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For 1394 Poetry Contest sponsored by Brian Strand

Crowdown

I stepped outside, feeling low. 
There, before me, stood a crow.
He cooly looked me up and down
as he wore a beaky frown.
I wondered, would I lose my blues
if I could wear this birdy's shoes?
Would his life be more complete,
he asked, if he could have my seat?
But I wasn't sitting on a seat,
and no shoes were on his feet.
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Dietrich Avatar
June 30, 2025 at 11:16 AM
Love your whimsy. I was wanting to say birdy feet as I read it. Instead of bird's feet
Crandall Avatar
June 30, 2025 at 4:50 PM
Thanks Andrea! I think you are right! For one thing, I think the meter sounds a little better with "birdy". I hope you don't mind I'm snatching your idea and changing right now.
Fowler Avatar
June 30, 2025 at 10:42 AM
Just because you don't see them, doesn't mean they're not there. :))
Crandall Avatar
June 30, 2025 at 4:49 PM
Haha, I think he was wearing saddle shoes! :-))
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