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Deafening Silence Premiere Contest Winner

Living in a realm where the air seems to be still as stone, invisible, like a ghost of a rose, translucent and frozen in time of ruthless seconds. My heart still keeps pacing to hear the flickering rays of your voice, flatlined and hushed beyond reach, whilst I’m here searching for serenity through sanguine serenades, woven meticulously to my soul, in unwavering waves from thousand seas away. What can I do to make you love me like I love you, must I steal the stars from its rightful skies, just so that I can please your eyes? Or should I hide behind these rhymeless phrases, where veiled vowels and nonchalant nouns within poetic punctuations pierce through this bleeding quill? Would it seem like these tunes have been tortured together to descend and tangle with tainted thorns? Tormented traps tied from an invincible inferno. But aren’t we breathing within binary codes constantly? surfing through the zigzags of repetitive numbers and acrobatic alphabets, vaporized amongst empty spaces where the universe unfolds parallel paradigms. Losing human connection in the deafening silence, while channelled tunnels carry wires through unassigned boards, falling on our intellectual swords, fingers tap against the cold keys, unable to feel the warmth behind words- misunderstood and misinterpreted as mountains eclipse the sun. So let me grieve over the unsung sonnets; maybe one-day I’ll meet my moon in a sphere of immutable melodies— forever calming these chaotic calligraphies.

