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Crowd Control

I have two pet snakes that I keep in a cage -
   I've owned them since I was a very young age.
The elder is Wills and the younger is Harry;
   they're perfectly harmless, but look rather scary.

One day as I stood in a sizable crowd,
   some guy bumped my snakes and his laugh was quite loud.
So I let one loose in that cramped elevator, 
   the folks all dashed out and said, "Bye! See you later!"

Copyright © John Watt | Year Posted 2021

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Susan Lawrence Date: 8/24/2021 8:03:00 AM John, Love the tale you have spun and certainly an emotional response at the end!! That would be me ! Getting out of there! All the best to you, Susan :) Login to Reply

Brandy Nicole Date: 8/19/2021 7:43:00 PM Yes, that would be my reaction too. Something like, "Yikes, I'm outta here ! !" I could've handled you letting loose a stink bomb. (Giggle) I cannot handle snakes slithering around. This is cute, clever and creative. Always a joy to read words from your pen. :) Hugs, Brandy Login to Reply John Watt Date: 8/19/2021 10:45:00 PM And it's always a joy to see your warm comments. Thank you, my friend

Michelle Faulkner Date: 8/16/2021 4:34:00 PM Makes me think of that so-bad-its-good movie Snakes on a Plane (by the way, are they named after the heirs to the British throne?) Login to Reply John Watt Date: 8/19/2021 10:43:00 PM I had a friend who named her cats Wills and Harry (yes, after the royals) so I borrowed that for the poem. I won't be watching a snake-based movie anytime soon, lol

Gershon Wolf Date: 8/10/2021 8:15:00 PM So refreshing to see an entry in this contest that is not about a certain type of gas that emits a foul odor, esp. when confined to closed rectangular area! Nicely penned. Hope you win! Take good care, Gershon Login to Reply

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 8/10/2021 9:46:00 AM This is a different take completely and indeed clever - great creativity here and funny, although i wouldn't have just ran out i would be screaming with fright or have got an instant paralysis attack. Hugs and blessings my friend. Jennifer. Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 8/9/2021 12:26:00 AM John, I like that you did not go with the obvious on this one. As a matter fact I like snakes and they have their own personality amazingly. Spiders are a different story! I enjoyed this. Blessings xxoo Login to Reply

Emilia James Date: 8/8/2021 3:00:00 PM Like your very clever take on this John and I would not of been seen for dust either lol, Emilia. Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 8/7/2021 10:04:00 PM Haha, John , I like your take on the contest. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply

Gary Radice Date: 8/7/2021 2:36:00 AM John, I'm laughing at the names Wills and Harry. You're talking royal pythons here :) Great fun and good luck in the contest! Cheers - Gary Login to Reply

Beryl Edmonds Date: 8/6/2021 12:22:00 PM A very good take on the contest theme John. Did someone shout “Send for the exterminator” when you let a snake loose in the elevator?…… Belle Login to Reply

Regina Mcintosh Date: 8/5/2021 5:09:00 PM Cute. God bless you always, Love, Gina Login to Reply

Tom Cunningham Date: 8/5/2021 4:06:00 PM Lol, love it John, if I saw one of them I'd be first out the door. Tom Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 8/5/2021 3:51:00 PM Wow! John, This is a good take on the contest theme. I would have been part of the crowd saying,” Bye! See you later!” I enjoyed the read. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 8/5/2021 2:38:00 PM oh what a wonderful witty take on the letting one loose theme:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply John Watt Date: 8/7/2021 2:11:00 PM Thank you, dear friend. I suppose some will think I don't know what the phrase "let one loose on the elevator" means, but was just trying to see if I could take it in an unexpected direction. Love your entry for the contest. Hugs ~ John