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Dark Surrender

for days he follows a man dressed in black eyes fathomless pools I feel his yearning his hunger and I am smitten curious dreading him yet he enthralls me to surrender- confusion fear overwhelms me he is breathing oh desire in his room whispering my name . . . his voice a deep baritone demanding terrifying those fathomless eyes look down at me I am lost I pull him close he strokes my flowing raven hair his eyes cold as ice daggers to my soul love(or hate) lust passion possession he wants to control me and violently he crushes my ruby red lips with a demanding kiss and then the kiss is beautiful words evil he is need lust he says vile things oh those dark fathomless eyes go away come back I love you he wraps his arms around me we are spinning and swirling lost in love for how long are we locked in that embrace it seems like days then he stops his smile is mean and cruel he laughs I am nothing without his kiss I am a love hostage held in chains and when he turns away I weep for him and hate myself dark this lust I MUST find the strength to leave there is no sweetness this is WRONG lost as his fathomless eyes must get away must find the courage to walk away leave leave I hear the door close and quickly dress the rooms smell moldy finding the door I turn the knob it is locked and I am screaming . . . _____________________________ February 01, 2016 Poetry/Free Verse/dark surrender Copyright Protected, ID 02- 751-068-01 All Rights Reserved, 2016, Constance La France Submitted to the Standard contest, Any Poem Written On Your Birthday II sponsor, Laura Loo, 01/2016 First Place Written for the Standard contest, The Dark Side of Life sponsor, Shadow Hamilton Fifth Place

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Date: 7/29/2017 6:01:00 PM
I adore the darkly erotic, and this is exquisitely done with that flavor ... wonderful write and well-deserved placement, BW - congrats, my friend! :-)
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Date: 7/28/2017 1:21:00 PM
Wow...this is dark yet real! Congratulations on your wonderful first placement Constance! : )
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Date: 7/28/2017 10:47:00 AM
This is such a beautifully written verse, Constance, the seductiveness the desires, oh my... and i love the spacings for each breath you take... awesome. Congratulations on your win ~*
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Date: 7/28/2017 9:45:00 AM
Amazing and well deserved placement Constance.
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Date: 7/28/2017 6:56:00 AM
Full of suspense and intrigue. Lived this poem so much, you are so gifted...thank you
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Date: 3/9/2016 8:26:00 AM
I think i forgot to put in the rating Constance. Just in case, there we go....MIKE.
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Constance La France
Date: 3/9/2016 9:45:00 PM
Thank you so much... double 7!
Date: 3/9/2016 8:24:00 AM
Hi Constance, your dreams go into the dark side and yet your words can still bring beauty within the deep swirling emotions you lay before us. An intoxicating tale of the allure of dark men. A sensual write that sings of a deep longing for different. Belated congratulations for your win in this contest. I was held from start to finish Constance, this excellent write goes into my faves and it has to be a top rating, a seven....MIKE.
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Constance La France
Date: 3/9/2016 9:45:00 PM
Mike, thanks so much for that wonderful comment and the fav and the 7, so appreciated...
Date: 2/6/2016 11:45:00 PM
Thanks for the reply....hugs
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Date: 2/6/2016 4:16:00 PM
Broken, Congrats on "Your Dark Side of Love WIN!!!" XOX ~LINDA~
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Constance La France
Date: 2/6/2016 11:44:00 PM
Linda, thanks for the congrats and the XOX ~
Date: 2/5/2016 1:47:00 PM
wow.. startling piece, constance... applause for your greeat win!..huggs
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Date: 2/5/2016 2:36:00 PM
Nette, thanks for the wow and the congratulations and the hugs!
Date: 2/5/2016 9:02:00 AM
Congrats on your placement, Constance! I have such a weakness for your emotions!
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Constance La France
Date: 2/5/2016 9:07:00 AM
Balveen, thanks for the congratulations and you humble me with your praise !
Date: 2/5/2016 7:26:00 AM
Intense short story like write. Let me guess, as the story progresses he turns out to be a vampire and her unassuming friend turns out to be the guy she really loves and saves her. Great write!!
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Constance La France
Date: 2/5/2016 9:10:00 AM
James, thanks for visiting, no he is not a vampire but an evil man seeking out silly love lonely girls, perhaps you are the unassuming friend who breaks down the door and saves the girl, and they fall in love because it is a beautiful love ~
Date: 2/4/2016 6:23:00 PM
Amazing, and so, so dark, BW. I know this was fiction, but you had me there in that room and oh so worried and frightened! Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra
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Constance La France
Date: 2/5/2016 9:15:00 AM
Sandra, thanks for the amazing and the congratulations, when I wrote this I was there living it, that is my gift as a writer, I can live in the write and thanks for the hugs !
Date: 2/4/2016 1:09:00 PM
Broken Wings, such depth and you flow so amazing in every poem I read. Congrats on your placement :)*smiles* -luloo
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Constance La France
Date: 2/4/2016 1:41:00 PM
Laura, thanks for the congrats and the amazing and the smiles !
Date: 2/4/2016 9:46:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this dark descriptive poem. I actually felt fear just reading it.
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Constance La France
Date: 2/4/2016 1:42:00 PM
Susan, thank you for the congratulation, you felt fear, aaah then I accomplished what I wanted the reader to feel ~~
Date: 2/4/2016 7:54:00 AM
so dramatic Connie great pen congrats on placing hugs
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Date: 2/4/2016 8:04:00 AM
Shadow thank you for the congratulations and the great theme to write on, I am very honored with my placement. ..
Date: 2/4/2016 6:39:00 AM
such powerful imagery I found your words so chilling many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx7
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Date: 2/4/2016 8:05:00 AM
Jan, thanks for the congratulations and yes chilling is what I was going for! !!
Date: 2/4/2016 6:35:00 AM
well she certainly got herself caught in a web. Well done, BW, and congratulations on your placement. ;)
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Constance La France
Date: 2/4/2016 8:08:00 AM
Lin, thanks for the congratulations, sadly there are men out there just waiting for victims, so although this write is fiction , it does happen ~
Date: 2/3/2016 4:06:00 PM
well written BW, this shows how dark it is when love turns...blue, superb expressions there, best of luck in the contest
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Constance La France
Date: 2/3/2016 8:14:00 PM
Sage, thanks for the visit and the compliment and the superb, oh I like that word !
Date: 2/2/2016 6:36:00 PM
Really powerful imagery--I like how it draws you in to one mood, then turns suddenly and unexpectedly. I like well-crafted poems that--what's the word?--pivot? Kudos!
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Date: 2/2/2016 6:40:00 PM
Brian, thanks for visiting my poem and for that great comment, appreciate and oh love the words powerful and pivot ~

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