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Date: 1/4/2024 6:38:00 PM
This is a very good poem. Losing touch with a person who you were very close to is very painful, and your poem describes that very well. Good write!
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Date: 12/16/2023 12:09:00 PM
Congrats on your win! Sorry I have not been here to see this before now. This wrenched my heart, so beautiful, like your soul...
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Date: 12/14/2023 2:15:00 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your magical trophy win my dear Ink Empress, you deserve all the starry accolades for your magnificent poetry! Yeeaaayyyy I'm so happyyyy :)
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Date: 12/12/2023 7:43:00 PM
I am giving you a standing ovation. Sorry I miss many such gems in poetry soup as my time to be here is limited with a number of other family engagements. Empress, this poem is matchless in beauty, profundity and poignancy. How can one maintain a level above the ordinary mark in all that one writes! Simply unbelievable...!"Or should I hide behind these rhymeless phrases, where veiled vowels and nonchalant nouns within poetic punctuations pierce through this bleeding quill?" Stunning. Into my FAVE. Congratulations on your much deserved trophy win.
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Date: 12/12/2023 11:52:00 PM
Dear Valsa, please dont apologize your real life matters most and i appreciate you always. Its hard to balance all. And i am so grateful for your kind and thoughtful feedback. This poem means alot because it was one of those days i was having intense endometriosis pain, migraines but had a deadline to write for “ deafening silence” and I just poured this. Was previously read by a spoken word artist too. And it is gone too when i lost my instagram. What can i say i must thank my muse that always inspire me to express and i never write to impress i write to express. Im so glad now i have this poem here on soup for all to see and even more blessed that its a winning poem, and im grateful for your fave and your gem like comments sending you light always
Date: 12/12/2023 4:09:00 PM
Such a well deserved trophy win. Beautiful.
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Date: 12/12/2023 11:49:00 PM
This means alot coming from you talented soul, appreciate you
Date: 12/12/2023 10:15:00 AM
Yes. Amazing writing, amazing thoughts, amazing poem. God bless and Congrats to you. You're such a great writer. Love, Gina
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Date: 12/12/2023 11:49:00 PM
Thank you so very much always gina for your unwavering support
Date: 12/12/2023 8:52:00 AM
Ahhh I remember reading this one on your Instagram dear Ink.. made me nostalgic! I am a huge fan of your mesmerizing metaphors.. the lines that affected me then, affected me today the same.. "What can I do to make you love me like I love you, must I steal the stars from its rightful skies, just so that I can please your eyes?" Uff so melancholic and moving.. and those last lines felt heavy on heart much! Congratulations for this beautiful win dear poetess and gorgeous soul! Blessed week ahead!
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Date: 12/12/2023 9:15:00 AM
Awwwnn Yes it was previously written… close to my heart .. but was gone from instagram.. luckily had it with me still.. thank you for your kind and sincere support always. Its so good to have my islanders on soup. Sending you light always..
Date: 12/12/2023 8:12:00 AM
A Trophy Winner, and beautifully written poem, Ink. Congratulations on your win, my friend. My favorite phases of your many treasures is, "maybe one-day I’ll meet my moon in a sphere of immutable melodies— forever calming these chaotic calligraphies". It gives me chills. Another FAV for a FAV poet. Hugs, Bill
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Date: 12/12/2023 8:39:00 AM
Thank you so very much dear bill i appreciate your support and fave and also your sincere well wishes truly always
Date: 12/12/2023 7:07:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your well-deserved win.
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Date: 12/12/2023 8:38:00 AM
Thank you so very much dr sotto so grateful for your support
Date: 12/12/2023 7:03:00 AM
Ink Empress, Congratulations on your pole position victory with this magnificent, majestic, magnum opus whose peerless elegance defies description. Scintillating imagery and heartfelt pathos interweave seamlessly to convey a narrative that sustains itself throughout. Thanks for your flattering comments on my entry which I will always cherish Kind regards Howard
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Date: 12/12/2023 8:38:00 AM
Thank you so very much truly, i appreciate your feedback and well wishes means so much to me
Date: 12/12/2023 3:49:00 AM
So beautiful... Congratulations...
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Date: 12/12/2023 6:12:00 AM
Thank you so very much kind soul i appreciate your wishes
Date: 12/11/2023 12:05:00 PM
"What can I do to make you love me like I love you, must I steal the stars from its rightful skies, just so that I can please your eyes?" Yes! I think she'd love that. Lovely piece written with such sincerity.
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Date: 12/11/2023 11:13:00 AM
Your poem conveys the agony of longing for an adored, dear Ink. As always, your words paint a vivid picture of solitude and absence, and you do so with such profundity and emotion. Such eloquent and smoothly flowing language. You've created exquisite imagery regarding silence as well. Simply put, you are phenomenal, Ink as is your poetry! In this poignant poem originating from a heart filled with sorrow, "One day I'll meet my moon in a sphere of immutable melodies" is an appealing conclusion.
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Date: 12/11/2023 11:10:00 AM
Very lovely! Have a wonderful time dear lovely Ink Empress :-)
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Date: 12/11/2023 10:15:00 AM
What can I do to make you love me like I love you.. A love not reciprocated is not love... despite how much we yearn for another.. I hope you meet your moon and those unsung sonnets are sung beautifully in union.. your poem shows the angst of yearning for the beloved.. You words portray a picture of absence and loneliness and you as always describe it so emotively and deeply..
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Date: 12/11/2023 9:51:00 AM
dearest Ink--your first verse tugged on my heartstrings...such eloquent words that flow effectively. I love the imagery you created about silence. Wow, beautiful. I also loved 'fingers tapped on cold keys.' I also loved the alliteratoin 'chaotic calligraphies.' Stunning and effective. I believe you can write beautifully about pretty much anything. You're truly gifted. Have a great day, hugs, Sara
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Date: 12/11/2023 7:46:00 AM
nicely composed - great last stanza
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Date: 12/11/2023 6:57:00 AM
Living in a realm where the air seems to be still as stone--these opening lines speak to the deafening silence you speak of. A forlorn poem emanating from a grieving heart brilliantly delivered, Ink. I like the upbeat ending: maybe one-day I’ll meet my moon in a sphere of immutable melodies...
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Date: 12/11/2023 4:25:00 AM
sorry I don't see a soup mail button lol can you soup me instead
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Date: 12/11/2023 4:24:00 AM
But aren’t we breathing within binary codes constantly? I have something to share about this part, soupmail ...
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Date: 12/11/2023 4:30:00 AM
Ahh I’ve sent you a mail sweet rose
Date: 12/11/2023 4:16:00 AM
No need to steal stars, Ink. Romeo is waiting! Deep and emotional, and brilliantly written. To echo Hiya...love the line- "Ghost of a rose" Hugs Charlie
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Date: 12/11/2023 4:30:00 AM
Hahah charles thank you, i hope so
Date: 12/11/2023 3:53:00 AM
"ghost of a rose" Wowww, goshh, this is such a beautiful and artistic write, with a marvelous flow as well!! You've truly said it so correctly how emotions remain unseen behind the thorn-laden scratches on graphical screens.. And the true essence of love can't be fully conveyed! Such a clever way of saying this in such a profound and poetical way, my dear gorgeous Ink.. You're just amazing and so are your words! "What can I do to make you love me like I love you,must I steal the stars...eyes? -
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Date: 12/11/2023 3:56:00 AM
"Or should I hide behind these rhymeless phrases, where veiled vowels and nonchalant nouns within poetic punctuations pierce through this bleeding quill?", "fingers tap against the cold keys, unable to feel the warmth behind words-misunderstood and misinterpreted as mountains eclipse the sun" And that brilliant ending! Just so full of artistic imagery, depth, profound emotions, all carved together so effortlessly.. I just lovee this.. And that title is so stunning too! Keep shining & writing my dear, sending you light always :) A fav
Date: 12/11/2023 3:33:00 AM
This is the best free verse I’ve read today . Love it
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Date: 12/11/2023 3:35:00 AM
Lol dahlin how many have you read today

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