Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Dear God - For Contest

Mummy says its time for me to say my prayers
I know she listens on the landing by the stairs
I kneel down by the side of my cosy bed
Soon it will be time to rest my weary head
Every night I close my eyes and pray
To say thank you God for a lovely day
God bless mummy; I say that every night
God bless daddy; now a star that shines so bright
Please God can you stop mummy from crying
She’s so so sad with my daddy dying
Look after grandma Bo and grandpa Boo
Daddy was their son he loved them too
God please can you tell mummy I don’t like cheese
It tickles my throat and then makes me wheeze
Can you help me with the answers to my maths test
I will practice my times tables, I will try and do my best
Mummy says I can have a little kitten for being so good
But I’d swap the kitten to have daddy back if I could
PLEASE God can you stop mummy from crying
She’s so so sad with my daddy dying
AMEN

05~17~15

Contest:- Prayertime Memories – Isaiah Zerbst
~awarded 1st place~

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Teddy Kimathi June 28, 2015 at 8:22 AM Congratulations to your AWESOME win Jan! ^_^ Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:39 PM Thanks Teddy it is always an honour to place in Isaiah's contest I admire him very much as a sponsor:-) hugs Jan xx

Len Gasun June 28, 2015 at 7:46 AM A very beautiful child's prayer this is my very dear friend, Jan! Congratulations for your well-deserved super win! Thank you so much for sharing! Thank you so much as well for your congratulatory and inspiring comments on mine. I'm sorry, if i came only now 'cuz got a flu this week caused by hot weather here. Again, thank you so much! God bless! love lots and big hugs, Leonora Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:38 PM I hope you are feeling better Leonora:-) Thanks for dropping by am having a tough time at the moment and will not be writing for a while:-( hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts June 22, 2015 at 8:53 PM Well done Jan, what a sincere little prayer from a child.....Seren Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:37 PM Thanks for dropping by Seren I am having a tough time at the moment and will not be writing for a while:-( hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux June 22, 2015 at 11:42 AM Check out my latest, I think you might enjoy it. Jan Allison June 22, 2015 at 11:43 AM will do have only got on line for the first time today:-) hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux June 22, 2015 at 8:15 AM I can see why this one is in top spot, very moving! Jan Allison June 22, 2015 at 11:38 AM Thanks so much Richard I was delighted that Isaiah liked it so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Lanette Kissel June 21, 2015 at 1:57 PM Jan, Congrats on your win. Such a sweet and lovely poem. Very touching. Lanette Kissel Jan Allison June 21, 2015 at 1:59 PM Thanks so much for the lovely comment Lanette:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong June 21, 2015 at 12:40 PM This poem is so sweet. Wonderful to see it recieve a top placement Jan. Congratulations! Jan Allison June 21, 2015 at 12:53 PM Thanks Connie I am so please Isaiah liked it so much - I can imagine it is the type of thing a child would say:-) Hugs Jan xx

Abdul Malik Mandani June 21, 2015 at 10:44 AM Hey, you are top of the heap! It appears you are closer to God!! Congrats. Very nice. Jan Allison June 21, 2015 at 12:35 PM LOL Abdul I am sure the top placement is more down to luck than judgment lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus June 21, 2015 at 10:22 AM Congratulations Jan!!! No1 spot! Amen! hugs // paul Jan Allison June 21, 2015 at 10:30 AM Not bad for someone who writes poop poetry or is that poetry about poop lol:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A June 21, 2015 at 1:42 AM Congratulations Jan...SKAT Jan Allison June 21, 2015 at 10:30 AM Thanks Skat:-) Hugs jan xx

Poet Destroyer A June 21, 2015 at 1:04 AM nice win. PD Jan Allison June 21, 2015 at 10:29 AM Thanks Linda:-) Hugs jan xx

Kari Mitchell June 20, 2015 at 8:06 PM Well deserved top pick! I love the way you snuck in the childlike attention with the cheese concern! Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 11:20 PM I tried to write as though a child was actually saying the prayer am so glad you liked it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Huberta Van Akkeren June 20, 2015 at 6:07 PM congrats Jan...a well earned first...a lovely but sad prayer cheers H Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 6:14 PM Thanks so much Huberta:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Konos June 20, 2015 at 6:06 PM Congratulations Jan Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 6:14 PM Thanks so much Judy hope you have a wonderful day:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May June 20, 2015 at 12:33 PM A heartfelt write Jan... Congrats on your win Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 12:42 PM Thanks Joseph I am delighted Isaiah liked my poem so much:-) hugs jan xx

The Grahamburglar June 20, 2015 at 12:07 PM Well deserved win, Jan! This was great, and you're right, we did choose the same theme for this one. Great minds... ;) Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 12:09 PM Thanks Preston - the image is so wonderful and I am always inspired by Isaiah's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 19, 2015 at 8:39 PM Congratulations on this beautiful winning piece. So hard not to have tears . Hugs Eve Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:40 AM Thanks Eve I am grinning like a cheshire cat here:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Stoner Jr June 19, 2015 at 8:00 PM Congratulation Jan on your top tier first place, well done. Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:39 AM OH WOW Robert thanks for being the bearer of amazing news - Isaiah's contests inspire me so much I am absolutely delighted he liked my poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

James Fraser May 29, 2015 at 5:21 PM The poem is incredibly moving, and the image is simply wonderful Jan, nice one girl, James xxxxx Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 5:27 PM The image was the one Isaiah posted to inspire us - I think it is so charming:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez May 20, 2015 at 5:50 PM A touching prayer. You've captured the innocent words of a young child. A 7. Blessings for the contest, Jan. hugs! Kim Jan Allison May 20, 2015 at 5:50 PM Thanks Kim I find it emotional re reading this now:-( Hugs jan xx

Christopher Flaherty May 20, 2015 at 5:05 PM Wow Jan Ever so sweet until the powerful ending. Both sad and beautiful. Good luck Jan Allison May 20, 2015 at 5:10 PM Thanks Christopher - I feel emotional reading this now I am getting comments a few days after it was posted:-) Hugs Jan xx

Highwave Brian May 20, 2015 at 2:56 PM Really loved your work here. So sad, yet innocent. Thankyou. Jan Allison May 20, 2015 at 3:19 PM Thanks so much Brian:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus May 20, 2015 at 2:43 PM Excellent, sweet and sad. Children's prayers are serious and cute in content. It's the age of innocence. Hugs // paul Jan Allison May 20, 2015 at 3:18 PM Thanks for dropping by Paul I do appreciate your support:-) Hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath May 19, 2015 at 9:48 AM She is a beautiful daughter of beautiful parents having taught with beautiful Sanskar. Sanskar means very good sense of love and respect. 7++. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl Jan Allison May 19, 2015 at 10:53 AM Thanks so much BL:-) Hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser May 19, 2015 at 4:35 AM Beautifully and lovingly written jan... :0 ~olive eloisa Jan Allison May 19, 2015 at 10:52 AM Thanks so much Olive always a pleasure to see your beautiful face:-) Hugs Jan xx

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