Crucible

Crucible Peer into an unpredictable universe Of ambivalent depths A calyx cul-de-sac tipped up Into a crucible of the unexplainable Where curiosity strides into pure moments of mystique Fields of glory in bluebells Rusted milestones Hail ravaged wheat. Echoes of the prophetic tongue Swirl in chanted brews and prayers Mists, parted by potions, Bleed new horizons rising like cities lost In hundred year mists Brewed in a grail uncovered from eon’s smothering dusts Tasting ego and humility That knows its need for divinity. Mercy metastasized in every grieving limb And through the organ of the soul Led through foreshadow’s chalice Into unfathomable days yet to be born. 5-1-23 Contest: Up to 20 Lines Sponsor: Sotto Poet Twenty lines.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/3/2023 12:44:00 PM

You really know how to write free verse, Sam. I could never do one like this with such unique images!

Sam Kauffman
Date: 5/4/2023 12:50:00 PM

I am so grateful for your wonderful compliment Andrea. Thank you While I have always loved free verse it is my writing experiences and friends like you here on the soup that have helped me hone this poetic form with loving feedback and encouragement. What a treasure! A pearl of inestimable worth. And, I know you would write some wonderful free verse with your creativity and use of words! Take care!! Blessings!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/3/2023 12:44:00 PM

oh, and congrats on the win

Sam Kauffman
Date: 5/4/2023 11:11:00 AM

Thank you!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/3/2023 10:24:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a write. I enjoyed it. Have a blessed day..................

Sam Kauffman
Date: 5/4/2023 12:52:00 PM

Thank you so much Paula! Blessings to you!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/3/2023 10:07:00 AM

- A deep poem with meaning and great lines metaphorically, Sam :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs

Valsa George

Date: 5/2/2023 11:18:00 PM

"Brewed in a grail uncovered from eon’s smothering dusts/ Tasting ego and humility/ That knows its need for divinity." As ever, your poem is so deep, highlighting the ambivalence of life and the need for divinity. Congratulations dear Sam on your well deserved win.

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 5/2/2023 9:55:00 PM

A deep write, magnificently composed. Warmest congratulations on your win, Sam. Truly enjoyed the write

Sam Kauffman
Date: 5/4/2023 11:03:00 AM

Thank you so much Seeker. It is a gift to know you enjoyed this poem. Your amazing contest themes have been the source of so many moments of meditation for me. I have to give you credit for leading me down these paths exploring challenging concepts. So grateful. Take care. Sending you many blessings!!

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/2/2023 9:20:00 PM

Sam, Congratulations on crafting such a lovely poem that combines the elegance of poetry with the wisdom of thought.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 5/4/2023 10:56:00 AM

Thank you so much Lasaad! This theme captured my imagination and would not let me go until I finished this poem. I am so grateful for your beautiful feedback and constant support my friend. It is a rich gift indeed. Blessings to you!

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/2/2023 1:59:00 PM

I like the second verse best, then "mercy metastasized for eternity. What a thought that is? Deep and meaningful, Sam. Almost like figuring out a riddle. LOL I think I got it:)

Sam Kauffman
Date: 5/2/2023 4:10:00 PM

Thank you so much Daniel. I think you "got it" too! The phrase that you like went zinging around in my head looking for meaning for quite awhile. I was happy it found a home in this poem. Hope you are well. Take care. Blessings! So grateful for your always perceptive feedback and poems!!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/2/2023 4:11:00 AM

Interesting lines penned about crucible. We are in the beginning of a crucible here on this earth. Those that don't know what lies ahead need to read Revelations. Thanks for sharing this one and for dropping by my page. Your work reads like a good contender in the contest to me. Way to go. Sara

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 5/1/2023 3:21:00 PM

Sam, your methaphors are magnificent, I am loving 'an unpredictable universe/of ambivalent depts' and 'like cities lost/in hundred year mists' - your last lines so intriguing, the days yet to be born are so infinite~

Sam Kauffman
Date: 5/4/2023 11:10:00 AM

Dear Michelle, I am so grateful for your lovely message and encouragement that deeply inspires me. Many thanks coming your way. This poem struggled to be born but I am grateful that I stuck with it. I really like the outcome! Sending you blessings!