Lin Lane Poet Quatrain

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January 10, 2024

Defeating Our Goliaths

There are soft whispers only I can hear
coming from shivers deep within my soul,
"Save me from that which I most fear.
Hostility around us that we can't control."

My heart beat more rapidly in its confusion.
Though sheltered, I couldn't decrease its pace.
The world continues to proliferate delusion ~
cause for the woeful state of the human race.

Brutish rulers sit on pedestals as their throne
while innocents must claw in the dirt to survive.
Where is another David who will hurl the stone,
to free my heart and soul and keep hope alive?

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Karen Jones February 3, 2024 at 11:13 PM Belated congratulations on a fantastic winning poem! I think I missed this due to covid

David Drowley January 25, 2024 at 10:50 AM Congratulations on your first-place win! Perhaps a poet will hear your clear call. Lin Lane January 25, 2024 at 12:16 PM Thank you sincerely for your thoughts, David.

Richard Lamoureux January 17, 2024 at 8:22 AM Congratulations on your top placement. Lin Lane January 18, 2024 at 5:42 AM Thank you very much, Rich.

Sam Scott January 17, 2024 at 7:25 AM Congratulations on your win, Lin. I always love a David vs. Goliath story it kind of fits with the whole gospel narrative of 'in your weakness is my strength' such an encouraging spotlight this poem. Well done :) Lin Lane January 17, 2024 at 7:49 AM Thanks a bunch Sam... glad you found it spiritually strong.

Regina Mcintosh January 17, 2024 at 3:44 AM This is quite brilliant. I love it. Congratulations on the top win. Love to you and blessings too, Gina Lin Lane January 17, 2024 at 5:50 AM You've honored my poem with your placement, Gina. Thank you ever so much for finding value in my lines. Hugs!

Jay Narain January 16, 2024 at 10:07 AM A poem to wake up in present day world turmoil. Well penned. Lin Lane January 17, 2024 at 5:49 AM It should, but too many prefer to be greedy and power hungry. Thank you, Jay.

Nancy Kaufman January 16, 2024 at 7:39 AM Congratulations on this poignant poem Lin. It does feel some times like an up hill battle slaying our Goliath's in this world. I'm not familiar with all of these categories here on Poetry Soup but this is a very well penned piece and I am happy that it was well recognized. Lin Lane January 16, 2024 at 7:54 AM Thank you so very much for your kind thoughts and congratulations, Nancy. I joined Soup over 8 years ago and I still don't know all the poetry forms. We learn as we grow.

Unseeking Seeker January 16, 2024 at 6:19 AM Powerful, meaningful and so relevant. We live in deeply troubled, traumatic times. God hears your cry. Let us hold steady, it is always darkest before dawn. Warmest congratulations on your trophy win. Lin Lane January 16, 2024 at 6:22 AM Thanks so much for your insightful remarks, Seeker and the congratulations you've offered.

David Kavanagh January 11, 2024 at 6:27 AM Sorry Lin it won’t be this David, but I do try take aim and hurl some stones at the BS propagators engulfing the world, an admirable well meaning poem from you nonetheless, cheers David! Lin Lane January 11, 2024 at 7:34 AM In this time of tragic events, it'll take more than one person to right the wrongs, unless that One has had enough of the need for greed some have. Hurl all the stones you want at those who say they seek peace, but worm their way into fooling those who believe that BS. Thanks, David.

John Lawless January 11, 2024 at 4:26 AM so it is that the metaphoric "giant" imprisons us all lest we hurl the stones of truth into an endless vacuum Lin Lane January 11, 2024 at 7:31 AM As if there are bars on our windows and tape across our mouths. We can hurl stone after stone, but they get sucked up and thrown back at us. Thanks for your thoughts, John.

Mike Gentile January 11, 2024 at 4:00 AM Such an urgent yearning Lin! You have so crafted a poetic plea that is to beautiful to read despite the pathos of its subject matter. So well done!! Happy Thursday xxoo Lin Lane January 11, 2024 at 7:29 AM Heard by many but ignored. Thank you very much for your kind words, Mike. It's shaping up to be a fantastic Thursday and weekend. Hoping the same for you.

Daniel Henry Rodgers January 10, 2024 at 4:16 PM Lin, your poem echoes the silent cries of a troubled soul amidst a tumultuous world. The vivid portrayal of fear, confusion, and the harsh realities faced by innocents creates a poignant narrative. The plea for another David to rise and bring hope resonates powerfully. Your words serve as a call for change and resilience against the overwhelming odds. A compelling piece! - Blessings, Daniel Lin Lane January 10, 2024 at 4:50 PM Thank you so very much for your insight, Daniel. So many things that have always been right with the world are being overshadowed by greed and power. I'm delighted that you also see it as a compelling call for action.