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Darkness At Noon

The sable noon’s hues part the glow When your form coils into a shadow Impaired by whiffs in a forest As twisted leaf gnarls on its breasts Layered, bleak gaze avoid our plight Beneath old trees, I find no delight From summer’s heat reeking of woes; Lamenting vows that decompose. Branches thirst for a glistened sun Mirroring frail ardor, undone While the ravage of time’s dismay Ensnares lost destiny, to slay! Dr. Ram Mehta's Darknes At Noon by nette onclaud<

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Sam Raj

Date: 5/16/2014 11:18:00 AM

Dear Nette, A excellent write, a winner all the way. Enjoyed the read immensely. A wonderful experience. Congrats on the win. Thanks for the wonderful experience I had. SAM :-)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/15/2014 8:25:00 PM

GREAT job in the contest, Nette. BIG congratulations to you.

Lori Lucas Mcclure

Date: 5/15/2014 1:27:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! Lori

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 5/15/2014 11:46:00 AM

Beautiful words n a wonderful write Nette ! N u r a winner of great poetry in a great contest ! Congrats !

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/15/2014 10:06:00 AM

Thanks for your support and congrats on a win in my poem, nette

Aiyah Torres

Date: 5/15/2014 9:34:00 AM

awesome poem... Congratulations ,nette!! ^_^

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/15/2014 8:23:00 AM

- Congratulations on your wonderful winning poem, sweet Nette ! - Well deserved! - (I have not participated in the contest for a while - like writing whatever comes to my mind.) - Have a nice day. - Be proud of your write :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Cindy Cayton

Date: 5/8/2014 3:54:00 PM

awesome as always from an excellent writer as yourself. Always good to read you. Cindy aka Lucinda

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 5/7/2014 1:45:00 PM

A very good portrayal of darkness at noon nette!

Brooke Dylan

Date: 5/6/2014 11:50:00 PM

BEAUTIFUL WORDS... imagery is wonderful.. I can feel every word...This poem evokes quite an emotion in me. A time when I too could smell the lonely trees.... Brooke

Cherl Dunn

Date: 5/6/2014 8:39:00 PM

Beauty put to words motion, love this one good luck in the contest girl you have a great chance with this wonderful entry. cheri

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/6/2014 6:11:00 PM

a very good entry for that contest, Nette. YOu captured the mood of the theme perfectly. (food quiz results up!)

Jake Ponce

Date: 5/6/2014 5:41:00 PM

Nette, recently I observed that you've been embodying the Earth Mother vibe. I might be wrong but it works really well - Earthy, Lush, Scenic and Artistically Explicit.

Brooke Dylan

Date: 5/6/2014 3:28:00 PM

Bravo.. excellent writing ....this must be for a contest.. good luck and I would think you will win... wonderful writing.. Brooke

Aiyah Torres

Date: 5/6/2014 3:25:00 PM

sadness barely felt through our heart...but you covered the pain w/ the beauty in your hand.. :O) this is awe to the highest level...!!! ^_^ xoxo

Banjo Casto

Date: 5/6/2014 2:53:00 PM

Nostalgia, heartache it's all expressed so well in these profound and sullen lines.Had fun in your contest; many thanks, Nette

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/6/2014 2:15:00 PM

Realty is nicely penned, simply I do say what I have felt here. "Branches thirst for a glistened sun".... time to time effect. Beautifully done and genius poem. Good luck in the contest, my lovely friend, Loved always, bl

Jajosh Ongado

Date: 5/6/2014 2:13:00 PM

What a flowing verse, calling on noon, never relenting, knowing it cannot alter time, only offer short solace.I adore this, Nette. I defer to your talent!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/6/2014 12:17:00 PM

- I'm back from vacation, Nette... - "DARKNESS AT NOON" is a beautiful poem, but so sad ..... - I wish you good luck in the contest - a worthy winner poem! - <3 U - oxox // Anne-Lise :)