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Mental illness did not find its healing on earth —10/31/2021 RIP Then will the lame leap like a deer, and the mute tongue shout for joy… In the haunts where jackals once lay, grass and reeds and papyrus will grow. —Isaiah 35: 6 & 7 (portions) DEATH COMES AT TWENTY EIGHT Like the raven wrapped in black Full-throttle wings above the door Ready to drop the axe, tie the sack A sealed body of wax on the floor Ventriloquist sourced voice to the cattle Knowing he won’t make it out alive Anxiety, his society, a boombox battle Seasoned by inner voices that thrive Shower of baptism; but in relief he’d stagger Family and friends anchor to keep him here He loved them but embraced his dagger Digging deep into the shadows and tears Last leaves of October sprawled in mourning Dawn and dusk calls on the same tenth month Songwriter’s rap label came with a warning A ten year catapult - his demons’ death As the Lord received his son, the voices seethe He accepted a savior, on whose bough he leans This newborn dunked in his grave, rising to breathe God remembers the year two-thousand seventeen 11/23/2021

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Date: 11/30/2021 9:27:00 PM
You are describing mental illness in an incredible way "Anxiety, his society, a boombox battle Seasoned by inner voices that thrive" Nicely done.
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Date: 11/25/2021 3:03:00 AM
So soulful! May God bestow heavenly bestow to the noble souls.. Silpika
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/25/2021 7:09:00 AM
Thank you, Silpika!
Date: 11/24/2021 8:10:00 AM
You've done a wonderful job of writing at a difficult time in your life. Very traumatic is death to those left behind. Thank you for allowing the feeling in your soul to flow through the words of this poem. Prayer for consoling to you and those who are feeling the pain of loss. A comforting hug I give to one so soulful. Your friend, Bill
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/25/2021 7:09:00 AM
Thank you, Bill, for your consoling comment.
Date: 11/23/2021 11:04:00 PM
Death is so final. We mourn but it will take time to lessen the pain. Hugs.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/24/2021 5:13:00 AM
Thank you, Victor. ~ hugs
Date: 11/23/2021 3:02:00 PM
Hello Kim ... really sad, considering the battle both the individual plus family and friends go through. Nicely written Kim - Lindsay
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/24/2021 5:12:00 AM
Thank you, Lindsay!
Date: 11/23/2021 12:16:00 PM
So sad Kim, such a young age. Tom
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/23/2021 1:32:00 PM
Just couldn’t do life anymore so the dear Lord took him.
Date: 11/23/2021 11:55:00 AM
Hello Kim, I love this poem. Death comes at any age. Hugs.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 11/23/2021 3:32:00 PM
Hello Kim, I am glad you did. Hugs.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/23/2021 1:33:00 PM
Thank you, Darlene! I’ve written a few poems but this one I could post. God bless ya!
Date: 11/23/2021 11:48:00 AM
Fine piece Kim, this is really moving and touching with good rhyme and flow too. Have a blessed day,Gordon
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/23/2021 1:33:00 PM
Thank you, Gordon! :)

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