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Contest Judged: 9/20/2020 1:32:00 AM

Take FOUR lines from a previously written RHYME of yours, (in their original order), give that stanza a new name. At the bottom please reference the original poem it was taken from, put the current date and name of this contest - that's it!

Title or original poem : First Love
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Death Can Not Take You From Me

Once again I lie down where daisies grow
In fields above the banks where salt winds blow 
Golden memories rush through my hungry soul 
Returning pieces of my heart lost long ago

loverhyme

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Deb M

Date: 1/15/2022 9:58:00 PM

Hi Elaine…..this poem is beautiful and so touching…..four lines of loveliness! Debx

Elaine George
Date: 1/18/2022 6:14:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments, dear Deb...much appreciated.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/14/2020 4:21:00 AM

I enjoyed reading this part of one of your works. Thanks for dropping by my short story that is a small part of my life growing up. Unkie was a real man and I a real little girl who lived the life. Sara

Elaine George
Date: 12/27/2020 11:01:00 PM

Thank you Sara. I see a memoir waiting for you to write.~ Elaine

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/11/2020 1:39:00 PM

Elaine. it's too bad this is not a little part of a larger poem so you could enter it in Gregory's contest. Again, it's so beautiful.

Elaine George
Date: 10/15/2020 11:11:00 AM

Thank you Andrea...it is part of a larger poem entitled, FIRST LOVE.

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 10/5/2020 5:51:00 AM

loved your imagery in this sweet reflective piece..thanks so much..

Elaine George
Date: 10/11/2020 5:00:00 AM

Thank you for your kind comments, Nancy...much appreciated. ~ Elaine

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/4/2020 5:12:00 PM

Elaine, this is lovely and moving! Janice

Elaine George
Date: 10/11/2020 4:56:00 AM

Thank you so much, Janice. ~ Elaine

Robertina B.

Date: 10/3/2020 8:31:00 AM

An exquisite write, Elaine.. Lovely and touches the soul! Really enjoyed.. Many blessings to you, dear friend..

Elaine George
Date: 10/4/2020 4:07:00 AM

Thank you so much for your comments, Robertina...much appreciated. ~ Elaine

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/3/2020 12:29:00 AM

Short, but WOW! Elaine, the imagery and your passion go a long way. Always, Linda

Elaine George
Date: 10/4/2020 4:11:00 AM

So nice to hear from you Linda. Thank you for your kind comments. ~ Elaine

David Walker

Date: 9/28/2020 2:38:00 AM

Beautiful and complete. Four lines that have as much impact as 400 pages. Love it

Elaine George
Date: 10/1/2020 2:42:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comments, David...much appreciated. ~ Elaine

Line Gauthier

Date: 9/26/2020 7:45:00 PM

Beautiful, Elaine ~

Elaine George
Date: 10/1/2020 2:42:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comment...much appreciated. ~ Elaine

Angela Crabtree

Date: 9/24/2020 9:23:00 PM

Very vivid. I could feel what you were feeling. I'm glad you have these memories, for I know they are special to you. Take care. Love, Angela

Elaine George
Date: 9/25/2020 3:57:00 AM

Thank you so much, Angela. Yes! They are special to me.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/24/2020 3:55:00 PM

Hello Elaine, i have enjoyed this poem. There are a lot of memories here. Enjoy your evening my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 9/26/2020 12:02:00 PM

Hello Elaine George, you are welcome. Enjy your day my friend.

Elaine George
Date: 9/25/2020 4:00:00 AM

Thank you so much, Darlene.

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/23/2020 10:24:00 PM

The power of memories, and your poetry, Elaine..this is so beautiful.

Elaine George
Date: 9/25/2020 4:02:00 AM

Thank you , dear Harry.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/21/2020 1:15:00 PM

ohh, i am touched by this poem filled with yearning...an intimate write, elaine...huggs

Nette Onclaud
Date: 9/21/2020 1:16:00 PM

and sweet congrats!

John Hamilton

Date: 9/21/2020 7:45:00 AM

So beautiful Elaine, it's true with such vivid memories death cannot take anyone away, they remain alive in our minds forever, congrats on a great win!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/21/2020 7:14:00 AM

This is so beautiful and moving, Elaine! CONGRATS on your win. Janice

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/20/2020 10:24:00 PM

Elaine, a captivating verse. It drifts across the tongue and through my mind, as rousingly as a breeze depicted. A sad moment, but speaks of reconciliation between pain and growth. Well earned Congratulations on Win!

Elaine George
Date: 9/20/2020 10:40:00 PM

Thank you for your kind comments, Sigrid.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/20/2020 5:44:00 PM

As if the salt winds have healing properties! Congratulations, Elaine!

Elaine George
Date: 9/20/2020 10:40:00 PM

Thank you, Kim.

Newton Ranaweera

Date: 9/20/2020 5:31:00 PM

Such four lines with visual significance, Elaine!! Congratulations on your top win!!

Elaine George
Date: 9/20/2020 10:41:00 PM

Thank you, Newton.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/20/2020 2:17:00 PM

oh I really really like this one. In fact, I LOVE it. Congrats on the win, Elaine!

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 9/20/2020 10:48:00 AM

This is one of my favs! What a beautiful write. Congrats Elaine on a top placement.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/20/2020 9:19:00 AM

"Returning pieces of my heart" - what a beautiful line from your write filled with tender images, Elaine. Congratulations on your winning placement.