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Dented Cans

To many, a child in the nineteen fifties
dented cans were important
we used them in various ways
they became our childish telephone
stretched across a room
connected by a long piece of string
we had rubbed with candle wax
it never really worked... but
we never cared
we would stand empty dented cans around the house
and place them strategically... our own little army
then scurry from room to room 
carrying a board with two nails buried halfway
a rubber band between them used as a trigger
where clothes pins were launched
trying to defeat this army of cans
but, our most important love for dented cans...was
our mom knew they were cheaper to buy
from the neighborhood market
and we were able to eat that day


1/5/18 contest Dented Cans

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 1/8/2018 6:04:00 PM
Frederic, I LOVED this, and in no way is mine better than yours. Probably yours is better!! Also, I love the nostalgic ring to it. I rarely win with this judge, so I bet you will win, my friend!!
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Date: 1/6/2018 5:51:00 PM
I hear you Frederic....I can relate. We need to teach our children the simple pleasures that can be had with imagination instead of letting them waste away their time and their eyes on video games that leave them drained. Just my opinion. My granddaughter loves the fort I made her with a colorful purple sarong draped around a large tray table. It has her hidden treasures inside...of course she is only 5. Never too early to spark the imagination in a child. I adored this nostalgic trip down memory lane where this lovely poem took me. Mahalo, Connie : )
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Date: 1/5/2018 12:43:00 PM
Good tear jerker. Superbly done, Frederic.
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Date: 1/5/2018 10:16:00 AM
Oh fantastic pen! Wonderfully crafted. A fave :) my best to you in the contest xomo!
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