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Dented Cans - a Love Story

driving away slow enchanted by metaphors… rice pelting our car white picket fences ahead dented cans streaming behind 05 Jan 2018 syllable count 5-7-5-7-7

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Line Gauthier

Date: 4/19/2018 10:53:00 PM

David, what a surprise spin on the challenge. I FAVE'd your tanka. Awesome - it's a winner.

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 1/14/2018 12:56:00 PM

Wonderful pen! I love it :)

Jan Allison

Date: 1/13/2018 4:51:00 PM

what a superb take on dented cans David a superb tanks! many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 1/13/2018 12:36:00 PM

David, the final couplet - a perfect depiction of the Ying/Yang of marriage. Thanks for participating in the contest

Harry Horsman

Date: 1/12/2018 9:17:00 AM

love this, David, the theme and your wonderful words fit the tanka so well.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/7/2018 6:45:00 PM

I love this. I too have been wanting to do mine on the cans behind a honeymoon car but I was going to use etheree form. I hope I can pull it off!!!

Joseph May

Date: 1/6/2018 7:21:00 PM

Great take on the theme David..best wishes

Eve Roper

Date: 1/5/2018 11:26:00 PM

Love the verse, David, good luck in the contest Hugs Eve

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/5/2018 9:40:00 PM

love the surprise in the end; so imaginative, david.. huggs