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2/27/2025 for A Rose In the Garden of Love Poetry Contest sponsored by Mystic Rose Rose

Premiere Contest WinnerCupid's Stand-in Does His Darndest

My dearest Mrs., Ms., Mystic, or Miss, 
this morning Venus had a special "ask". 
She said to make you fall in loving bliss,
for Cupid's ill and not up to the task.
I'm nervous as I'm kind of new at this.
My first question, should I wear a mask?
I guess I am off to a rocky start.
Oh my, how ever will I win your heart?

Poetic angel from our earthly sphere,
I come with a toolkit to enchant you. 
I will whisper sweet nothings in your ear.
Three amorous wishes I will grant you. 
I'll hold you when you find yourself in fear. 
We will dance barefoot under skies of blue.  
In my bag, you'll find a twenty-carat ring.
I'll give you that or any other thing.

Hmm, let me see, what do I know of love?
We can walk in the ocean's crashing tide, 
hear the gentle coo of a turtle dove, 
fly above the clouds on a rainbow slide,
carefree as we view the world from above,
while I serenade you as we take that ride.
I think by now we should be holding hands
if I'm to meet the god of love's demands. 

Shall we dine out tonight by candlelight
or gaily pick wildflowers in a field?
Allow imagination to take flight, 
so that you will finally softly yield, 
and passionately fall in love despite
I'm Cupid's stand-in with no dart to wield. 
I've failed to fulfill Venus's orders. 
Oh, please don't report me to headquarters.
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Ashley Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 6:49 PM
Dear David, congratulations for your success in Mystic Rose’s contest. A well deserved trophy win for this wonderful whimsical romantic poem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Crandall Avatar
March 4, 2025 at 3:32 PM
Thanks, I appreciate your comments Susan!
Drowley Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 12:03 PM
Congratulations on taking first place! Keep up your excellent efforts.
Crandall Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 12:13 PM
Thanks David!
Grasso Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 4:32 AM
Congratulations on your top honors, David! Well done!...Fran
Crandall Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 8:20 AM
Thanks Fran!
Andresen Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 2:00 AM
- Congratulations on your top win in the contest... a pleasure to read, David :) - hugs
Crandall Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 8:20 AM
Thanks, and glad you liked it!
mysore Avatar
March 2, 2025 at 10:29 PM
Congratulations on your win dear poet. cheers!!
Crandall Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 8:22 AM
lol - does this mean I get to keep my job?
Liguori Avatar
March 2, 2025 at 5:51 PM
Congratulations David. A well deserved podium winner!!!
Crandall Avatar
March 2, 2025 at 8:45 PM
Haha, thanks James...I'd like to thank my director...
Dietrich Avatar
March 2, 2025 at 4:22 PM
Haha. A well deserved trophy win I see here
Crandall Avatar
March 2, 2025 at 4:39 PM
Thanks Andrea!
Rose  Avatar
March 2, 2025 at 4:21 PM
Thank you for joining my contest, this poem won me over for its originality Congrats on your 1st place win
Crandall Avatar
March 2, 2025 at 4:39 PM
Thanks for having the contest. It was fun...and wow!
Kendrick Avatar
February 28, 2025 at 4:51 AM
Ahhh!! Such a nice one. If it is for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. thanks for sharing. Sara K
Crandall Avatar
March 3, 2025 at 8:20 AM
Thanks Sara!
Greenhough Avatar
February 27, 2025 at 9:11 PM
I'd say this is a funny, clever love poem. A bumbling cupid type won't ruin this romance. I hope the stand-in doesn't lose his job.
Crandall Avatar
February 27, 2025 at 9:22 PM
haha, I'm crossing my fingers for this fella. Maybe he's like Clarence in It's a Wonderful Life.
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