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Derelict Beauty

twilight time at deserted shore ~ abandoned boats flounder 16 March 2015 Three Line Poetry - Poetry Contest : 10th Place Sponsor: Debbie Guzzi

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Date: 10/13/2015 5:47:00 PM
Kim, sooo much said in sooo few words, Could be "Derelict" for sure yet still held in the realm of "Beauty. xxx's jill
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Date: 3/21/2015 5:52:00 AM
Congratulations! Haiku is always a difficult write. This is a great execution of this form. Well done.
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Date: 3/20/2015 11:46:00 AM
Good Morning Kim : I am glad to read that it is for you, on this, another gray and wet March Day, here in the lower mainland of B. C. “ Thank you so much for these pics... ”. You are most welcome Kim, and it is nice that you think “ you do have the eye for beauty... ”, and you feel this way about them “ love them sire.”. “ Yes, indeed
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Date: 3/20/2015 11:45:00 AM
mine on DERELICT BEAUTY was caught at twilight, seemingly marooned on the beach during low tide... ” Is the underlined reality and “ DERELICT ” is the poetic eye of the author ?, and these boats were actually running crafts just listing to the port or starboard marooned on the sands of low tide ?, or where they actually derelicts decaying on the wings of low and high tides ?
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Date: 3/20/2015 11:42:00 AM
Congratulations Kim, on all your wins. I guess I should have included some photos relating to your poem “ THE COLOR OF OUR BLOOD ” and my comment, as related to the subject. Will do if interested ? “ Will have to save my replies and readings for some other times, sire. ” I do understand my Dear, and in the mean time you must take of business for the next three month . I an glad to see that you have shown some of yourself. You take good care and be seeing you in that little square . Bill . ( B. J. “A” 2 )
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Date: 3/19/2015 2:40:00 PM
Hello Kim : I am sorry Kim, that with all the correspondence I have been steeped in lately, I have neglected to acknowledge and or comment on your last five entries, more gems for your jewelry collection. “ Derelict Beauty ” I would like to send you some photos of. “ THE COLOR OF OUR BLOOD ” is a subject that I am more than intimately aware of. Good work my Dear !!!, keep it up . B. J. “A ” 2 ( Bill. )
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Date: 3/18/2015 11:49:00 PM
nice win Kim... LINDA
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Date: 3/18/2015 11:04:00 PM
Hi Kim, CONGRATULATIONS, on your 3-line win :) ~SKAT~
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Date: 3/18/2015 2:06:00 PM
Nice one, Kim. and congrats on the winner list.
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Date: 3/18/2015 11:57:00 AM
Love the image you paint here, Kim....also love the bubbly replies and comments that you write:) Congratulations. // paul
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Date: 3/18/2015 8:28:00 AM
Awesome, well deserved, I am bobbing up and down in joy for you!! Keep writing.
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Date: 3/17/2015 8:17:00 PM
Good work! Congratulations on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 3/17/2015 6:16:00 PM
Arent these hard to do? I never get them right. I enjoyed your poem and congrats. BG
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Date: 3/17/2015 6:09:00 PM
many congrats on your win Kim:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 3/18/2015 4:31:00 AM
I got an N/A lol :-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/16/2015 9:07:00 PM
You have not been derelict here, for this is a beautiful poem!
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Date: 3/16/2015 7:59:00 PM
I won't judge until tomorrow Kim, I will wait and hope you have time to change this [and for other folks to polish their pieces too!] [twilight/hugs the shore] twilight does not have arms - personification is not used in haiku BECAUSE it is expressing your personal opinion that it seemed to you as if the light was hugging the shore, that's subjective- to someone else it could look like something else. [in the hours/ of twilight the shoreline fades: shipwrecked boats rock] OBJECTIVE
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Date: 3/16/2015 7:56:00 PM
I really like this. It was the picture I wanted to emulate but I ended up seeing the roller coaster picture!
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Date: 3/16/2015 11:12:00 AM
chilling... there is beauty in the abandoned. Nice contest entry :)
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Date: 3/16/2015 5:08:00 AM
I can imagine the scene you have imaged using your words, which is very beautiful and peaceful.. Wish you a nice day friend.. :)
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