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Death, Where Are You

Afar I can still see a glow
Of lights dimmed to low
And sounds echoing hollow
                             Death, where are you..

Sway of lone pine tree
In a forlorn waltz by the sea
Begging you to set me free
                             Death, where are you..

Robbed of my only true love
Emotions raw on the wings of a dove 
Breathless cries high above
                             Death, where are you..

What of destiny
And the arms of infinity
Have you forsaken me
                             Death, where are you..



Submitted on April 30, 2018 for contest RHYME AND REFRAIN sponsored by BROKEN WINGS  -  RANKED 3RD

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James Inman Date: 5/15/2018 7:52:00 PM This is lovely, so many sad writes in this contest. Lost love is truly one of the the most painful. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/15/2018 8:34:00 PM Thanks for your visit, James. Most appreciated.

Constance La France Date: 5/15/2018 2:32:00 PM Line, congratulations on your win in my contest, lots of great lines, well done~ Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/15/2018 2:39:00 PM Thank you, BW. Most appreciated. It was a fun challenge.

Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 5/15/2018 6:17:00 AM Congratulations, Line on your great win. A lovely poem. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/15/2018 8:23:00 AM Thank you, Subimal. Much appreciated.

Susan Gentry Date: 5/14/2018 4:20:00 PM Congratulations on your win with this painful heartbreaking poem. Excellent use of the refrain... Well done. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/14/2018 6:39:00 PM Thank you, Susan, for your much appreciated visit and comment.

Curtis Moorman Date: 5/14/2018 2:56:00 PM Oh, the talent woven into these words. Congratulations on such a fine win. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/14/2018 3:00:00 PM Such a wonderful compliment. Thank you so much, Curtis. Much appreciated.

Gershon Wolf Date: 5/2/2018 11:08:00 PM What's amazing to me is how intensely you can portray the emotions you've expressed--You can't just intellectualize them either; you have to be able to feel them. I can't imagine feeling the raw wounds, the longing for death on the 'whim' of a lovers' abandonment...Guess I'm getting old, and you, my dear, are forever young! More power to you! Outstanding write, Line! :) gw Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/2/2018 11:10:00 PM LOL Thank you so much, Gershon, for your lovely visit and comment.

Robert L. Hinshaw Date: 5/1/2018 3:40:00 PM You've got a winner here, Line - good luck in the contest. Thx for stopping by to read my latest concoction re The Loss Of An Old Friend - Bob Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 4:23:00 PM Thank you so much, Bob. A most appreciated visit and comment.

Besma Riabi Dziri Date: 5/1/2018 2:08:00 PM A life with no beauty, meaning and aim is but death! A life of void and loneliness is but death! A genuine thoughtful stance well depicted in your beauty. A joy to read your poem dear Line. The best of luck for the contest. Stay bright, Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 4:23:00 PM Thank you so much, Besma. Most appreciated.

Besma Riabi Dziri Date: 5/1/2018 1:56:00 PM Death as an escape from ache and pain! Death as a life with no beauty, meaning and aim! Life of void and loneliness is but death! A unique write and beauty! Stay blessed dear Line. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 2:07:00 PM Thank you, Besma. I feel sorry for those who have not made caring for others a way of life.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 5/1/2018 11:25:00 AM How much longing a soul can claim when it loses it's one true joy. I have enjoyed your heart felt poem today, Winning wishes are being sent your way . Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 12:59:00 PM Thank, Pixie. Much appreciated.

Mike Gentile Date: 5/1/2018 10:33:00 AM The emotions of those forlorn, love is so powerful and you poem beautifully illustrates the depths of feeling. GL in the contest, Line xxoo Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 1:00:00 PM Thank you so much, Mike. Much appreciated.

Lunita Blanca Date: 5/1/2018 10:20:00 AM Somehow the happiness of death is hidden from us. But it seems like we really do not die. What dies are our sins and miseries. Nice write my friend. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 10:25:00 AM Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Carlos. Like the caterpillar dies to become a butterfly...

Tom Cunningham Date: 5/1/2018 7:28:00 AM So sad when you think that some welcome death as they do not have the strength to go on in life. Tom. Good luck. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 10:25:00 AM When people lose their sense of wonder and love, it sure is sad.

Caren Krutsinger Date: 5/1/2018 7:25:00 AM Good luck in the contest, Line. This is a beautiful poem, that inspires one to be sad; I recognize this avidly. Well-done. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 10:26:00 AM Thank for your visit and comment, Caren. Much appreciated.

Jan Allison Date: 5/1/2018 3:18:00 AM Sad but beautifully penned Line. I know this will appeal to Constance. I've written a second poem ... took an age to type up, will post it when I get back from the fracture clinic:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 7:16:00 AM I appreciate your visit and comment all the more, my crippled friend. Get better soon. Line xx

Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/30/2018 11:41:00 PM This is sad but very effective. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Line Gauthier Date: 5/1/2018 12:05:00 AM Thanks, Richard. Most appreciated.