Critter Alarm Tanka

carried them away
gripped ...... between her teeth was how
she has moved her cubs.....
safer place..... away from harm.....
she knows....when danger lurks near

nose sniffing the air ...
the scent of a male is close.....
he will kill the cubs ......
so he can have his wicked way ...
even if they are his own....

She hides them away ....
not a whimper must they make .....
 or .....they will be found ....
the lioness breathes deeply ....
willing to die to save them ....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 4/29/2014 2:09:00 PM
So glad to see this remarkable poem winning in the contest. Congratulations! Best wishes, carolyn
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Date: 4/27/2014 7:08:00 PM
Mother love at its most high. congratulations on a great win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/27/2014 6:52:00 PM
I'm so glad this one won, seren. I do remember it!! Congratulations. Are you feeling well? Wondering about your health.
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Date: 4/27/2014 7:15:00 AM
A brilliant piece made you win, congrats, seren
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Date: 4/27/2014 2:11:00 AM
Awesome write on mothers love n fears ! Splendid ! Congrats on great win Seren!
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Date: 4/27/2014 1:49:00 AM
Seren, awesome, winning tanka.... congrats on your super win. ... xox~ LINDA
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Date: 4/15/2014 11:13:00 AM
Dear Seren, I didn't know that the cubs' fathers would kill their own offspring. What a compelling and somewhat heartbreaking poem. You made the reader "feel" and that is the best a poet can hope to achieve. Love, carolyn
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Seren Roberts
Date: 4/15/2014 7:21:00 PM
Thanks for stopping by Carolyn, glad you enjoyed my poem....Seren
Date: 4/13/2014 11:32:00 AM
those mamas have such a great instinct for protecting their young. Nice series in the critter contest, Seren. I hope you are feeling well.
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Seren Roberts
Date: 4/15/2014 7:20:00 PM
I am well thanks Andrea, thanks for your kind words ...Seren
Date: 4/12/2014 8:19:00 AM
Very good write Seren; enjoyable and strongly expressed. gl in contest. // paul
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Date: 4/15/2014 7:19:00 PM
Thank you Paul for stopping by....Seren
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