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Daughters In Doom

Oh my beautiful Daughters what have you done to the men of the Earth, turning the roar of men's' love into notes of shame and whispers, discoloring the gallant glow of trust with untempered lust for popular worth, I made you to be embodiment of something sacred, a steadfast source of Divine sincerity in the chaos of Man's struggle to be heroic, to soothe and inspire His hope for honor, to be the hand he could hold in the tremor of dread, in the Begining you did this much and more, exceeded the seed of my dream, making Them historic, But you, my remorseless and rabid Girls sought to be worshiped as a cult of marauding maidens of madness, a horde of haughty harpies wanting glory your own, thrones tailored from supine bones, pleasured as predators of Princes and paupers saddistic seducers of troubadours and savants, making " high minded " heros helpless on the cliffs of your thrills, Oh my ravenous Daughters what have you done to the hearts of men, what have you become with speared touch and rough laughter, warm in love sport and cold in lip lies, the Furies have your fame and faces framed in black flame the day is soon when your beauty will become ashen, charms unmet with passion, and the Furies will befriend you adorn with thorned fashion, feed you a vulture's ration, Nemesis is on your terrible trail of predatory travail She to unveil the wail of your reward's gale, my lovely Princesses, my girls of gnarled gain a wind storm of lovers' cries flies towards you a punishment Holy in it's honor and horrible in It's hit, bite you shall, sixfold from Humility's tit - J.A.B.

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Dalia Shahein

Date: 12/19/2015 6:50:00 PM

U r very thoughtful and creative person u can write about anything and it will take our breaths away, the second line is beautiful as the rest of the poem...hugs / / :) dalia

Justin Bordner
Date: 12/21/2015 6:58:00 PM

I write what my heart demands, I am an interpreter of divine love my Violet Poetess...J.A.B.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/16/2014 12:01:00 AM

Thank you for the write. I enjoyed reading and expect to read more of your words as time allows. Thank you and happy writing. God bless you.

Justin Bordner
Date: 7/16/2014 8:11:00 PM

Your positive wishes and spirit are a delight for me Regina. The products of my creative process sustains my happiness significantly Regina, as the inspiration burns through my blood. J.A.B.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/15/2014 4:00:00 PM

A powerful wise message.Our skin is only a dress covering the real thing We should nourish with dignity-that would be our soul.Enlightening poem indeed!!Charma

Justin Bordner
Date: 7/15/2014 9:44:00 PM

Carma you express with beautiful clarity a vital virtue, being true to our souls, and the souls of others. I'm honored that this poem found your wisdom. J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 6/28/2014 2:30:00 PM

Just had to read this gem again. By the way, your comments on my poetry are always so sweet and thoughtful - thank you so much for your kindness...Always, Laura

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/29/2014 7:51:00 PM

You're one of the best things in my life Laura. Thanks for being remarkable! ! J.A.B.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 6/27/2014 8:27:00 PM

Great writing Justin. Lust without trust will never manifest. Lust of a beautiful body is a temptation test. You are skilled... Verlena

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/28/2014 12:46:00 PM

Trusting ourselves sufficiently to respect the hearts of others Verlena, and the gifts that God has bestowed. I thank you for your excellent philosophical insight my friend. J.A.B.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/27/2014 2:15:00 AM

Wow, your last line....the final blow that fells the harlots and they never saw it coming as they were too busy in their lustful longings. Great writing Justin! It is late and words are failing me, so I guess I better head for bed.

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/27/2014 1:27:00 PM

I am very glad that my work is able to invoke your passion and sense of justice Connie, that mesns a lot to me. Incidentally, thete are accounts of Jesus falling I love with a professional love maker named Mary. Some even believe she was a devoted Disciple, and the Mother of his children. Who knows... rest well my friend, and thank you. J.A.B.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/26/2014 10:15:00 PM

Loved seeing your reply to me. I would search your poems but I swear I think I saw them all . I remember a long time ago when you were posting regularly and I had quite the time finding new ones of yours to see! My black cat is trying to get me to feed her and I am dying to get offline, so I bid you adieu!

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/27/2014 1:41:00 PM

I understand Andrea, my Egyptian Gray cat, R.I.P., used to attack my feet if went untreated too long. You are a dynamo. J.A.B.

