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THE YOLK'S ON ME It was bath time for my twins, I played a little joke and filled their bathtub with purple dinosaur yolk. The bathtub discoloured, the yolk was scummy but in the purple gloop I found a missing dummy Into the tub I placed my little daughter she shivered, so I poured in hot water; alas the egg congealed, it was a huge mistake… for their next bath time I’ll use chocolate milk shake! Daft and Surreal Contest Sponsored by Kevin Shaw 10-17-17

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Roy Pett

Date: 10/20/2017 3:44:00 PM

Brilliant Jan, purple dinosaur yolk, just brilliant, :)))) GL in contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2017 3:46:00 PM

Thanks Roy I just write and hope the sponsor will like it but its a fun silly poem and I enjoyed writing for the theme:-) hugs jan xx

Chuck Melugin

Date: 10/19/2017 10:21:00 AM

Jan, sooo clever! Your comedic creation is off the charts ! The title is tremendous! I'm still laughing ! a Fav, chuck

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 12:19:00 PM

Thanks Chuck I never know what my muse will come up with next lol:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2017 5:27:00 PM

SO clever, Jan. Gosh, I need to try one of these. The ending is very good on this one.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 12:20:00 PM

Thanks Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2017 5:27:00 PM

and now until later, I am all caught up!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 12:20:00 PM

You know me for writing gibberish lol:-) hugs jan xx

Frederic Parker

Date: 10/18/2017 2:58:00 PM

a confluence of laughter is now the new ring in the tub...a...dub...dub.....smiles dear poet

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 12:21:00 PM

Glad i made you smile:-) hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/18/2017 5:37:00 AM

Ha! Jan, you crack me up! I love the way you wove funny points throughout your poem, dinosaur yolk...yuck, but hilarious! I really enjoyed this amazing Daft and Surreal poem, which I believe you have written quite masterfully! What a grandiose piece, Great Work!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 12:22:00 PM

Thanks Russell I hope you are well on the road to recovery:-) hugs jan x

Viv Wigley

Date: 10/18/2017 1:16:00 AM

Nice to know everything is fine in the house of weird, Jan. You'll be telling me next you ouse bath bomb suppositories .Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2017 12:21:00 PM

You know me for writing gibberish Mr Viv :-) hugs jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 10/17/2017 1:41:00 PM

That was cute. But someone has to clean up the mess. have a nice day my friend.xx.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2017 1:46:00 PM

Eggsactly! hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 10/17/2017 12:03:00 PM

Now who's gonna clean up that mess? Good one Jan, best wishes in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2017 12:06:00 PM

lol she'd need to scramble lots of cleaners together lol:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/17/2017 10:48:00 AM

Hi Jan, I really enjoyed this piece. The imagery is really good. I could just picture the whole scene. I wish you the best of luck in the contest - Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2017 10:54:00 AM

Thanks Alexis:-) hugs jan xx

Lim'Rik Flats

Date: 10/17/2017 8:45:00 AM

Humpty Dumpty sat by the tub//Watching Jan give a tummy rub//to her daughter//playing otter//Cracked him up! Glub Glub. Daft and Surreal? Oh yeah, times 2! And, saladiciously silly! Huggadooshkins ~ j

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2017 9:15:00 AM

Tis the silly season approaching John lol:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/17/2017 8:42:00 AM

Lol :) picturing that goopy mess! My best to you for the contest Jan xomo!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2017 9:15:00 AM

I had fun with the idea Mo:-) hugs jan xx

Gary Smith

Date: 10/17/2017 7:46:00 AM

Lol, good luck in the contest Jan :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/17/2017 7:47:00 AM

The poems I've seen are great fun to read Gary:-) hugs jan xx