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your critical words
flatten me like a pancake -
please pass the syrup

lifesenryu

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Poet Destroyer A

July 11, 2011 at 8:04 AM

congrats Susan, and thanks for helping me see that i had one line totally wrong... Now thanks to you i created 2 new bottom lines. I like the new way i ended my poem... you are awesome... by the way, your name looks familiar. You have entered my contest right. Well never mind that, thanks. I can't even follow my own contest..lol.. always,..p.d.

Andrea Dietrich

June 27, 2011 at 7:27 PM

so glad this got a TOP win. Congrats , sweetie.

Nette Onclaud

June 21, 2011 at 11:44 PM

this one i rermeber.. real winner, susan! congrats! :) hugggs

Caryl Muzzey

June 21, 2011 at 5:40 PM

What a funny write Susan, the last line says it all, love it. I enjoyed the read. Caryl

Robert A. Dufresne

June 21, 2011 at 4:38 PM

haha very funny Susan. Atta way to roll with the punches and slide with the syrup.

Carolyn Devonshire

June 21, 2011 at 2:48 PM

LOVE your sense of humor, Susan. Have any extra syrup? Awesome! Love, Carolyn

Jack Horne

June 21, 2011 at 1:32 PM

A very witty haiku, Susan. Love it

Anne Rutherford

June 21, 2011 at 6:54 AM

Love your sense of humor Susan. Words do flatten when angry. Anne

Andrea Dietrich

June 20, 2011 at 11:25 PM

hahaha, how clever this is, Susan!!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

June 20, 2011 at 3:10 PM

wow Susan..so much emotion in three lines .. words can be harsh or pleasant.. but once spoken can have lasting effect as this piece my friend.. awesome as u luv..