Delicacy In Pain

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Your Absolute Best Poem Ever Contest sponsored by Tom Woody...re submitted 1 feb 25
Her reveries slant the compass of time: 1970s. Minefields now roar through blurred visions. She retreats into dots of space to live in the moment, as emotions fling to a gray sky. While curtains blow unceasingly, hours freeze. Again, love passes; leaves, while a young wife’s heart crushes in tears. 

bouyant clouds wander
in the expanse of night time
to gather shadows

There is delicacy in pain. Letters from Nam change the dark of winter to a glitter of December lights. As she sets the table, the flaming candle waxes through a kitchen filled with sweets and almonds . He is the breath touching musical tones in the quiet rhythm where carols are sung together. Feeling his presence,
she regales in a lone dance of fond remembering.

pines in crimson gold
waltz across the starlight
etching mellow notes

Somehow, a woman begins to droop beside a half-closed window. In the cold of duskfall, she longs
for her soldier husband, quietly. Then wiping her cheeks, she is refreshed by those who need her, now. In a joyful play with daughter and son, Aunt Jamie finds her true north. Such is the luster of more tomorrows, 

moon glimmers, dust fades
a balm of healing renews
fresh discoveries


For 1/14 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 2/6/2025 9:53:00 PM
Dear nette, i always admire your way with words, they are not just brilliant but also evocative and soul stirring and ensures readers would feel the depth of what you express and deliver! Such brilliant haikus in your haibun! And so moving this poem is! I loved reading you today! Congratulations on your win! Sending you light always
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Date: 2/5/2025 11:39:00 AM
Dear Nette, your poetic pen is potent yet delicate. The allure of your artistry shines in this poignant haibun. Congratulations for your success in Tom's contest. warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 2/3/2025 12:02:00 PM
Ahhh you know I love a good Haibun. Your depiction of a close relative who lost her husband in battle is deeply touching. I like that it ends with hope and renewal. Congrats on your placement Nette
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Date: 2/3/2025 12:03:00 PM
Btw, your haikus are amazing. Mine tend to be more like senryus. Gotta work on it
Date: 8/23/2015 8:34:00 PM
To combine these two poetic styles with such natural harmony is a testament to your excellence in craftsmanship...its like a dream inside a tear, a joy alive in a quiet heart Nette. A beautiful portrayal of positive, resilient human spirit, and love! I am excited to be including you into my FAV POET FILE, something that is long overdue gifted Poetess...Justin
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Date: 8/22/2015 10:59:00 AM
Nette, I really like this. Sentimental and beautifully written.
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Date: 8/22/2015 9:15:00 AM
Powerful...congrats nette
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Date: 8/22/2015 7:02:00 AM
Oh, Nette, this captures that "delicacy" beautifully. A captivating write, congrats on placement in the contest.
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Date: 8/21/2015 10:31:00 AM
Ha, the delicate pain, the subtle torture! "She regales in a lone dance of fond remembering."--beautiful line. Nice.
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Date: 8/21/2015 10:04:00 AM
What a powerful write, a pleasure to read. I like your prose/haiku mix, just the sort that I understand this form calls for. Thanks for entering this piece into my contest.
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Date: 8/21/2015 1:46:00 AM
Congrats on another wonderful win nette with this amazing haibun!
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Date: 8/20/2015 6:34:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
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Date: 8/20/2015 12:42:00 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win and a 7 the image you have great is wonderful . Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/20/2015 12:21:00 PM
Ahh!! Great quality work!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 8/20/2015 11:54:00 AM
So so beautiful Nette many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/12/2015 8:19:00 PM
I love the haibun, and I was exciting to read something of yours in this style, because I know how great a writer you are..."love passes; leaves, while a young wife’s heart crushes in tears. "...so heartrending...and that last haiku verse...this is exceptional and SPECIAL. A FAV! Always, Laura
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Date: 8/10/2015 3:28:00 PM
WOW Nette, you never cease to amaze...I must say that I agree with Arthur's comment. You have left me speechless...
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Date: 8/6/2015 6:16:00 PM
Her strength and resolute shine nette...life goes on
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Date: 8/6/2015 5:34:00 PM
This portrays a woman filled with sadness, depression and anxiety about life, and she's slowly replacing those emotions with love, acceptance and faith. The poem speaks of a soul damaged but not broken by life. Emile.
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Date: 8/6/2015 5:00:00 PM
Fascinating writing, exquisite verses, incomparably beautiful, dear nette! Good luck and a seven.
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Date: 8/6/2015 4:44:00 PM
touching as your verses always are Rosie- you are tough compitition! Light & Love
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Date: 8/6/2015 3:05:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Winning material for sure..Thanks for stopping by..My husband is to have an endoscopy during which he will be awake..Then they will put him to sleep and do the colonscopy..Fun,fun..LOL..Sara
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Date: 8/6/2015 2:55:00 PM
- So vivid written that I can feel the pain and the deep love - a awesome poem Nette - I wish a top win at this writing, good luck :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/6/2015 2:21:00 PM
The sweet-sullen angle you created kept my emotional gears going from beginning to end. A one breathless poem!
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Date: 8/6/2015 2:21:00 PM
WOW Nette, sometimes is hard to make a fitting comment, this is just breathtaking!
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