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Deafened Art

you can't break what's already broken nor forsake what's been forsaken every love song is a ghost story ~ when velvet skies dimmed our glory no one really comprehends ~ how deep into the core it descends cloaked with invincible clouds , afraid to let tear-stained ink pour and set silenced tongues sing in solitude ~ knitting metaphors misunderstood hushed voices echo amidst smoky lungs ~ tainted through deafened art

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 11/9/2023 9:59:00 AM

Hello Empress. Hi. Format aside this is marvelous poetry with excellent execution. I read your words twice to soak your skill in. You allow the reader to pause. This is an entry to be read out loud slowly with emphasis and feeling. Read back your own words and you will see. It was a privilege turning to your page and entry. Have a wonderful afternoon and weekend. Peace and Blessings always. (smile) PS - For those who do not read what a dark world they must be living in...

Hiya Sharma

Date: 11/5/2023 5:01:00 AM

Sigh, this expression of deafened art truly tugged at my heartstrings and I can feel those poignant tones deep within my soul.. We can't break what's already broken, such a melancholic feeling it is, of being drenched in gloom..When love is nothing but a ghost story when it was expected to shine with glory! Ahh, those silenced tongues now spin metaphors as pain descends in the heart's cores. I can truly resonate with this gloominess that you've so profoundly infused in your stunning poetic words

Hiya Sharma
Date: 11/5/2023 5:02:00 AM

You've really excelled in this poetic form, monoku.. And I'm simply enjoying reading these artistic creations by your artistic quill! Sending you so much love, always!

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/4/2023 9:05:00 AM

Dear Empress, I'm impressed with your clever and creative skill in conveying such profound, emotional, artistic poetry in this strand of monoku. Every verse a lustrous gem of deep imagery and rich metaphor that becomes more intense with every read. I love how I descended through the layers of your exceptional poem as I lingered within the passion of your exquisite verse. Your poetic soul and talent outshines the sun, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 9:10:00 AM

Awwn susan, this means alot to me coming from such a talented soul like you. Thank you so very much truly

Bill Baker

Date: 11/3/2023 4:42:00 PM

Got to add this one to my FAVs list. Excellent Monku string poetry, my friend. I like the metaphors and the message of the whole poem. I read it several times then read it starting after (STORY~) to the next (~), then to the (,) then to the (~), then to the next (~). It's good however I read it. Oops, I'm messing it up for you. LOL my bad! I really like it. Bill

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 8:50:00 AM

So kind of you, haha awwn thank you so much truly

Paige Hind

Date: 11/3/2023 4:15:00 PM

That was pretty real. A beautiful poem, very wise...

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 8:50:00 AM

Awwn thank you so much

Deb M

Date: 11/3/2023 2:13:00 PM

WOW IE….l love this poem…every line is powerful with great meaning a poem in themselves individually! Excellent…..Debx

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 8:49:00 AM

Awwn thank you so much sweet soul truly

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/2/2023 2:54:00 PM

dearest Ink--you've exhibited tremendous skill here. Your poem is brilliant with emotional power. The title was perfect and the flow of your words exquisite. I felt the pain of 'silenced tongues' Am faving this for its beauty and eloquence. Have a splendid evening, Sara

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 8:50:00 AM

Thank you so very much truly for your support i appreciate you

Sotto Poet

Date: 11/2/2023 9:51:00 AM

Dear Ink, I just had to tell you how impressed I am by your amazing knowledge presented in such an interesting form. The craftsmanship and complexity of the weaving are breathtaking. The first sentence, " You can't break what's already broken nor forsake what's been forsaken" contains a mind-blowing amount of emotional weight. The whole composition benefits from your well-rendered depiction of a gloomy sky and smokey lungs.

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 8:51:00 AM

Always grateful for your support dear sotto

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/2/2023 5:52:00 AM

you can't break what's already broken nor forsake what's been forsaken--a meaning weaving of words that begins with a powerful missive and continues through every line of your Monoku, my friend. --cloaked with invincible clouds , afraid to let tear-stained ink pour and set --silenced tongues sing in solitude --simply superb and a FAVE!

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 8:49:00 AM

Thank you so very much for your fave and support truly grateful always

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 11/2/2023 5:37:00 AM

you can't break what's already broken nor forsake what's been forsaken… oooo that opening line comes in with sooo much unbearable strength!!! Love it!!! silenced tongues sing in solitude ~ knitting metaphors misunderstood…mmmmmm … hushed voices echo amidst smoky lungs ~ tainted through deafened ar…. Oooo soo true!!.. the depth this piece goes to is soo gorgeously crafted !! Love this piece papi..

Sam Scott

Date: 11/2/2023 3:57:00 AM

This is a fascinating format, Ink. I do like the line "every love song is a ghost story" :)

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 8:48:00 AM

Ah thank you so much sam so grateful for your support

Clive Culverhouse

Date: 11/2/2023 3:56:00 AM

Very profound, velvet skies dimmed our glory.. amidst smoky lungs.. well worked lines

Ink Empress
Date: 11/4/2023 8:48:00 AM

Ah thank you so very much truly for your kind and generous support