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DEATH, WHERE ARE YOU

Afar I can still see a glow Of lights dimmed to low And sounds echoing hollow Death, where are you.. Sway of lone pine tree In a forlorn waltz by the sea Begging you to set me free Death, where are you.. Robbed of my only true love Emotions raw on the wings of a dove Breathless cries high above Death, where are you.. What of destiny And the arms of infinity Have you forsaken me Death, where are you.. Submitted on April 30, 2018, for contest RHYME AND REFRAIN sponsored by BROKEN WINGS - RANKED 3RD

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Date: 5/15/2018 7:52:00 PM
This is lovely, so many sad writes in this contest. Lost love is truly one of the the most painful.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/15/2018 8:34:00 PM
Thanks for your visit, James. Most appreciated.
Date: 5/15/2018 2:32:00 PM
Line, congratulations on your win in my contest, lots of great lines, well done~
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/15/2018 2:39:00 PM
Thank you, BW. Most appreciated. It was a fun challenge.
Date: 5/15/2018 6:17:00 AM
Congratulations, Line on your great win. A lovely poem.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/15/2018 8:23:00 AM
Thank you, Subimal. Much appreciated.
Date: 5/14/2018 4:20:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this painful heartbreaking poem. Excellent use of the refrain... Well done.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/14/2018 6:39:00 PM
Thank you, Susan, for your much appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 5/14/2018 2:56:00 PM
Oh, the talent woven into these words. Congratulations on such a fine win.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/14/2018 3:00:00 PM
Such a wonderful compliment. Thank you so much, Curtis. Much appreciated.
Date: 5/2/2018 11:08:00 PM
What's amazing to me is how intensely you can portray the emotions you've expressed--You can't just intellectualize them either; you have to be able to feel them. I can't imagine feeling the raw wounds, the longing for death on the 'whim' of a lovers' abandonment...Guess I'm getting old, and you, my dear, are forever young! More power to you! Outstanding write, Line! :) gw
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/2/2018 11:10:00 PM
LOL Thank you so much, Gershon, for your lovely visit and comment.
Date: 5/1/2018 3:40:00 PM
You've got a winner here, Line - good luck in the contest. Thx for stopping by to read my latest concoction re The Loss Of An Old Friend - Bob
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 4:23:00 PM
Thank you so much, Bob. A most appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 5/1/2018 2:08:00 PM
A life with no beauty, meaning and aim is but death! A life of void and loneliness is but death! A genuine thoughtful stance well depicted in your beauty. A joy to read your poem dear Line. The best of luck for the contest. Stay bright,
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 4:23:00 PM
Thank you so much, Besma. Most appreciated.
Date: 5/1/2018 1:56:00 PM
Death as an escape from ache and pain! Death as a life with no beauty, meaning and aim! Life of void and loneliness is but death! A unique write and beauty! Stay blessed dear Line.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 2:07:00 PM
Thank you, Besma. I feel sorry for those who have not made caring for others a way of life.
Date: 5/1/2018 11:25:00 AM
How much longing a soul can claim when it loses it's one true joy. I have enjoyed your heart felt poem today, Winning wishes are being sent your way .
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 12:59:00 PM
Thank, Pixie. Much appreciated.
Date: 5/1/2018 10:33:00 AM
The emotions of those forlorn, love is so powerful and you poem beautifully illustrates the depths of feeling. GL in the contest, Line xxoo
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 1:00:00 PM
Thank you so much, Mike. Much appreciated.
Date: 5/1/2018 10:20:00 AM
Somehow the happiness of death is hidden from us. But it seems like we really do not die. What dies are our sins and miseries. Nice write my friend.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 10:25:00 AM
Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Carlos. Like the caterpillar dies to become a butterfly...
Date: 5/1/2018 7:28:00 AM
So sad when you think that some welcome death as they do not have the strength to go on in life. Tom. Good luck.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 10:25:00 AM
When people lose their sense of wonder and love, it sure is sad.
Date: 5/1/2018 7:25:00 AM
Good luck in the contest, Line. This is a beautiful poem, that inspires one to be sad; I recognize this avidly. Well-done.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 10:26:00 AM
Thank for your visit and comment, Caren. Much appreciated.
Date: 5/1/2018 3:18:00 AM
Sad but beautifully penned Line. I know this will appeal to Constance. I've written a second poem ... took an age to type up, will post it when I get back from the fracture clinic:-) hugs Jan xx
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 7:16:00 AM
I appreciate your visit and comment all the more, my crippled friend. Get better soon. Line xx
Date: 4/30/2018 11:41:00 PM
This is sad but very effective. Good luck in the contest.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 5/1/2018 12:05:00 AM
Thanks, Richard. Most appreciated.