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Crowd Control

I have two pet snakes that I keep in a cage -
   I've owned them since I was a very young age.
The elder is Wills and the younger is Harry;
   they're perfectly harmless, but look rather scary.

One day as I stood in a sizable crowd,
   some guy bumped my snakes and his laugh was quite loud.
So I let one loose in that cramped elevator, 
   the folks all dashed out and said, "Bye! See you later!"

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Susan Lawrence August 24, 2021 at 8:03 AM John, Love the tale you have spun and certainly an emotional response at the end!! That would be me ! Getting out of there! All the best to you, Susan :)

Brandy Nicole August 19, 2021 at 7:43 PM Yes, that would be my reaction too. Something like, "Yikes, I'm outta here ! !" I could've handled you letting loose a stink bomb. (Giggle) I cannot handle snakes slithering around. This is cute, clever and creative. Always a joy to read words from your pen. :) Hugs, Brandy John Watt August 19, 2021 at 10:45 PM And it's always a joy to see your warm comments. Thank you, my friend

Michelle Faulkner August 16, 2021 at 4:34 PM Makes me think of that so-bad-its-good movie Snakes on a Plane (by the way, are they named after the heirs to the British throne?) John Watt August 19, 2021 at 10:43 PM I had a friend who named her cats Wills and Harry (yes, after the royals) so I borrowed that for the poem. I won't be watching a snake-based movie anytime soon, lol

Gershon Wolf August 10, 2021 at 8:15 PM So refreshing to see an entry in this contest that is not about a certain type of gas that emits a foul odor, esp. when confined to closed rectangular area! Nicely penned. Hope you win! Take good care, Gershon

Jennifer Proxenos August 10, 2021 at 9:46 AM This is a different take completely and indeed clever - great creativity here and funny, although i wouldn't have just ran out i would be screaming with fright or have got an instant paralysis attack. Hugs and blessings my friend. Jennifer.

Connie Marcum Wong August 9, 2021 at 12:26 AM John, I like that you did not go with the obvious on this one. As a matter fact I like snakes and they have their own personality amazingly. Spiders are a different story! I enjoyed this. Blessings xxoo

Emilia James August 8, 2021 at 3:00 PM Like your very clever take on this John and I would not of been seen for dust either lol, Emilia.

Eve Roper August 7, 2021 at 10:04 PM Haha, John , I like your take on the contest. Good luck in the contest.

Gary Radice August 7, 2021 at 2:36 AM John, I'm laughing at the names Wills and Harry. You're talking royal pythons here :) Great fun and good luck in the contest! Cheers - Gary

Beryl Edmonds August 6, 2021 at 12:22 PM A very good take on the contest theme John. Did someone shout “Send for the exterminator” when you let a snake loose in the elevator?…… Belle

Regina Mcintosh August 5, 2021 at 5:09 PM Cute. God bless you always, Love, Gina

Tom Cunningham August 5, 2021 at 4:06 PM Lol, love it John, if I saw one of them I'd be first out the door. Tom

Alexis Y. August 5, 2021 at 3:51 PM Wow! John, This is a good take on the contest theme. I would have been part of the crowd saying,” Bye! See you later!” I enjoyed the read. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Jan Allison August 5, 2021 at 2:38 PM oh what a wonderful witty take on the letting one loose theme:-) hugs Jan xx John Watt August 7, 2021 at 2:11 PM Thank you, dear friend. I suppose some will think I don't know what the phrase "let one loose on the elevator" means, but was just trying to see if I could take it in an unexpected direction. Love your entry for the contest. Hugs ~ John