Depression

Sacred moments with your safe remorse,
     spoken softly and thrown off course.

Tragedy struck the already wounded,
     and now your life has been concluded.

Treated for illnesses made up in your head, 
     why did I believe your lies instead?

Deeply taken for granted from the world around you
Eternally broken from not seeing your true value
Preoccupied with mania yet can’t get out of bed
Reasoning with God wishing you were dead
Eclipses shined beneath your tortured soul
Stomping like a baby, running out of control
Succumbing to reality on your last day alive
Inner demons knew you wouldn’t survive
Over the last five years I’ve learned many things
Never forget how you tore out my heart strings.

instant desertion 
struck by your thundered lightning
goodbye my sweet love

~Written By: Laura Loo~
~Date Written: April 25, 2016~
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Davey Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 2:39 AM
I just love this style Laura just looking at it makes you like it before you even read a word! Then you read your words and it competes the greatness! 7++
Scars Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 8:57 AM
awww thank you Brian for all your kind feedback and comments :) Have a blessed day :)-luloo
Dietrich Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 12:07 AM
It sounds like something tragic happened. I love that final haiku on it. I live with a man who takes meds for anxiety and depression. It's a difficult thing just to live with that person. but to BE that person is worse. I like how you used the three different forms for this.
Scars Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 8:56 AM
thank you Andrea, you are right it is hard to live with them during such despair. But hopefully meds will help. Meds don't take it away completely, it eases it and helps the moods. thanks lady :)-luloo
Nance Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 8:41 PM
Those inner demons sure do know how to mess things up. Depression is hard, loosing a life because of it to put it crude but honest, freakin' sucks with personal experiences haunting me, this poem triggers emotions, yeah we all need hugs and I'm sending a great big one k ((hug)0
Scars Avatar
April 26, 2016 at 8:15 AM
thank you Casarah, I am throwing a huge hug right back atcha :)-luloo
Quigley Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 8:00 PM
Awful and tragic. Not sure re your experiences, but my poem "Dangerous Meanderings II" addresses my experience with the "other side" of this a long time ago. Be well.
Scars Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 8:28 PM
thank you Tom, I'll check it out in the morning, many thanks :)-luloo
Lane Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 6:49 PM
I always feel your frustration, anger, and sadness with these melancholy writes. This one is especially well written in your choice of words and poetic forms. Hugs to you.
Scars Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 8:27 PM
awww thank you Lin :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 5:08 PM
oh LuLoo Karen's death will always be in your mind - so good you can express your feelings and thoughts through your words:-) hugs jan xx
Scars Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 5:35 PM
thank you lady..:)-luloo
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