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Loosely based on different stories I have seen on crime channels on TV. This takes place more often than some people may realize!

It started out so nice. He wined and dined her and brought her flowers when they had a date, so gladly she agreed to marry him. In fact, to be his wife she could not wait! But with the ring securely on her finger, he wasn’t the same man he used to be. The house he also made secure, and when he left, he locked her in without a key. The windows were shut tight. He took her phone. She could not call a relative or friend. No internet; she only had TV. She lived inside a nightmare with no end. She was his slave, and when she cooked for him, he’d better like whatever he was fed, for if he was dissatisfied with dinner, he’d break a dish or hit her in the head. Rape was his idea of love-making, but pregnancies at least gave her relief. The pregnant female form he found repulsive, and she felt glad that he had that belief. He’d pick up other women then. His wife delivered seven children in ten years because he would not let her use protection. In ten years’ time, she’d cried a million tears. Each child was born at home, and the seven were all the world to her. The children too lived locked up with their mother, so her love and things she taught them were all that they knew. They had no clue of what a father was except for what they noticed on TV. But children get rebellious. Two of them would one day help the family to flee. This is a tale of total degradation. The psychopath who wielded such control at last got put away, and then each child was able to move on and heal their soul. Sept. 30, 2021 For Edward Ibeh's This Or That, Vol 7 Poetry Contest title chosen: Degradation

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Date: 10/13/2021 9:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful yet sad story/write. True for too many. Have a blessed day with your win...............
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Date: 10/9/2021 10:32:00 PM
Indeed, a beautiful story about a psychopath and his suffering wife. The subtle feminine and madly male tendencies you have illustrated vividly. Great Work! Congratulations!
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Date: 10/9/2021 11:36:00 AM
Congrats, Andrea. This is a fine piece. It's easy to paint a picture of degradation; but when a story has redeeming elements, for me, it makes a world of difference. 'Psychopath-put away; Children- moved on to save their souls'. Blessings.
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Date: 10/9/2021 10:11:00 AM
Andrea, you have done an excellent job and deserve to be congratulated on your contest victory with your inspiring poem.
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Date: 10/9/2021 9:09:00 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest with this powerful, ripped- from-the-headlines poem, Andrea:-) Peace and love.
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Date: 10/9/2021 9:00:00 AM
So sad, but yes, it happens. Sadly, it happens. Sometimes a person's own pain seems to seep out in his actions toward the ones he is intended to love... Who knows? Not me for sure. I enjoyed your wonderful write. God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina
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Date: 10/5/2021 11:20:00 PM
This is such a horror story but well executed Andrea. Good for a win...Delice
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Date: 10/5/2021 7:04:00 AM
Love it and best wished for a win. I could almost envision her, the way you wrote this. Thanks~ a WOWSER of a write, Pangie
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Date: 10/3/2021 12:39:00 PM
This story I am almost certain is repeated in different cultures worldwide, the scary this is that this controlling freak probably has clones! So well penned. Hugs Jenny.
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Date: 10/2/2021 10:56:00 AM
Andrea, This strange story smacks of a hypocrisy in power and control. Another's dysfuntional reality in a futile strangle hold. Did you conjure this dark tale from fiction? Or perhaps a retelling of a cautionary life sold. -Richard
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Date: 10/2/2021 11:11:00 AM
this is a compilation of several stories I saw which showed true happenings. In one family, seven kids had to live locked up in the cellar and never see sunlight. Other stories, the woman is locked up and not given a phone. This is happening all over the world Somwhere RIGHT NOW. I am sure of it.
Date: 10/1/2021 7:43:00 PM
A Stark reality that has touched far too many throughout history. Andrea, Yes today seems worst for the fact that media news has made the world much smaller, and so easy to reach. So weird, that humans were chosen as the superior animal on this planet, when to hurt and maim reveals and activates the dark side of a part of the human race.
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Date: 10/1/2021 9:32:00 AM
Definitely dark and graphic Andrea. Sad what happens when evil takes a seat at the table.
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Date: 10/1/2021 3:44:00 AM
such graphic imagery Andrea it gave me the chills, sadly these things happen on an all too frequent basis:-( hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/30/2021 8:59:00 PM
A marvelous account of the kind of thing that really does happen. Simply amazing the number of men (and women) who change once the marriage vows are said. It pays young people to be especially careful about their choices these days. Exceptional writing, Andrea.
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