Premiere Contest WinnerDark Side of Oakleys

Dark side of Oakleys.

The black, short linen dress,
floats and careses her thighs, 
a moition so sweet!
In the eveloping heat.
Fine african beads,
dance loose on dark skin,  
caress the breasts above
from a heart beat within.
She sways, and he staggers
In a moment he stands
amongst all the sand that has 
fallen, and crumbled off 
the sandcastle Man.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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Sambourne Avatar
September 21, 2022 at 7:56 AM
Strong images of sensual desire on a sandy shore. Terrific final 4 lines that shift focus to your Sandcastle Man. Congratulations! Brian
Lusardi Avatar
September 29, 2022 at 11:21 AM
Many thanks on your observance of this short write. Its much valued Brian.
Alex Avatar
September 14, 2022 at 7:36 AM
Wow! What a scenic and picturesque work! Congratulations!
Lusardi Avatar
September 29, 2022 at 11:25 AM
Thank you
Lusardi Avatar
September 29, 2022 at 11:24 AM
Many thanks, your comment is much appreciated
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September 29, 2022 at 11:22 AM
Many thanks, your comment is much appreciated
Kendrick Avatar
September 10, 2022 at 3:41 PM
Very descriptive and expressive work you have penned in this one. Thanks for sharing. Sara
Lusardi Avatar
September 10, 2022 at 8:43 PM
Thank you, for your comment. It is much appreciated.
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