Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Deadly Kiss

I hungered for his kiss
My lips leaned forward, into his
Then passion exploded everywhere
He gripped my hips, I gripped his hair
Body to body, we became entwined
Flames raged from his mouth to mine 
Desire for more consumed our thoughts
Till grips of steel pulled me off -

“WHAT ARE YOU DOING?” My husband raged
I staggered back, red flooding my face
“WE’RE OVER” he said.  10 seconds of bliss, 
The death of our relationship


8/9/12
for pd's "kissing game" contest

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Dinda Minardi October 28, 2012 at 8:56 AM Wow, this is a fantastic poem. Goodluck in the contest Susan.

Terry O'Leary October 18, 2012 at 2:39 PM Passion flowed... then a twist of fate... great poem... Terry

Matthew Anish October 15, 2012 at 12:13 PM Sad - all too common tale! What did you mean about the double meaning of the last line of my poem? Peace and Love Matthew Anish

Andrea Dietrich October 10, 2012 at 3:45 PM back to this one I liked so much. Yes, back to the drawing board with you. I hope I can get there at ALL this week!! Luv , andrea

Justin Bordner October 2, 2012 at 2:52 PM Hot, dangerous, exceptional, nightmarish - perhaps better than a 'slow death' - J.A.B. %

Apoorva Patrikar September 14, 2012 at 12:09 PM oh man! really deadly! cool write!!!!

Carol Sunshine Brown August 29, 2012 at 6:51 AM Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "Kissing Game" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Modupe Sefunmi August 28, 2012 at 5:57 AM Thanks for my placement in your contest (silence).

Andrea Dietrich August 27, 2012 at 9:21 PM hey, susan. please hurry and post some new poems, sweetie. I always look forward to your stuff!

Len Gasun August 27, 2012 at 9:27 AM Belated congratulations on your win, Susan! I really love this one. Actually, this is my second time to read your poem. Thank you very much for making me win in your contest, Silence. You gave me more inspiration to write. More power and blessings always. love and hugs, leonora

Constance La France August 26, 2012 at 5:09 PM Oh, I see its a winner, congratulations!!!

Constance La France August 26, 2012 at 5:08 PM This is wonderful, wow such passion, best of luck in PD's contest and thanks so much for my placement in your Silence Contest, I really enjoyed it and I am very proud you liked my poem. Love Constance

Michael Smith August 26, 2012 at 4:14 PM Congrats on yor win.

Jack Horne August 26, 2012 at 11:58 AM Love this passionate write, Susan. Thanks very much - loved your contest - and many congrats on your wins : )

Carol Eastman August 26, 2012 at 9:46 AM Congratulations on the win.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 26, 2012 at 7:34 AM so appreciate my poem being a winner Susan.. so difficult to write these days but will continue till last breath luv.. u r giving us great challenges.. thankxx..

Andrea Dietrich August 25, 2012 at 1:46 PM hey, I never stopped to congratulate this one. BIG congrats, Susan on what I am sure was a well deserved place. I gotta check to see where she placed you. yes, that was fun reading what you said on great minds thinking alike. DO a limerick, Susan!! oh, and thanks for my place in your contest. WHAT a great contest you hosted. I want to blog something about it.

Sara Kendrick August 25, 2012 at 10:17 AM Well that was a great surprising ending..Then all the questions begin..Good luck in the contest..Winning material for sure..Thanks for the honor of placing in your contest..It was fun writing a few just single couplets..Sara Sara Kendrick August 25, 2012 at 10:17 AM Oh, Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Cecilia Macfarlane August 24, 2012 at 10:43 AM Wow Susan....deadly indeed, love the passion and twist at the end. Awesome write! Hugs

Joseph May August 24, 2012 at 8:31 AM congrats on your win Susan

Pace Ink-U-Script August 24, 2012 at 5:42 AM Congrats on your win Susan!!!! :)

Nick Bagnall August 24, 2012 at 5:27 AM A winner ! - I'm not suprised, full of passion, full of energy, very enjoyable poem. well done.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl August 24, 2012 at 1:48 AM Congratulations on your win , love this xx

Robert Pettit August 23, 2012 at 10:40 PM Good write. Congratulations on winning with it.

Joann Grisetti August 23, 2012 at 10:19 PM This one kiss has it all. Congratulations.

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