Viv Wigley Poet Sonnet

Dancing With Description- Contest

Alarm as mind is hurled in icy cage
 deaf to what between them nurses said,
 orchestra of terror took the stage
 and heartbeat had took refuge in my head

 'Just keep you're breathing steady, won't be long,
 you're doing well', consultant's last remark,
 metallic taste was forming on my tongue,
 a whistling in my ears heralded dark.

 wide eyed, frozen, hands on rails tightly cling
 helpless, supine, outside my comfort zone,
 nerves tighter than overtuned guitar strings,
 surrounded, yet never felt so alone.

 It still walks with me now, I shan't forget
 The day that fear and I finally met.


 For contest 'Dancing with description', sponsor- Casarah Nance

 Viv Wigley
 28th October 2015

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Duke Beaufort November 14, 2015 at 7:56 AM Thank-goodness it's over for now. Not a pleasant thing to worry about. But we are lucky to have such services. Imagine how it was before general anesthesia. Ouch. When given the option, some procedures can be done without it, but it requires some faith and most people will decline. Viv Wigley November 14, 2015 at 8:32 AM Even with anaesthesia, still scary. Thanks for dropping by, Duke. Regards, Viv

Elis Artis November 10, 2015 at 7:02 PM Congratulations on the well-deserved win, dear Viv:) It's so vivid, I can imagine everything. +7 I love ir Viv Wigley November 10, 2015 at 9:15 PM Cheers, Elis, appreciate your visit. Viv

Skat A November 10, 2015 at 11:33 AM Viv, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT Viv Wigley November 10, 2015 at 9:14 PM Thanks Skat, a good crop of entries again. Viv x

James Inman November 10, 2015 at 7:50 AM Again Viv, Excellent! Viv Wigley November 10, 2015 at 9:13 PM Thanks James! Regards, Viv

A. Juman November 10, 2015 at 4:34 AM VIV --This is the best write in the contest ----7 ++++++++++++++ Viv Wigley November 10, 2015 at 7:33 AM Thanks, very kind, glad that it appealed to you. Regards, Viv

Scott Williams November 10, 2015 at 3:54 AM Fantastic write, Viv.well deserved win. Viv Wigley November 10, 2015 at 7:33 AM Cheers, Scott, a good contest all round. Regards, Viv

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 10, 2015 at 1:33 AM Love the descriptions Viv, I really danced with your lines.. =`) for me, I will add it my first... I esp like the line with guitar strings.. congrats!~Olive Eloisa =`)

Laura Leiser November 9, 2015 at 11:34 PM Excellent poem, Viv! I felt the fear and dread from the first line! Congrats on your awesome win :) Laura Leiser November 10, 2015 at 12:26 AM AhahaaA! :D Viv Wigley November 10, 2015 at 12:14 AM I envy people like you who can type with one hand and eat chocolate with the other, Laura. Viv x

Lin Lane November 9, 2015 at 7:35 PM Well done, Viv..Congratulations. Pretty riveting. Viv Wigley November 9, 2015 at 10:40 PM That first time feeling of being totally under somebody else's control just freaked me out, Lin. I've got the hang of it now. Thanks for dropping by, Viv x

Richard Lamoureux November 9, 2015 at 6:32 PM Well expressed! Congrats Viv. Viv Wigley November 9, 2015 at 10:41 PM Thanks Richard, and well done you too. Regards, Viv

Sandra Haight November 9, 2015 at 5:33 PM What an experience, Viv, and how well you made the reader feel your fear. Congrats on your nice win. Sandra Viv Wigley November 9, 2015 at 10:42 PM Thanks Sandra, and your entry was a good 'un, too. Viv x

Carrie Richards November 9, 2015 at 3:30 PM This one will strike home with so many of us who have experienced this same fear. It is such a human experience, that happens every day, but to each one who is the patient.....it is one of the most vulnerable times in our lives. Well done! Viv Wigley November 9, 2015 at 10:43 PM Yes, Carrie, to the operating room staff it's just a production line, but to first-timers it's almost the end of the world. Thanks for dropping by, Viv x

James Inman October 30, 2015 at 12:26 PM Incredible write, Viv. Very emotional and descriptive. Viv Wigley October 30, 2015 at 8:52 PM Thanks, James. Poetry is a great way of saying 'AAAARGH!'. Viv

Anne-Lise Andresen October 29, 2015 at 3:07 AM - Really well written, Viv !!! - Luck in content !! - Best wishes for a lovely day - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Viv Wigley October 30, 2015 at 1:41 AM Thanks, Anne Lise, have a lovely weekend, Viv x

Andrea Dietrich October 28, 2015 at 6:41 PM wow, now I think THAT is exactly what she was looking for!! Viv Wigley October 28, 2015 at 8:30 PM Thanks Andrea, I think this is also how my other ha;f felt when she was rushed to hospital before giving birth to my daughter. Thanks for dropping in, Viv x

Lindsay Laurie October 28, 2015 at 6:24 PM G'day Viv... spine tingling stuff mate. Great - Lindsay Viv Wigley October 28, 2015 at 8:32 PM My heart goes out to anyone going into surgery for the first time, Lindsay. Well, not in a medical sense, anyway. Thanks for stopping by. Viv