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Dawn song

Dawn song / sweet trills / thin flute roused Splayed light / warm vibe / worn slats doused Dream haunts / harsh cough / plumb tears smart Heart touched / mixed thoughts / frail past frouse JUEJU Jueju is a curtailed verse of Chinese origin that grew popular among Chinese poets during the Tang Dynasty (618–907). Unlike Japanese poetry, for example, haiku, Chinese poetry includes stanzas, metre, and rhyme schemes. It places a focus on friendship rather than love or being a lover. Friendships, to the village, the community, the country, or your drinking friends are dominant themes. It is all about the poet, the meaning for the poet, and not what is happening around him. The English form was first taught by Dr Jonathan Stalling at UC Berkeley in 1997. Jueju poems are always quatrains (mimicking the Rubaiyat, per Dr Stalling), with a rhyme scheme of aaba (NOT a pair of rhyming couplets), and either 5 or 7 monosyllables per line. The new parallelism: not only must the tonal qualities of the words march horizontally, but it must also match vertically; similarity in the first two lines, with contrast in line three. Line 4 breaks this pattern without parallels or anti-parallels to the preceding lines. Each line is divided into phrases of 2, (2), & 3 syllables—natural caesurae. The words are ‘imagistic’. The word units should pair off, more than they do between the groups. The design: • Line 1 Qi (beginning) sets the scene (usually with a reference to nature) • Line 2 Cheng (development) expands the image and mood of this external scene • Line 3 Zhuan (returning) contrasts with start—it has an emotional resonance • Line 4 Jie (finishing) ponders the meaning and draws the parts together It creates a mood rather than tell a story, imparting wisdom about loss, grief, love, and beauty. A successful poem balances the sounds, meaning, and overall arrangement of words in complex ways. Remember Classical Chinese Poetry resembles word games more than English poetry does, so learning the rules is best thought of as gameplay. Punctuation is superfluous. USEFUL LINK: https://poems.com/features/what-sparks-poetry/jonathan-stalling-on-spring-snow/ ______________________________________________________________ frouse: A non-gender-specific single word term for a significant other; just as "spouse" is the non-gender-specific term for husband or wife. roused: (v.) this is a homonym: 1. caused to wake up; 2. To make angry.

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Date: 3/30/2021 9:10:00 AM
All I can do is respond like Susan...WOW! The time and effort that went into this alone commands utmost respect. This is difficult, tedious, mind-bending writing for anyone who might think it is easy! Good stuff, Sus. Keep up the good work!
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/30/2021 11:14:00 AM
Many thanks for your support, and kind comments.
Date: 3/30/2021 8:10:00 AM
Wow! So much better and moodier but also the last words fit now This should be the jueju explanation and example for soup :)
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/30/2021 8:04:00 PM
lol - another purist. ;)) Thank ever so much for your help - I can only grow with the assistance of poets like you. Again, thank you.
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Susan Woodrow
Date: 3/30/2021 7:14:00 PM
Now i feel obliged to go relabel my Jamaica write as general verse hehe i was feeling rebellious at the time but not against the Chinese :))
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/30/2021 12:31:00 PM
I would be honoured if PoetrySoup.com would consider your suggestion. As I am not a Premium Member, I doubt whether they would pay attention to a suggestion by me (I might be wrong, though). :))
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Suzette Richards
Date: 3/30/2021 11:12:00 AM
Thank you for this high praise.