Deliquescence: To Thaw a Frozen Heart

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Detached from reality
He gazes haughtily
From the cold aloofness
Of his desolate pinnacle...
Far below
Dressed in vivid green and mauve
She patiently waits
Yearning to catch his wandering eye.

His face is stone cold, snow white
And yet he seems to notice me
A fledgling meadow
Needing sustenance to survive...
May passion's fire grow to melt his heart
So I, too, may thrive
And add a touch of colour
To his world of black and white.

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Co-written by Paul Callus & Carolyn Devonshire

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Gerald Dillenbeck

Date: 4/7/2017 8:20:00 AM

Beautifully Yang and Yin of the bilateral two of you. Lovely. Gerald Oliver

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/31/2017 3:55:00 PM

Wow!!! Carolyn and Paul, this is truly an awesome collaboration! It is so impressive how you have blended your verses with such superb synergy. I am in awe! The picture adds the perfect touch. A fave for me! 7 ; ) I would not be surprised to see this as POTD!

Chris Green

Date: 3/27/2017 7:11:00 AM

This was beautiful, a wonderfully written collaboration. Bravo to both poets, the piece is seamless and I love the personality you have given to the mountain and the valley and how both need each other to survive. Really nice.

Joseph May

Date: 3/26/2017 6:22:00 PM

Beautiful collaboration...I enjoyed the read ..A7

Tim Smith

Date: 3/26/2017 4:13:00 PM

Very lovely mix Carolyn and Paul...there is always a kind soul willing to warm a frozen heart.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/26/2017 1:17:00 PM

Hi Carolyn...thank you for being a lovely and willing collaborator:) Always a pleasure to mix ink with you. I noticed how you got the mountains rising high up, really aloof! Love & hugs ~ paul

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 3/26/2017 1:50:00 PM

I didn't try to "stretch" the mountains. That's just the way the link worked. Always a joy to write with you, Paul!