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Dark Clouds Are Gathering

"Within the fog the distant mountains strain bruised in shades of lavender and forest green each angle decomposing in the rain"
I wander across rugged steep terrain pausing to see the ever changing scene within the fog the distant mountains strain
Heavy storm clouds drift high across the plain soon grass glistens with a silvery sheen each angle decomposing in the rain
I’m cold and damp but I cannot complain on brighter days a fine vista is seen, within the fog the distant mountains strain
I hope these stunning landscapes will remain though poor weather isn’t always foreseen each angle decomposing in the rain In time I will see bright blue skies again of azure blue or pale aquamarine Within the fog the distant mountains strain each angle, decomposing in the rain Choose Your Form Poetry Contest Stanza 1 chosen which is in bold and was written by Joseph May as contest prompt checked with rhymezone Sponsored by Joseph May 05/04/21
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May Avatar
May 14, 2021 at 6:03 AM
Wonderful write Jan, Congrats on your win
Ligon Avatar
May 13, 2021 at 9:09 AM
I love your message of hope in the midst of storm. Congratulations!
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 8, 2021 at 5:04 PM
Your rhyme is superb in this wonderfully composed Villanelle Jan. I am sure Joseph will rate this gem high. I think you chose a challenging form and you certainly Rose to meet it. Have a beautiful Mother’s Day my friend! I loved this and I am Faving it! Blessings, Connie xxoo
Koplin Avatar
May 7, 2021 at 5:42 PM
Amazing write Jan! Incredibly well written!
Krutsinger Avatar
May 7, 2021 at 11:55 AM
Incredible imagery "I hope these stunning landscapes will remain" - me too!
Andresen Avatar
May 6, 2021 at 6:33 AM
- Even with dark clouds it is a stunning landscapes ... a wonderful poem, Jan :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Horsman Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 9:30 PM
When the last four lines shout out so loud, its proof of something special, in fact it is more than that, its amazing poetry......
Leffanta Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 12:05 PM
MAY you win! Aloha! Rico
Babbit Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 10:07 AM
Lobve it - especially the line "decomposing in the rain".
Babbit Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 10:08 AM
I apologize, my eyes aren't what they used to be. Love it, love it, love it.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 9:19 AM
Lovely villanelle! Like looking at a painting and its nuances. Hugs.
Mcintosh Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 6:58 AM
I just love this... Such a inspiration!! Wonderful writing. God bless you always. Love, Gina
Ricci Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 4:12 AM
Good Morning Jan. I found this entry to be poetry in true form with poetic elements attached. It reads and flows wonderfully. It was an honor to read this. Best wishes for the contest and thank you for sharing.
Buhagiar Avatar
May 4, 2021 at 10:50 PM
Brilliant villanelle. I read that extract so many times but the muse was o holiday. Yours was in full swing. Hugs.
Edmonds  Avatar
May 4, 2021 at 6:01 PM
A superb Villanelle Jan, good how you’ve used a line from Joseph’s verse. Best wishes… Belle xx
De Beaulieu Avatar
May 4, 2021 at 4:00 PM
Hello Jan, enjoyed this poem. We are both sky watchers. You never know what you see in the sky. Day or evening. Hugs Darlene
Kavanagh  Avatar
May 4, 2021 at 3:05 PM
Heya Jan, Your scenic poem does more than justice to Josephs fantastic prompt, it’s full of doleful character and hope of blue skies again, best of luck in the contest, cheers David
Logan Avatar
May 4, 2021 at 2:47 PM
I haven't read the instructions for the contest, but I was wondering why the first one was bold. Very nice follow through, Jan.
Cunningham Avatar
May 4, 2021 at 2:34 PM
Love how you wrapped your villanelle around Joseph's stanza, I find them tricky to write. Well composed. Tom. P S. So far no symptoms although doc said I could have some flu like symptoms but so far so good, but don't think I'll be going abroad with all the varients about though.
Allison Avatar
May 4, 2021 at 2:40 PM
Thanks Tom i do enjoy this form but it is a challenge to write, glad you are OK I am still suffering a month on:-( we wont be leaving the Island for any form of travel will wait until the world is a much safer place:-) hugs jan xx
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