Dancing In the Dark

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ghostly figures dance diaphanous dresses swirl in the pale moonlight 10-11-17

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/12/2017 8:09:00 PM

I bet she will enjoy the one you chose to put in the contest, Jan. I hope you are doing ok today! I am trying to catch up here tonight but I just don't see it happening!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/13/2017 3:43:00 AM

I wrote another one with 2 verses but I think she only wants one - i have little time for soup at the moment and just can't catch up on writing and commenting:-( hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/11/2017 8:36:00 AM

I love this special write, though I like your other one better because of the twist at the end! But I understand, you might not be able to give two Senryu stanzas! But this one should place high on its own, I love it my friend! Great Work!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2017 11:24:00 AM

Thanks Russell I've mailed the sponsor but had no reply so I will stick with the one poem but i do prefer it with 2 stanzas:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/11/2017 7:41:00 AM

It is a lovely Senryu :) xomo!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2017 7:58:00 AM

Thanks Mo:-) hugs jan xx

Darren White

Date: 10/11/2017 4:49:00 AM

It's a lovely senryu, I love that song by the way :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2017 4:57:00 AM

oh gosh I hadn't thought of the song track I just thought it looked like the figures were dancing:-) hugs jan xx