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 6/25/2014 6:18:00 PM

This is a beautiful and touching poem I have enjoyed reading tonight. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/26/2014 1:32:00 AM

I am so happy you visited, and found beauty in this poem Lucilla. You are wise person, and a writer who raises hearts to greater awareness of appreciation for Life's lessons. Thanks, J.A.B.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/25/2014 12:06:00 PM

a ragingly beautiful rant of piece... you really got me deep into this,justin.. heaven must be riveting!.. huggs

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/25/2014 2:19:00 PM

Deep feelings teach deeply Nette. Some would would say Heaven is a circus. Thank you Nette. J.A.B.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/24/2014 3:44:00 PM

when you said to me that God is a surrealist too, it made me laugh because that makes me know why I understand Him so little!!! Just finished reading this one now, and my oh my, what a closing line: from humility's tit. That was funny. this one made me think of today's rock singers such as Beyonce or that girl who does the quirking thing. Such sweet girls stooping so low. I think it must make God sad what they are doing to themselves.

Jay Loveless
Date: 6/25/2014 5:03:00 PM

twirking*?

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/24/2014 9:00:00 PM

Andrea, your humor and wisdom always conveys the richest delight to those grappling with hyperconfusion. Your view point is duely noted, your spirit a refreshment. Thank you so much! J.A.B.

Kim Van Breda

Date: 6/24/2014 3:19:00 PM

Excellent write Justin. Very deep and I appreciated the broad spectrum of opinion. Xx~Xx

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/24/2014 8:51:00 PM

Kim, your cool, and smart in your curiosity of Consciousness' spectrum. I appreciate your visit. J.A.B.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/24/2014 7:26:00 AM

I did not take this to mean all women but believe there are some that in their deep seeded need for love and attention bring themselves and men to destruction. Your imagery and depiction of God's angst are exceptional. Between your words I feel his desie for reconciliation and the wish to have women experience the transcendence of who he made them to be. 77777777 all the way my friend.

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/24/2014 8:41:00 PM

Richard, your sober analysis of this poem is enlightening, and clearly demonstrates the goodwill and temperance that emanates from your soul and in your poetry. Your kindness is of inestimable worth to me, thank you. J.A.B.

Jay Loveless

Date: 6/23/2014 1:31:00 PM

Wow, powerful story. Sexy and seductive, resonating with a Fathers regret. Beautiful write!

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/23/2014 2:27:00 PM

Jay, I knew my faith in your beauty to feel and see the import of this work would not be in vain. Your mind is remarkably diverse, your passion fierce, and you have the heart of a Heroine. J.A.B.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/22/2014 12:12:00 AM

Hi Justin, I saw we have a mutual friend in JS and wanted to check out your work. Throughout history women have been demonized as witches, sirens and the like. You made a point well taken, though I have had similar reproach toward men at times. Psychologists try to pigeon-hole people into types of characters when there are far more differences than similarities. Certainly gave me something to ponder before I lash out at men. VERY well written and compelling! Best wishes, Carolyn

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/22/2014 8:54:00 PM

I trust in the psychology and inspiration of Providence. I hope there is truth and constructive purpose in your psychological endeavors Carolyn. Thank you for respecting my writing style as well as it's meaning my friend. J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 6/21/2014 2:58:00 PM

I think Humility is depicted as the female avenger for these other sinful women. “a wind storm of lovers' cries flies towards you” That’s got to be one strong storm!!! Sorry. I’m ranting. I just love this poem! Thank you for sharing your talent and wisdom. Always, Laura

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/21/2014 7:58:00 PM

There is a sad and solemn wrath in this composition Laura. Your compliments stagger me, and the depth of your appreciation and analysis of this work is inspiring. You possess such a sharp mind and sensitive soul, it makes you a Masterpiece. Humility is like a Heroine for us all. You are a blessing to me, thanks for the love. J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 6/21/2014 2:57:00 PM

awesome. It feels like God is speaking to these women…with a sadness and disappointment so beautifully crafted through a very special man’s words. “a punishment Holy in it's honor and horrible in It's hit, bite you shall, sixfold from Humility's tit –“ What a piercing way to end this poem. What really made me think this a very god-like poem is the fourth and last stanza explaining so eloquently and prophetically what is to happen because of their actions.

