Nette Onclaud Poet Tanka

Crushed Weeds

stencils of night’s mist

brush your graveyard with ash dye

 laying on crushed weeds...

      this heart spills a requiem

and my tune—love’s offering.



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Brian Strand's Contest 245

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Sandra Haight December 7, 2016 at 8:23 PM Sadly beautiful, Nette. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win! Hugs, Sandra

Janis Medders Tobechi December 6, 2016 at 10:55 PM Congratulations on your trophy win. Great tanka.

White Wolf December 6, 2016 at 10:52 PM An excellent win, Nette!

Andrea Dietrich December 6, 2016 at 10:40 PM Wonderful, Nette. Big congrats

Deborah Burch December 6, 2016 at 8:47 PM Big congrats Nette!! Well done!! Big Hugggs. Deb

Sara Kendrick February 20, 2015 at 6:11 PM Congrats on your deligthful winning work..Sara

Debbie Guzzi February 20, 2015 at 3:46 PM Congrad's on your win nette! Light & Love

Poet Destroyer A February 18, 2015 at 9:55 PM Nice win...PD

Andrea Dietrich February 16, 2015 at 9:33 AM Excellent, Nette. Congrats.

Skat A February 15, 2015 at 11:57 PM Nette, Awesome Tanka Tears win. ~Skat~

Eve Roper February 15, 2015 at 3:08 PM Nette, an artist you are, a 7 wonderful deep, sad write. Congratulations on your win. Blessings Eve

Jan Allison February 15, 2015 at 11:29 AM Dropping back with my congratulations:-) Hugs Jan xx

Carrie Richards February 14, 2015 at 6:42 PM A big win for you, with this stunning tanka, Nette ! Congratulations !

Sandra Haight February 14, 2015 at 3:10 PM Nette, a huge, heartfelt congratulations to you for your well-deserved First Place win! Hugs, Sandra

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 13, 2015 at 10:32 PM Spectacular, Nette! The sorrow and love is weaved into the imagery...best wishes in Rick's contest :) hugs, Rhonda

Anne-Lise Andresen February 13, 2015 at 6:57 AM - Oh, lovely written Nette - Luck in contest !- I wish you a romantic Valentine's Day, and a beautiful weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :) <3 <3 <3

Arthur Vaso February 13, 2015 at 12:22 AM You just melted my heart

Sara Kendrick February 12, 2015 at 8:42 AM Uniquely written contest entry..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go..Thanks for dropping by..Sara

Monterey Sirak February 12, 2015 at 8:30 AM Your images sing of sadness and longing. Beautiful!

David Meade February 11, 2015 at 8:07 PM This outpouring of grief is poignant and deep . . . a perfect love offering even the mist gives of itself!

Leon Datu February 11, 2015 at 5:48 PM Nette, that thud of pain creates a heartfelt sadness, yet flowing with some tenderness. You are a poet of high caliber, "and my tune—love’s offering."

Jan Allison February 11, 2015 at 5:20 PM Such a beautiful flow to this deep sad write Nette;-) Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx 7 xx