Line Gauthier Poet Rhyme

Death, Where Are You

Afar I can still see a glow
Of lights dimmed to low
And sounds echoing hollow
                             Death, where are you..

Sway of lone pine tree
In a forlorn waltz by the sea
Begging you to set me free
                             Death, where are you..

Robbed of my only true love
Emotions raw on the wings of a dove 
Breathless cries high above
                             Death, where are you..

What of destiny
And the arms of infinity
Have you forsaken me
                             Death, where are you..



AP: Honorable Mention 2020

Submitted on April 30, 2018 for contest RHYME AND REFRAIN sponsored by BROKEN WINGS  -  RANKED 3RD

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James Inman May 15, 2018 at 7:52 PM This is lovely, so many sad writes in this contest. Lost love is truly one of the the most painful. Line Gauthier May 15, 2018 at 8:34 PM Thanks for your visit, James. Most appreciated.

Constance La France May 15, 2018 at 2:32 PM Line, congratulations on your win in my contest, lots of great lines, well done~ Line Gauthier May 15, 2018 at 2:39 PM Thank you, BW. Most appreciated. It was a fun challenge.

Subimal Sinha-Roy May 15, 2018 at 6:17 AM Congratulations, Line on your great win. A lovely poem. Line Gauthier May 15, 2018 at 8:23 AM Thank you, Subimal. Much appreciated.

Susan Gentry May 14, 2018 at 4:20 PM Congratulations on your win with this painful heartbreaking poem. Excellent use of the refrain... Well done. Line Gauthier May 14, 2018 at 6:39 PM Thank you, Susan, for your much appreciated visit and comment.

Curtis Moorman May 14, 2018 at 2:56 PM Oh, the talent woven into these words. Congratulations on such a fine win. Line Gauthier May 14, 2018 at 3:00 PM Such a wonderful compliment. Thank you so much, Curtis. Much appreciated.

Gershon Wolf May 2, 2018 at 11:08 PM What's amazing to me is how intensely you can portray the emotions you've expressed--You can't just intellectualize them either; you have to be able to feel them. I can't imagine feeling the raw wounds, the longing for death on the 'whim' of a lovers' abandonment...Guess I'm getting old, and you, my dear, are forever young! More power to you! Outstanding write, Line! :) gw Line Gauthier May 2, 2018 at 11:10 PM LOL Thank you so much, Gershon, for your lovely visit and comment.

Robert L. Hinshaw May 1, 2018 at 3:40 PM You've got a winner here, Line - good luck in the contest. Thx for stopping by to read my latest concoction re The Loss Of An Old Friend - Bob Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 4:23 PM Thank you so much, Bob. A most appreciated visit and comment.

Besma Riabi Dziri May 1, 2018 at 2:08 PM A life with no beauty, meaning and aim is but death! A life of void and loneliness is but death! A genuine thoughtful stance well depicted in your beauty. A joy to read your poem dear Line. The best of luck for the contest. Stay bright, Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 4:23 PM Thank you so much, Besma. Most appreciated.

Besma Riabi Dziri May 1, 2018 at 1:56 PM Death as an escape from ache and pain! Death as a life with no beauty, meaning and aim! Life of void and loneliness is but death! A unique write and beauty! Stay blessed dear Line. Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 2:07 PM Thank you, Besma. I feel sorry for those who have not made caring for others a way of life.

Mystic Rose Rose May 1, 2018 at 11:25 AM How much longing a soul can claim when it loses it's one true joy. I have enjoyed your heart felt poem today, Winning wishes are being sent your way . Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 12:59 PM Thank, Pixie. Much appreciated.

Mike Gentile May 1, 2018 at 10:33 AM The emotions of those forlorn, love is so powerful and you poem beautifully illustrates the depths of feeling. GL in the contest, Line xxoo Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 1:00 PM Thank you so much, Mike. Much appreciated.

Lunita Blanca May 1, 2018 at 10:20 AM Somehow the happiness of death is hidden from us. But it seems like we really do not die. What dies are our sins and miseries. Nice write my friend. Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 10:25 AM Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Carlos. Like the caterpillar dies to become a butterfly...

Tom Cunningham May 1, 2018 at 7:28 AM So sad when you think that some welcome death as they do not have the strength to go on in life. Tom. Good luck. Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 10:25 AM When people lose their sense of wonder and love, it sure is sad.

Caren Krutsinger May 1, 2018 at 7:25 AM Good luck in the contest, Line. This is a beautiful poem, that inspires one to be sad; I recognize this avidly. Well-done. Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 10:26 AM Thank for your visit and comment, Caren. Much appreciated.

Jan Allison May 1, 2018 at 3:18 AM Sad but beautifully penned Line. I know this will appeal to Constance. I've written a second poem ... took an age to type up, will post it when I get back from the fracture clinic:-) hugs Jan xx Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 7:16 AM I appreciate your visit and comment all the more, my crippled friend. Get better soon. Line xx

Richard Lamoureux April 30, 2018 at 11:41 PM This is sad but very effective. Good luck in the contest. Line Gauthier May 1, 2018 at 12:05 AM Thanks, Richard. Most appreciated.