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Suzette Richards contest "Curtains"

On a ship Poet (Po) Reason (Re) Po: Look at the billow of the sails, the sea, its black and blue hails. Re: I’ve seen it before, even now and again. I miss the pines outside my window pane. Po: The sea kicked back for you and me, flapping and fraternizing with the enemy. Re: Even dandelions, even their seeds… painted onto my eyes…even the weeds… Po: Banish your thoughts of land and its blubber. Enjoy the fishy smell of salt and deck scrubber. Re: You’ll think differently if today we drown. Curtains could be drawn, take us down. Po: But I hear the wind’s bells and sea carols; the mesmerizing squall without perils. Re: Hide the sound from your ears, Poet. Beautiful sirens and sharks know it. Po: The lyrics drape over the sides, and embark, sad and true, surely don’t lie, moon’s watermark. Re: What a fool with your measuring rod, the rings will tatter, split this boat into a raft without wings. Po: Embraceable you…this mermaid is playful. Her and her lullaby friends, my mind they fill. Re: I fear the tidal wave, its cloth, our shroud. The ripcord and undertow, of teeth, are loud. Po: Auld rhymes and runes have lured me into the sea. I’ll just lie back and listen to the soul-stirring poetry. Re: I see now, I’ve learned my lesson too late. Leave the poet on the shore. Don’t wait! Po: O the climax of this sensual score. It is certain our sea-harem will be unveiled beyond the curtain.

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Date: 5/27/2024 6:06:00 PM
Sounds a little like the quote on a "woman's heart is a deep ocean of secrets".....you did this so well, another fav from you....
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Date: 5/23/2024 8:23:00 AM
Dear Kim, I really felt I was on the exploration of the interplay between poet and reason, piecing together themes of longing, fear, and acceptance. Through their dialogue, you wonderfully capture the essence of human experience—our desires, doubts, and the inevitable pull of fate. We all need to be on this life's journey, even amidst uncertainty. Your words are filled with stirring reflection and introspection. Such a thought-provoking piece. - Blessings, Daniel
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/23/2024 9:00:00 AM
I’m glad youfound the dialogue worthwhile! I step out of my comfort zone to speak in quotes! :) Blessings to you, Daniel! We all appreciate having you in the Poetry Soup circle!
Date: 5/23/2024 3:18:00 AM
Creative one that has good rhythm, rhyme and flow. Reads like a good contender for the contest. way to go. Sara K
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/23/2024 6:08:00 AM
Thank you, Sara!
Date: 5/22/2024 8:45:00 PM
Poet: Unvarnished truth drifts down from the seven spheres. Scientist: Here's asteroidal debris in your eye, my dear... Such a creative dialogue there, Kim. Kudos, Gershon
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/23/2024 6:08:00 AM
LOL…thanks, Gershon!
Date: 5/22/2024 5:08:00 PM
fantastic poem and cleverly written. I loved the mystical nature and your creative words such as 'sea harem.' Your poem should do well in the contest. Have a splendid evening, hugs, Sara
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/22/2024 6:58:00 PM
Thanks for pointing out what you liked! Thank you, Sara!
Date: 5/22/2024 4:02:00 PM
So clever. I really don't know how to do this challenge. But today I have seen two examples with rhyme I need to look into the contest. Well done, Kim
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/22/2024 6:58:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea! :) Hugs

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