Dawn

There was truth. As I watched you there. In the comfort of strangers. Except they were not strangers. Like a dream within a dream. You felt yourself sinking within the fire. One life of many, you played in all life. Do you even have a soul to be saved? I watch you dance around the fire. I see your skirt has caught fire. As you swim among the angels light. I see some truth within your light. Though you live beyond the edge of night. Waiting there for your prince to come. Dancing on the edge of time. Dancing closer to the fire. Giants of old have come crashing down. The end is coming soon, hear the trumpets sound. Waiting for the dawn to come back around. Wed 9am 8/ 28/ 2013

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Shadow Hamilton

Date: 5/28/2014 8:52:00 AM

a thrilling poem Debbie superbly penned hugs

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/10/2014 4:22:00 PM

Debbie, .. I posted a new poem would you like to take a trip and read my poem..... You will find your name on my latest... hehehehHeheheh, WARNNING!!! It is a long poem... :) :) LINDA

Karen Anglesey

Date: 9/30/2013 5:05:00 PM

I was captivated by the mystical quality in this. Seems to be an eerie sense of conflict within the self in this one. How will we be judged in the final hour?

Cherl Dunn

Date: 9/16/2013 6:05:00 PM

This is sad but well written I am part native american and we believe that the end will being a new age of mankind an age of enlightenment and hope. thank you for your comments on my work friend.

Duncan Chappell

Date: 9/15/2013 1:16:00 AM

love it ,nothing more to say master in all xxxx duncan

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/15/2013 1:42:00 AM

Thank you ;}

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/7/2013 8:10:00 AM

Also the top of your head is red--kind of like the sun coming up after an all night party to light things up. You are sunshine! I had to say it.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/7/2013 2:22:00 PM

thank you Duke ;}

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/7/2013 8:08:00 AM

Debbie, you definitely have a style all your own. It's very enjoyable to read and let the words create an image in my mind. On its face, this is about the end of night. And this happens over and over. I have never thought of anything quite like this and it is a charming insight into the way you view the world. It is complex and mystifying I do admit. You have something very special. Thank-you for all your comments. It means a lot to me.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/7/2013 8:54:00 AM

I haven't seen you for a while,, thank you for reading , as always ;}

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 9/6/2013 1:21:00 PM

Hi Debbie; I like your poem. It reminds me of something I saw on the news the other night. Somewhere I think was in Peru that people are hearing some strange sounds - like trumpets are being played and we could hear them, but no one know where the sound is coming from. They think it could be the Angels already playing the trumpets. thanks for sharing... Lucilla

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/7/2013 9:24:00 AM

Thank you Lucilla ,,,, I heard/ read on u tube. the first trumpet sounded in 2008 ;}

Robert Johnson

Date: 9/4/2013 4:12:00 PM

A reflective essence upon itself. Awaiting to be taken down off it's shelf. A wonderful dance into the night Debbie. Peace. :)

Carol Eastman

Date: 9/4/2013 10:09:00 AM

Great imagery. Your pieces always make us stop and think.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/4/2013 10:33:00 PM

Thank you Carol ;}

Terry O'Leary

Date: 9/1/2013 11:59:00 AM

Nice imagery, Debbie...love it... Terry

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/1/2013 1:46:00 PM

Thank you Terry ;}

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 8/30/2013 5:50:00 PM

Nicely done Debbie. The ending is good.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/1/2013 10:56:00 PM

Thank you ;}

Jack Horne

Date: 8/30/2013 9:41:00 AM

wow, awesome write, Debbie

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/1/2013 1:46:00 PM

Thank you Jack ;}

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/30/2013 9:30:00 AM

Indeed it is dramatic and spiritual as well. Very nicely done, Debbie.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 9/7/2013 2:21:00 PM

Thank you Andrea ;}

Ken Carroll

Date: 8/29/2013 10:24:00 PM

Hi Debbie, A well crafted spiritual write...Thanks for sharing.. Ken

Debbie Duncan
Date: 8/29/2013 10:28:00 PM

Thank you Ken ;}

Don Johnson

Date: 8/29/2013 8:18:00 PM

yes waiting for the end to come, the lord of hosts returns for some, fulfil the prophesy, its about, return he will there is no doubt, Apocalypse thou ... Don re : "Dawn" Debbie Duncan

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/29/2013 6:47:00 PM

Very expressive and creative work that you have penned in this one..I am glad that I chose it to read today..Thanks for the visit to my work..I am glad that you liked the song that I suggested..Sara

Jack Ellison

Date: 8/29/2013 6:15:00 PM

Great ending kiddo! A totally amazing effort... big warm hugs xoxox

Debbie Duncan
Date: 8/29/2013 6:34:00 PM

Thank you Jack

Poet Tacito

Date: 8/29/2013 8:46:00 AM

HIghly intense & hard hitting! The horn of judgment sounds strongly. Fantastic.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 8/29/2013 5:01:00 PM

I thank you Drake ;}

Monterey Sirak

Date: 8/29/2013 7:02:00 AM

Amazing poem! Thanks for your visit and comments

Debbie Duncan
Date: 8/29/2013 5:31:00 PM

Thank you ;}

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/29/2013 6:16:00 AM

Very sweet, Debbie...The ending was amazing! :) One of those times when you think, "I wish I could get into her mind and know what inspired this one!" ;) Thanks for your visits to my work! Hugs!

Debbie Duncan
Date: 8/29/2013 11:06:00 PM

Thank you Eileen ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/29/2013 2:41:00 AM

- Oh .... beautiful poem,Debbie. - Have a nice day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Duncan
Date: 8/29/2013 11:06:00 PM

Thank you Anne ;}

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 8/29/2013 1:19:00 AM

Fine rhymin there! A superb poem of imagination. Pls do chk out my latest.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 8/29/2013 9:57:00 PM

Thank you for reading ;}