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for days he follows   a man dressed in black   eyes fathomless pools
I feel his yearning    his hunger    and I am smitten    curious
dreading  him yet he enthralls me to surrender-
confusion    fear overwhelms me    he is breathing   oh desire
in his room    whispering my name . . . 

his voice a deep baritone    demanding   terrifying  
those fathomless eyes look down at me    I am lost   I pull him close
he strokes my flowing raven hair    his eyes cold as ice
daggers to my soul    love(or hate)  lust   passion  possession
he wants to control me and violently he crushes my ruby red lips
with a demanding kiss and then the kiss is beautiful
words evil    he is need   lust    he says vile things

oh  those dark fathomless eyes   go away    come back   I love you
he wraps his arms around me   we are spinning and swirling  lost in love
for how long are we locked in that embrace  it seems like days
then he stops     his smile is mean and cruel     he laughs  
I am nothing without his kiss     I am a love hostage held in chains 
and when he turns away     I weep for him and hate myself
dark this lust      I MUST find the strength to leave

there is no sweetness    this is WRONG    lost as his fathomless eyes
must get away     must find the courage to walk away  leave     leave
I hear the door close and quickly dress     the rooms smell moldy
finding the door   I turn the knob    it is locked 
and I am screaming  . . . 

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February 1, 2016

Poetry/Free Verse/dark surrender
Copyright Protected, ID 16- 751-068-0
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.



Submitted to the contest, Any Poem Written On Your Birthday II
sponsor, Laura Loo

First Place
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Written for the contest, The Dark Side of Life 
sponsor, Shadow Hamilton

Fifth Place

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Date: 7/29/2017 6:01:00 PM
I adore the darkly erotic, and this is exquisitely done with that flavor ... wonderful write and well-deserved placement, BW - congrats, my friend! :-)
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Date: 7/28/2017 1:21:00 PM
Wow...this is dark yet real! Congratulations on your wonderful first placement Constance! : )
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Date: 7/28/2017 10:47:00 AM
This is such a beautifully written verse, Constance, the seductiveness the desires, oh my... and i love the spacings for each breath you take... awesome. Congratulations on your win ~*
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Date: 7/28/2017 9:45:00 AM
Amazing and well deserved placement Constance.
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Date: 7/28/2017 6:56:00 AM
Full of suspense and intrigue. Lived this poem so much, you are so gifted...thank you
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Date: 3/9/2016 8:26:00 AM
I think i forgot to put in the rating Constance. Just in case, there we go....MIKE.
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Date: 3/9/2016 9:45:00 PM
Thank you so much... double 7!
Date: 3/9/2016 8:24:00 AM
Hi Constance, your dreams go into the dark side and yet your words can still bring beauty within the deep swirling emotions you lay before us. An intoxicating tale of the allure of dark men. A sensual write that sings of a deep longing for different. Belated congratulations for your win in this contest. I was held from start to finish Constance, this excellent write goes into my faves and it has to be a top rating, a seven....MIKE.
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Dear Heart
Date: 3/9/2016 9:45:00 PM
Mike, thanks so much for that wonderful comment and the fav and the 7, so appreciated...
Date: 2/6/2016 11:45:00 PM
Thanks for the reply....hugs
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Date: 2/6/2016 4:16:00 PM
Broken, Congrats on "Your Dark Side of Love WIN!!!" XOX ~LINDA~
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/6/2016 11:44:00 PM
Linda, thanks for the congrats and the XOX ~
Date: 2/5/2016 1:47:00 PM
wow.. startling piece, constance... applause for your greeat win!..huggs
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Date: 2/5/2016 2:36:00 PM
Nette, thanks for the wow and the congratulations and the hugs!
Date: 2/5/2016 9:02:00 AM
Congrats on your placement, Constance! I have such a weakness for your emotions!
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/5/2016 9:07:00 AM
Balveen, thanks for the congratulations and you humble me with your praise !
Date: 2/5/2016 7:26:00 AM
Intense short story like write. Let me guess, as the story progresses he turns out to be a vampire and her unassuming friend turns out to be the guy she really loves and saves her. Great write!!
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/5/2016 9:10:00 AM
James, thanks for visiting, no he is not a vampire but an evil man seeking out silly love lonely girls, perhaps you are the unassuming friend who breaks down the door and saves the girl, and they fall in love because it is a beautiful love ~
Date: 2/5/2016 1:51:00 AM
BRAVO. This is a true masterpiece, Constance. I am totally spellbound by your incredible, talented "dark" writes. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest (1st place in my book). A7 (would like to give double points - is that possible?) and fave's for sure. T.J
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/5/2016 9:13:00 AM
Teppo, oh thanks for the compliments on my writing, I do admit to liking dark writes, and I have quite the imagination for it, I actually can live it in my head, thanks for the congratulations, the 7 and the fav , so appreciated !
Date: 2/4/2016 6:23:00 PM
Amazing, and so, so dark, BW. I know this was fiction, but you had me there in that room and oh so worried and frightened! Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/5/2016 9:15:00 AM
Sandra, thanks for the amazing and the congratulations, when I wrote this I was there living it, that is my gift as a writer, I can live in the write and thanks for the hugs !
Date: 2/4/2016 1:09:00 PM
Broken Wings, such depth and you flow so amazing in every poem I read. Congrats on your placement :)*smiles* -luloo
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/4/2016 1:41:00 PM
Laura, thanks for the congrats and the amazing and the smiles !
Date: 2/4/2016 9:46:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this dark descriptive poem. I actually felt fear just reading it.
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/4/2016 1:42:00 PM
Susan, thank you for the congratulation, you felt fear, aaah then I accomplished what I wanted the reader to feel ~~
Date: 2/4/2016 7:54:00 AM
so dramatic Connie great pen congrats on placing hugs
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/4/2016 8:04:00 AM
Shadow thank you for the congratulations and the great theme to write on, I am very honored with my placement. ..
Date: 2/4/2016 6:39:00 AM
such powerful imagery I found your words so chilling many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx7
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/4/2016 8:05:00 AM
Jan, thanks for the congratulations and yes chilling is what I was going for! !!
Date: 2/4/2016 6:35:00 AM
well she certainly got herself caught in a web. Well done, BW, and congratulations on your placement. ;)
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/4/2016 8:08:00 AM
Lin, thanks for the congratulations, sadly there are men out there just waiting for victims, so although this write is fiction , it does happen ~
Date: 2/3/2016 4:06:00 PM
well written BW, this shows how dark it is when love turns...blue, superb expressions there, best of luck in the contest
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/3/2016 8:14:00 PM
Sage, thanks for the visit and the compliment and the superb, oh I like that word !
Date: 2/2/2016 6:36:00 PM
Really powerful imagery--I like how it draws you in to one mood, then turns suddenly and unexpectedly. I like well-crafted poems that--what's the word?--pivot? Kudos!
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Dear Heart
Date: 2/2/2016 6:40:00 PM
Brian, thanks for visiting my poem and for that great comment, appreciate and oh love the words powerful and pivot ~