krampe February 5, 2018 at 6:28 PM Great storytelling with these short words, Susan. Congrats on your win! Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 8:18 PM Your visit is always a delight Agnes. Thank you for your uplifting comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Emile Pinet February 5, 2018 at 1:15 PM You paint your words on a many colored canvas of sights and sounds that the reader can relate to in a privet, personal way. It flows well and holds your interest from start to finish. Well done, Emile. Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 8:28 PM Thank you Emile for your uplifting comments. I'm so happy you thought highly of my poem. Wonderful words from a poet I admire.. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

John Hamilton February 5, 2018 at 10:30 AM So true in many cases Susan, what I like about your poetry is that most is based on real life real feelings that many can relate to. This is a worthy winner! Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 8:25 PM John, your kind visit is appreciated. Thank you for sharing your valuable thoughts with me. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

John Gondolf February 5, 2018 at 10:24 AM Susan, such a wonderfully written story in this difficult challenge. I'm glad to hear that it is pure fiction my friend. Congrats on your win. John Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 8:23 PM Oh yes pure fiction :)) Thank you John for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Your kindhearted words and sweet congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my friend. ~Susan

Harry Horsman February 5, 2018 at 10:05 AM excellent poetry, see it's a winner well done. Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 8:17 PM Your wonderful visit is truly appreciated. Thank you Harry for your heartwarming comments. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Joseph May February 5, 2018 at 7:27 AM Congrats on your win Susan.. Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 8:16 PM Thank you for your kindhearted congrats Joseph.. ~Susan

Roy Pett February 5, 2018 at 6:28 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win Susan, absolutely brilliant as usual. :)) Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 8:40 PM Roy, thank you for the delight of your visit and for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. Your warmhearted congrats and beautiful sentiments I truly hold dear my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Subimal Sinha-Roy February 5, 2018 at 12:50 AM Congratulations, Susan on your great win. So true the depiction. Susan Ashley February 5, 2018 at 8:15 PM Thank you Subimal for your kindhearted congrats and lovely comment.. ~Susan

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