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Death Comes At Twenty Eight

Mental illness did not find its healing on earth

—10/31/2021 RIP

Then will the lame leap like a deer,
and the mute tongue shout for joy…
In the haunts where jackals once lay,
grass and reeds and papyrus will grow.

—Isaiah 35: 6 & 7 (portions)

DEATH COMES AT TWENTY EIGHT

Like the raven wrapped in black
Full-throttle wings above the door
Ready to drop the axe, tie the sack
A sealed body of wax on the floor

Ventriloquist sourced voice to the cattle
Knowing he won’t make it out alive
Anxiety, his society, a boombox battle
Seasoned by inner voices that thrive

Shower of baptism; but in relief he’d stagger
Family and friends anchor to keep him here
He loved them but embraced his dagger
Digging deep into the shadows and tears

Last leaves of October sprawled in mourning
Dawn and dusk calls on the same tenth month
Songwriter’s rap label came with a warning
A ten year catapult - his demons’ death

As the Lord received his son, the voices seethe
He accepted a savior, on whose bough he leans
This newborn dunked in his grave, rising to breathe
God remembers the year two-thousand seventeen

11/23/2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Krutsinger Avatar
November 30, 2021 at 9:27 PM
You are describing mental illness in an incredible way "Anxiety, his society, a boombox battle Seasoned by inner voices that thrive" Nicely done.
Kalita Avatar
November 25, 2021 at 3:03 AM
So soulful! May God bestow heavenly bestow to the noble souls.. Silpika
Rodrigues Avatar
November 25, 2021 at 7:09 AM
Thank you, Silpika!
Baker Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 8:10 AM
You've done a wonderful job of writing at a difficult time in your life. Very traumatic is death to those left behind. Thank you for allowing the feeling in your soul to flow through the words of this poem. Prayer for consoling to you and those who are feeling the pain of loss. A comforting hug I give to one so soulful. Your friend, Bill
Rodrigues Avatar
November 25, 2021 at 7:09 AM
Thank you, Bill, for your consoling comment.
Buhagiar Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 11:04 PM
Death is so final. We mourn but it will take time to lessen the pain. Hugs.
Rodrigues Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:13 AM
Thank you, Victor. ~ hugs
Laurie Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 3:02 PM
Hello Kim ... really sad, considering the battle both the individual plus family and friends go through. Nicely written Kim - Lindsay
Rodrigues Avatar
November 24, 2021 at 5:12 AM
Thank you, Lindsay!
Cunningham Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 12:16 PM
So sad Kim, such a young age. Tom
Rodrigues Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 1:32 PM
Just couldn’t do life anymore so the dear Lord took him.
De Beaulieu Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 11:55 AM
Hello Kim, I love this poem. Death comes at any age. Hugs.
De Beaulieu Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 3:32 PM
Hello Kim, I am glad you did. Hugs.
Rodrigues Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 1:33 PM
Thank you, Darlene! I’ve written a few poems but this one I could post. God bless ya!
Mcconnell Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 11:48 AM
Fine piece Kim, this is really moving and touching with good rhyme and flow too. Have a blessed day,Gordon
Rodrigues Avatar
November 23, 2021 at 1:33 PM
Thank you, Gordon! :)
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