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Dented Cans - A Love Story

         driving away slow
   enchanted by metaphors…
        rice pelting our car
   white picket fences ahead
dented cans streaming behind

            05 Jan 2018

    syllable count 5-7-5-7-7

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Date: 4/19/2018 10:53:00 PM
David, what a surprise spin on the challenge. I FAVE'd your tanka. Awesome - it's a winner.
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Date: 1/14/2018 12:56:00 PM
Wonderful pen! I love it :)
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Date: 1/13/2018 4:51:00 PM
what a superb take on dented cans David a superb tanks! many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/13/2018 12:36:00 PM
David, the final couplet - a perfect depiction of the Ying/Yang of marriage. Thanks for participating in the contest
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Date: 1/12/2018 9:17:00 AM
love this, David, the theme and your wonderful words fit the tanka so well.
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Date: 1/7/2018 6:45:00 PM
I love this. I too have been wanting to do mine on the cans behind a honeymoon car but I was going to use etheree form. I hope I can pull it off!!!
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Date: 1/6/2018 7:21:00 PM
Great take on the theme wishes
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Date: 1/5/2018 11:26:00 PM
Love the verse, David, good luck in the contest Hugs Eve
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Date: 1/5/2018 9:40:00 PM
love the surprise in the end; so imaginative, david.. huggs
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