Death Watches

A vision through the haze of time and rhyme
a mirrored beauty, Helen sits and waits.
I see her through the window for it's late,
at dawn, I'll bring her death, for she's not mine.
As yet, the key's not turned in lock sublime,
and I will stand and wait as fear dictates.
The Master's carriage leaves at half past eight
then I approach the shrouded outer gate.

Through the door and to Helen's room, I run,
and grasp her tightly to my beating chest.
I tear the cloth from her and she's undone.
Helen prays for her Paris dispossessed, 
as on the satin sheets my stanchion drums
out of fight and breath, she acquiesced.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Roper Avatar
January 3, 2015 at 10:44 AM
Debbie, beautiful suspenseful sonnet, a 7
Callus Avatar
October 2, 2014 at 12:36 PM
This is a classic beauty, Debbie! Excellent write. Congratulations on your fine placing. // paul
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October 1, 2014 at 1:09 PM
Congratulations on your win with this poetic masterpiece Debbie.
Mehta Avatar
October 1, 2014 at 9:43 AM
Interesting mythical write, congreats on the win, Deb. light and love
Yvonne Avatar
October 1, 2014 at 9:14 AM
Debbie I so love to read all your children so well bred. You are an artist true. As a director of stage I have always loved the creative process. Congratulations and I will fav this Italian Sonnet. I believe in order to balance the playing field we should all make sure we fav the best of poetry so they will show up on lists for others to read and be inspired.
Allison Avatar
October 1, 2014 at 8:49 AM
A beautifully penned poem Debbie many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xxx
Dietrich Avatar
May 5, 2012 at 9:30 PM
wow, you have gotten so good with sonnets, Debs. Nice going!! And congrats in the contest.
Onclaud Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 11:53 PM
myth at its best, debbie... round of cheers to you for the win!..:)
Poet Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 11:16 AM
A beautiful poem Debi.Congrats on your win.
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May 4, 2012 at 11:08 AM
Congratulations on your win Debbie! :)
May Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 8:14 AM
congrats on your win Debbie...thanks for sharing
Brown Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 7:07 AM
Congratulations on your placement in "Contest 174" Debbie. Love, Carol
Chebukin Avatar
April 3, 2012 at 10:09 PM
wow. very neat. loved your read tonight.
Macmillan Avatar
April 3, 2012 at 9:25 PM
Oh, yeah, sure, go on and show them up! LOL. Oh, this one is a gem, hon, all kidding aside. Stanchion drums? I think I should just boot you out of your own contest so you can submit this... and ya know I don't gush unless gushing is due.... I'm off to bed. Detox is going great! Just what I needed. Hugs, Cyndi
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April 3, 2012 at 7:24 AM
A beautiful poem Debbie i realy enjoyed reading it
Grisetti Avatar
April 2, 2012 at 7:06 PM
This is beautiful. I will have to try one. The new and different can be exciting or challenging or overwhelming. I am old enough now to not get overwhelmed so easily.
Butterfly Avatar
April 2, 2012 at 4:27 PM
This is so vivid and stunning Debbie, a beautiful sonnet, I was captivated and thank you, thank you for my placement in your For Love of Lanuage Contest, I am so proud today.
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