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Your Absolute Best Poem Ever Contest sponsored by Tom Woody...re submitted 1 feb 25

Delicacy In Pain

Her reveries slant the compass of time: 1970s. Minefields now roar through blurred visions. She retreats into dots of space to live in the moment, as emotions fling to a gray sky. While curtains blow unceasingly, hours freeze. Again, love passes; leaves, while a young wife’s heart crushes in tears. 

bouyant clouds wander
in the expanse of night time
to gather shadows

There is delicacy in pain. Letters from Nam change the dark of winter to a glitter of December lights. As she sets the table, the flaming candle waxes through a kitchen filled with sweets and almonds . He is the breath touching musical tones in the quiet rhythm where carols are sung together. Feeling his presence,
she regales in a lone dance of fond remembering.

pines in crimson gold
waltz across the starlight
etching mellow notes

Somehow, a woman begins to droop beside a half-closed window. In the cold of duskfall, she longs
for her soldier husband, quietly. Then wiping her cheeks, she is refreshed by those who need her, now. In a joyful play with daughter and son, Aunt Jamie finds her true north. Such is the luster of more tomorrows, 

moon glimmers, dust fades
a balm of healing renews
fresh discoveries


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Empress Avatar
February 6, 2025 at 9:53 PM
Dear nette, i always admire your way with words, they are not just brilliant but also evocative and soul stirring and ensures readers would feel the depth of what you express and deliver! Such brilliant haikus in your haibun! And so moving this poem is! I loved reading you today! Congratulations on your win! Sending you light always
Ashley Avatar
February 5, 2025 at 11:39 AM
Dear Nette, your poetic pen is potent yet delicate. The allure of your artistry shines in this poignant haibun. Congratulations for your success in Tom's contest. warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Bordner Avatar
August 23, 2015 at 8:34 PM
To combine these two poetic styles with such natural harmony is a testament to your excellence in craftsmanship...its like a dream inside a tear, a joy alive in a quiet heart Nette. A beautiful portrayal of positive, resilient human spirit, and love! I am excited to be including you into my FAV POET FILE, something that is long overdue gifted Poetess...Justin
Inman Avatar
August 22, 2015 at 10:59 AM
Nette, I really like this. Sentimental and beautifully written.
Ebbs Avatar
August 22, 2015 at 9:15 AM
Powerful...congrats nette
Lawless Avatar
August 22, 2015 at 7:02 AM
Oh, Nette, this captures that "delicacy" beautifully. A captivating write, congrats on placement in the contest.
Mandani Avatar
August 21, 2015 at 10:31 AM
Ha, the delicate pain, the subtle torture! "She regales in a lone dance of fond remembering."--beautiful line. Nice.
Thirtyseven Avatar
August 21, 2015 at 10:04 AM
What a powerful write, a pleasure to read. I like your prose/haiku mix, just the sort that I understand this form calls for. Thanks for entering this piece into my contest.
A. Sharma Avatar
August 21, 2015 at 1:46 AM
Congrats on another wonderful win nette with this amazing haibun!
A  Avatar
August 20, 2015 at 6:34 PM
Nette, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
Roper Avatar
August 20, 2015 at 12:42 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win and a 7 the image you have great is wonderful . Hugs Eve
Kendrick Avatar
August 20, 2015 at 12:21 PM
Ahh!! Great quality work!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara
Allison Avatar
August 20, 2015 at 11:54 AM
So so beautiful Nette many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
Breidenthal Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 8:19 PM
I love the haibun, and I was exciting to read something of yours in this style, because I know how great a writer you are..."love passes; leaves, while a young wife’s heart crushes in tears. "...so heartrending...and that last haiku verse...this is exceptional and SPECIAL. A FAV! Always, Laura
Ryerson Avatar
August 10, 2015 at 3:28 PM
WOW Nette, you never cease to amaze...I must say that I agree with Arthur's comment. You have left me speechless...
Smith Avatar
August 6, 2015 at 6:16 PM
Her strength and resolute shine nette...life goes on
Pinet Avatar
August 6, 2015 at 5:34 PM
This portrays a woman filled with sadness, depression and anxiety about life, and she's slowly replacing those emotions with love, acceptance and faith. The poem speaks of a soul damaged but not broken by life. Emile.
Trifiatis Avatar
August 6, 2015 at 5:00 PM
Fascinating writing, exquisite verses, incomparably beautiful, dear nette! Good luck and a seven.
Guzzi Avatar
August 6, 2015 at 4:44 PM
touching as your verses always are Rosie- you are tough compitition! Light & Love
Kendrick Avatar
August 6, 2015 at 3:05 PM
Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Winning material for sure..Thanks for stopping by..My husband is to have an endoscopy during which he will be awake..Then they will put him to sleep and do the colonscopy..Fun,fun..LOL..Sara
Andresen Avatar
August 6, 2015 at 2:55 PM
- So vivid written that I can feel the pain and the deep love - a awesome poem Nette - I wish a top win at this writing, good luck :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Paras Avatar
August 6, 2015 at 2:21 PM
The sweet-sullen angle you created kept my emotional gears going from beginning to end. A one breathless poem!
Vaso Avatar
August 6, 2015 at 2:21 PM
WOW Nette, sometimes is hard to make a fitting comment, this is just breathtaking!
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