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 6/21/2014 2:56:00 PM

This magnificent piece has become my new favorite of yours. -and in my mental collection of the finest poems. I love all of your lines - some that stood out to me : "to soothe and inspire His hope for honor, to be the hand he could hold in the tremor of dread" ..."making " high minded "heros helpless on the cliffs of your thrills,"..."the day is soon when your beauty will become ashen, charms unmet with passion,and the Furies will befriend you"....and just too many more. This was utterly----

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/20/2014 11:10:00 AM

To be honest with you, Justin, I read this write earlier, but was at a loss for a comment. It made me sad, in some way. You seem to have painted women with the same brush....granted, there are those who do all the things you mentioned. I don't think evil is gender specific, but women are more conniving than men, and men are often lost to their real motives and intentions. Sometimes only a woman will understand another woman's true nature. As for a work of art, this was fabulous. Hope you're OK.

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 6/22/2014 12:15:00 AM

I agree that women can be more conniving, but from my experience it seems men show less remorse and are more reluctant to admit when they have erred. The broad brush strokes go both ways, Eileen

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/20/2014 2:27:00 PM

Your interpretation and feelings are well respected Eileen, as is your Art and Soul with me. You are a marvelous person. I possess much love in my life Eileen, I receive much love, and I give much love, you help me do this my friend. I am happy and inspired. Thank you for being candid. J.A.B.

A.E. Rivenbark

Date: 6/18/2014 8:30:00 PM

Oh this is vicious, loved the personification and imagery :D Marvelous write

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/19/2014 1:35:00 AM

A vicious punishment for a vicious abuse of strength and beauty Riverbank. Nemesis is most intruiging, my favorite Goddess. Thanks for acknowleding the petsonification facet to this composition Riverbank. J.A.B.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/18/2014 4:07:00 PM

A powerful write, I hope all is well in your life, hope this princess holds out well, the truth will expose every inner demon, dooming wombs that are nothing more than a lost thought. Sorry to hear you are going through a match like this, or whatever this is. We are all wicked and equal in every bite, in a world filled with envy and selfsolitude, --committing to an everyday fire. I do like the condensation, that hangs on the ceiling of us all... Love this write. Linda

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/19/2014 1:30:00 AM

Continued 2....thank you for the deeps thoughts and friendship my Sphinx. J.A.B.

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/19/2014 1:28:00 AM

Continued...Obviously this perspective, in this poem is expressed through the voice and feelings of God realizing the disillusionment of this plan and hope being thwarted by these women misusing their abilities to corrupt love rather than enriching it for the benefit of all humanity. As with most, my life is new everyday and rewarding every night. The women who are apart of my life are absolute blessings Linda.

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/19/2014 1:10:00 AM

One of the things I love about you Linda is your poetically philosophical comments on my art. This is poetry from a man's perspective, addressing the need for women to be a sacred support for men in their struggle to be something more than brute, to be noble as a result of their women's grace and strength.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/18/2014 1:09:00 PM

deep pondering an wailing so remarkably scribed,justin.. i feel the beauty and woe of your thoughts!.. huggs

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/18/2014 2:06:00 PM

Thank you Nette. My strength, talent and lament is shared with Providence, along with all men and women trying their very best daily to bring out the best in God's marvelous creatures. I vvery thankful for the strong and gracious women in my life Nette, my Mother being foremost, who taught me ferocity, whetewithal, and empathy. J.A.B.

Skat A

Date: 6/18/2014 12:08:00 PM

This is very good J A B... Much to say here, but I'd rather not. :) I will keep my thoughts to myself. ~SKAT~

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/18/2014 1:56:00 PM

This poem is meant illustrate the vulnerability of good men, the that women are not exempt from being Machiavellian nor from being malvolent, and that Providence holds both Sexes accountable for the violence in this world. Women bring human life into this world, they can also deliver honor or dishonor. You are a wise woman Skat, and a friend, I know you will appreciate this poetry. J.A.B.

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/18/2014 1:47:00 PM

In many respects this composition emphasises the awesome power that women own in this world Skat. However, this write also challenges their innocence and corruptability, vices that are seemingly more often acknowledged in men. Women have enormous burden and responsibility in this world, and sometimes their motives and habits only serve to further weaken the human race. J.A.B.

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/18/2014 1:30:00 PM

Gotta love the Soup glitches, which tend to occur while simultaneously replying to and receiving new comments. LOL...

Justin Bordner
Date: 6/18/2014 1:19:00 PM

I am grateful for the Honor JSL. I deeply respect the sincerity, "Street", and wisdom in your work. This composition is not intended to be malvolent towards women, it just presents a perspective that there are women throughout History who have misused their talents and blessings, failing to better humanity, and that justice isn't always nice. J.A.B.