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your critical words flatten me like a pancake - please pass the syrup

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/11/2011 8:04:00 AM

congrats Susan, and thanks for helping me see that i had one line totally wrong... Now thanks to you i created 2 new bottom lines. I like the new way i ended my poem... you are awesome... by the way, your name looks familiar. You have entered my contest right. Well never mind that, thanks. I can't even follow my own contest..lol.. always,..p.d.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/27/2011 7:27:00 PM

so glad this got a TOP win. Congrats , sweetie.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/21/2011 11:44:00 PM

this one i rermeber.. real winner, susan! congrats! :) hugggs

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 6/21/2011 5:40:00 PM

What a funny write Susan, the last line says it all, love it. I enjoyed the read. Caryl

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 6/21/2011 4:38:00 PM

haha very funny Susan. Atta way to roll with the punches and slide with the syrup.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/21/2011 2:48:00 PM

LOVE your sense of humor, Susan. Have any extra syrup? Awesome! Love, Carolyn

Jack Horne

Date: 6/21/2011 1:32:00 PM

A very witty haiku, Susan. Love it

Anne Rutherford

Date: 6/21/2011 6:54:00 AM

Love your sense of humor Susan. Words do flatten when angry. Anne

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2011 11:25:00 PM

hahaha, how clever this is, Susan!!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/20/2011 3:10:00 PM

wow Susan..so much emotion in three lines .. words can be harsh or pleasant.. but once spoken can have lasting effect as this piece my friend.. awesome as u luv..

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 6/20/2011 11:18:00 AM

Oh shucks... I can't help but feel this one, Susan-- I really liked how you ended this, asking for syrup...

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/20/2011 9:55:00 AM

Lovely expression with apt images, Susan