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Dawn song / sweet trills / thin flute roused Splayed light / warm vibe / worn slats doused Dream haunts / harsh cough / plumb tears smart Heart touched / mixed thoughts / frail past frouse _____________________________________________________________ Jueju is a curtailed verse of Chinese origin that grew popular amongst Chinese poets during the Tang Dynasty. Some of the formal rules of the regulated verse forms were applied in the case of the jueju curtailed verse, these rules as applied to the jueju include regular line length (either 5 or 7 monosyllables per line in each quatrain), the use of a single rhyme in even-numbered verses (lines), strict patterning of tonal alternations (see the updated definition of Jueju here at PS), use of a major caesura before the last three syllables, optional parallelism and grammaticality of each line as a sentence. Each couplet generally forms a distinct unit, and the third line generally introduces some turn of thought or direction within the poem. The final line ponders the meaning and draws the parts together. The English form was first taught by Dr Jonathan Stalling at UC Berkeley in 1997 who introduced the rhyme scheme aaba (mimicking the Rubaiyat), and a dictionary of monosyllable words to be used in the phrases. RECOMMENDED READING 1. poems.com/features/what-sparks-poetry/jonathan-stalling-on-spring-snow/ 2. en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jueju

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Date: 3/30/2021 9:10:00 AM
All I can do is respond like Susan...WOW! The time and effort that went into this alone commands utmost respect. This is difficult, tedious, mind-bending writing for anyone who might think it is easy! Good stuff, Sus. Keep up the good work!
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/30/2021 11:14:00 AM
Many thanks for your support, and kind comments.
Date: 3/30/2021 8:10:00 AM
Wow! So much better and moodier but also the last words fit now This should be the jueju explanation and example for soup :)
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/30/2021 8:04:00 PM
lol - another purist. ;)) Thank ever so much for your help - I can only grow with the assistance of poets like you. Again, thank you.
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 3/30/2021 7:14:00 PM
Now i feel obliged to go relabel my Jamaica write as general verse hehe i was feeling rebellious at the time but not against the Chinese :))
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/30/2021 12:31:00 PM
I would be honoured if PoetrySoup.com would consider your suggestion. As I am not a Premium Member, I doubt whether they would pay attention to a suggestion by me (I might be wrong, though). :))
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/30/2021 11:12:00 AM
Thank you for this high praise.

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